Hi everybody, this is my first ever fanfiction that I'm posting on here. I've had this story in mind months ago but I've been really apprehensive to do/post it b/c there are so many great writers on here I wasn't sure if mine would be good enough. I remember reading that fellow writer Jazmineinpink (who's one of the many great writers on here) had the same issue as me but decided to keep on writing and if she's able to keep writing such a good potential story then maybe I can too. But now I'm rambling, so let's get on with the story. And to all of my readers I do appreciate honest feedback and criticism(but not if their harsh). I'm an amateur writer so every critic can help me improve in my writing. Thanks
Disclaimer: Don't own the Bonnies, they belong to Sony Pictures and of course Aaron Mcgruder
Here we enter the nice suburban town called Woodcrest. The sun was shining, the sky was blue with not one gray cloud in the sky. We go over to Timid Deer Lane, as the sun shines bright upon the neighborhood, we look around and admire the relaxing, tranquil, peac-
CRASH
Oh nevermind…
Skip over to the Freeman house where there seems to be a lot of commotion. There are sounds of (fragile) items being smashed and there is a lot of yelling. You guessed it, the Freeman brothers are at it….again
"I Ain't Playin with you Riley!" Huey yelled annoyed
SMASH
Enter into the house and we see Huey with his signature angry scowl, his body was tense and his fists were tightly closed. He stood firmly and stared down at Riley who was on the floor 5ft away clutching his chest. He looked up and made eye contact with his older brother. An angry scowl came on Riley's face. He quickly got back on his feet and charged towards Huey.
He throws a punch but Huey being Huey quickly dodges it, causing Riley to wobble forward and trip only to grasp his balance at the last second. He turns to charge at Huey again but before he can move Huey quickly jumps and spins in the air and kicks Riley in the face, sending the young boy flying down the hall.
Riley groaned in pain then looked to his right and saw his airsoft bb gun that Huey knocked out of his hand earlier. Huey, who was looking over at his brother notices him staring at the gun and immediately figures out Riley's plan. As Riley ran for the gun, Huey quickly runs after him. He manages to catch up with Riley and tackles him to the ground. Riley begins to fight back but struggles to break free.
"Aye Man Get Off of Me!" Riley yelled as he struggled to get Huey off, but of course it didn't work. Huey then he turns him over and attempts to pin his arms down.
"Now see" He says grunting "I always knew you were a gay ass nigga" Huey growls and begins to strangle Riley and Riley begins to strangle Huey.
Meanwhile…..
Robert Jebadiah Freeman aka Granddad is in the bathroom taking a shower. After enjoying a nice & relaxing shower, he exits the tub while humming a happy tune and goes over to the bathroom mirror. He wipes the fogged mirror until he sees his reflection
"Well… hello handsome" He says proudly
With the mirror now cleared, he is finally able to see and admire his "remarkable" features.
"Ooo-wee! I look good" He turns & bends down revealing his bare behind to the mirror "Look at this, look at this fiiinne ass" He says as he slaps his behind "Mmhm, the ladies can't keep their hands off this nice, firm, sexy ass. Ha-ha!"
He goes to grab a towel and wraps it around his waist then returns to the mirror while happily singing in his famous tune "Sexy, sexy sexxxyyyy" He continues to admire himself in the mirror and continues to be completely unaware of all the ruckus going on outside of the bathroom.
He begins to flex his arms "Yeah…Boi! Mr. Bitchez still got it" He grunts as he flexes "Still got game, still irresistible, still-"
CRASH
He quickly turns his head towards the door and looks confused. But before he can go and investigate the noise, the door bursts open revealing the boys rolling around the floor tackling each other, unaware of the fact that they nearly knocked down their grandfather. Luckily he managed get out of the way at the last second, but was still a bit startled.
"BOYS!" He says angrily while trying to keep his balance "What the hell!?"
The boys ignored him and continued to fight. They briefly separate from each other. Riley immediately charges at Huey, but Huey quickly dodges the attack at the last second then he puts Riley in a choke hold and begins to strangle him. As Riley struggles to break free from his brother's grasp, Robert who was still watching them and was quickly growing more aggravated, had finally had enough.
"AHHHHH! I'm sick of this! What the hell is wrong with ya'll?!" The boys immediately stop their fighting and look up at their angered grandfather while still remaining in their positions.
"Here I am enjoying some "me" time and here ya'll come, barging in with this bull-shit again! Don't ya'll have anything better to do then make your granddaddy's life even more miserable!?" He huffs as he moves passed them and grabs his robe of the hook "Damn kids ruining my peace I knew I should of drowned both of their littles asses when I had the chance" He grumbles as he leaves the bathroom, leaving his grandchildren on the floor. The boys briefly look towards the door in confusion, then quickly go back to fighting.
"WHAT THE FUCK?!"
The boys immediately stop fighting and look towards the door
"BOYS!"
Moments later the Freemans are now in the living room or what used to be the living room anyway. There were clothes all over the floor and on the furniture, the coffee table along with most of the walls in the living room, the kitchen and the doorway were filled with bullet holes, there were little remains of an antique vase on the floor and coffee table, pieces of broken records that was scattered all throughout the room, and TV was once again broken as the telephone had smashed the screen.
Huey and Riley who seemed to have calmed down and both appeared to be pretty remorseful, watched their grandfather as he quickly paced back and forth in his red robe, nearly burning a hole in the floor and mumbling curses under his breath.
"Damn it!" He finally blurts out as he simultaneously paces and looks at the boys. "I can't believe this! What do ya'll have to say for yourselves!?"
