Hi! This is my first Fanfic! Please rate fairly, fave, and review! I would appreciate it alot! Can I get some effective critiscm? for example you could say something like "try to seperate your words and add quotation marks" instead of "I couldnt read your work so you suck and you should stop writing in fanfic n00b". Overall thnx!
Riiiing! Riiiiing! Riiiiiiiiing! "Uhhhhh" said a sleepy young boy the age of ten. Click! The boy turned the alarm clock off and rose to his feet.
This boy was named Aaidyn. He was one of the couple hundred people in Pallet Town. Pallet Town was were the nefarious Proffesor Oak lived and where many children the age of ten start their journey to be a pokemon master. Many kids get their first pokemon at Oaks Labratory.
Aaidyn blinked many times. He was urging his mom to let him drink coffee but his mother said that it wasn't healthy for him and that he was a growing boy. The boy checked the calendar besides his poster of the elite four. The calender stated that today was March 1st "March first huh" Aaidyn said. "March 1st... 1st... 1st..." Aaidyn was saying to himself. "March 1st!" Aaidyn shouted in sucess. "Today's the day i can get my first pokemon!" the boy exclaimed.
He ran downstairs in excitement. "Mom, I am going to the Proffesors lab and start my pokemon journey". "Okay just remember to visit sometimes" the boys mom stated. "I'll miss you bunches". "I will miss you too mother" Aaidyn said. They hugged and Aaidyn grabbed his backpack and ran out the door.
The sun was up, the Pidgeys were chirping, the rattatas were a-munching, and Aaidyn was running like a wild man. He couldnt wait to get his first pokemon. The young man was running past yelping growlithes, small buildings, and hipees, what Pallet Town was known for.
When Aaidyn reached Oaks lab he squealed. He was the first to reach the lab out of his friends. Just then he saw one of his friends round the corner.
This boy was called Jacob and he shared his loved of pokemon with Aaidyn. His dream was to become a elite four and be better than Aaidyn. He was Aaidyn's best friend. Jacob was a few inches taller than Aaidyn.
"Hey Aaidyn" Jacob said cooly. "Sup" Aaidyn said back. "Man and I thought for sure that I would get here first" Jacob said dissapointedly. "To be truthful I am really sleepy" Aaidyn stated.
The boys caught a glimpse of someone rounding the corner. They knew exactly who he was. Or SHE was.
Her name was Snana. She was the prettiest girl in Pallet Town. Shana was a few inches smaller than Aaidyn. She was really nice and Aaidyn really liked her personality. She was pretty hyper like Aaidyn but she also loved battles Like the boys.
"Hey Shana!" Aaidyn Yelled. "Yo" Jacob said. "Hi guys" Shana Shouted. "Now that we are all here we should go get our first Pokemon!" Aaidyn said. "Rad" Jacob said. "Yeah" Snana exclaimed. The Friends held hands walking into Prof. Oaks Labratory.