"Well…" Riley says sounding remorsefully and avoiding his grandfather's glare "Without admitting any guilt, we wanna say we real sorry"
Huey looking just as remorseful as his brother, looks at his grandfather and says "We know your upset and you should be-"
"You Damn Right I Should Be!" He says interrupting his grandson "Look at my house! Look at my living room" He picks up a piece of what used to be a record "And this… this used to be my Clarence Cater record! I've told ya'll so many times to stay away from my damn records!" He throws the broken record on the floor and stomps on in repeatedly then screams then looks back at the boys "I'm sick and tired of this! I'm sick and tired of you crumb snatchers! Everyday it's the same thing. All y'all do is eat, sleep, waste my electricity, and break my good stuff and fuck up my house! Look at my TV!" He looks back "Ya'll killed the TV again by throwing the phone in to it" He looks back at the boys "What the hell were ya'll doing with the phone anyway!?. I'm too old for this, you think I wanna deal with this shit at the end of my life!? Ya'll need to have common sense, or better yet I need to beat it in to you" He puts his hand towards his waist to grab his belt then realizes that he's only wearing his bath robe "Imma get my belt" He grumbled as he left the room leaving the boys with blank and confused expressions. Riley looks at his brother who returns the glare "Well, it could be worse" He shrugs.
AHH!" The boys look towards the direction of the scream and hear a loud thud. "BOYS!"
An Hour Later…
KNOCK KNOCK
Granddad; now wearing his signature outfit, a white shirt covered by his famous green sweater, dark blue pants and dress shoes; goes to answer the door. He opens it and is greeted by none other than his corny, whiny and a complete square of a man and neighbor, Tom Dubois.
"Hiya Robert!" He says cheerfully
"Mm-hmm" Robert growls back then walks away towards the living room. Tom, looking confused takes it as a "just come in" and enters the house.
"Geez, what's eating yo-?" he stops mid-sentence and looks around and sees the entrance hallway a complete mess. There were shards of fragile objects on the floor, clothes that were thrown all over the floor even some on the stairs and bullet holes on the left side of the hall. Tom then stops looking around then heads into the living room that now looks a bit better however Tom can't help but stare at the busted television.
"My gosh Robert, what happened in here?"
"I'll tell you what happened" He says in an irritated tone "Its my damn demon grandsons!. It's like this everyday! Everyday it's the same thing, they end up getting in to a fight and start trying to fuck each other up then they end up fucking up my house! Y'know Tom I used to have a great life, I was able to do whatever I wanted, go where ever I wanted whenever I wanted and just relax, but not anymore. Cause of them I can't relax, I can't go to the mall, I can't even go to see a damn movie! Every time I go, I comeback and the house is a complete disaster" he puts both hands on his head then slouches and groans loudly. Tom watches on as Robert has his mini breakdown.
Tom sighs "I'm real sorry man, where are the boys now?"
"Upstairs still fixing the rest of the stuff they messed up"
"Gosh, sounds to me like you need a break. Why don't you go take a break tonight and go see a movie or something and take some time for yourself. I'd love to stay and watch the boys but I have to work late all this week, so why don't you call up a babysitter?" He says in a hopeful tone.
"Nah, not possible"
"Why not?"
"Cause every time I left the boys with a sitter, I always came back and found them in the corner shitting themselves and then I have to pay them extra to fix the damages and beg their sorry asses not to sue me"
Tom briefly turns away briefly looking a bit hesitant "Well… the boys can be a bit rough"
"Yeah, plus I couldn't get one over here and I've tried but every teenager in this town and possibly in the entire state or even in the entire world wouldn't want to babysit the boys. After the whole incident with that brace face girl, the boys were put on some website and since then nobody wants to look after them"
"Gosh, that's rough can't you get Ruckus to do it?"
"He's too busy "working" and said that being with the white folks not only looks good on his resume, it's a hell of a lot better than watching two demon monkeys"
"Wow. Well don't worry Robert, I'm sure things will brighten up eventually" He says still being hopeful
CRASH
Both men look up to the ceiling and listen to the sounds of crashing and loud thuds. Robert then glares angrily at Tom, who awkwardly smiles and shrugs, then gets up and growls and leaves the room and heads upstairs.
"BOYS!"
Meanwhile….. Somewhere in the heart of Woodcrest
A bus pulls up at the busstop. Stepping out of the bus was a tall, young black woman with smooth mocha colored skin, wine colored eyes and straight dark brown hair that went past her shoulders. She was wearing a pale blue hoodie, black khakis and black and white sneakers. She had on a backpack and was holding a medium sized suit case by her side.
She closed her eyes and took in a deep breath and exhaled calmly. She reopens her eyes and looks ahead of her.
"Alright..." She says in a determined tone "Here we go".
Alrighty, that's it so far, what'd you guys think? Next chapter we'll be introduced to my new character. So let's see how you guys feel about her.
I should also explain why I chose to write a "sitter" story. I've read the other two "sitter" stories and (no offense to the authors who wrote them) I felt like they could of been better. They were ok but I felt like the boys in both stories were just out of character. Huey & Riley do tend to be a bit aggressive and can be calm & sort of friendly (in their own ways) from time to time, but more importantly they don't warm up to just anybody especially not that easily and that's how it was in both stories. I felt like the authors should of stayed true to both of their characters (especially Riley's) completely and not partially. Huey wouldn't really care, but Riley basically wouldn't make it easy for you (unless if you were a "wanna be" thug just like him of course).He I believe would of caused more problems for the sitter(Remember what happened in Home Alone). Again no offense to the authors of those stories, its just my opinion.
With this story, I'm going to do my best a keep both boys in character (If I'm not please let me know, I love these guys (H & R) and I wanna get them right). Again please review and tell me what you think so far
Thanks for reading :)