Ok here's my first Anime Fanfiction poem! Please be nice and tell me how I can improve!

I don't own Bleach

LOST

You stand there in front of me

Like a phantom from my morbid dreams

You tilt your head and grin at me

Laugh at me

Fear me?

You, the other me

My ghost

My own personal abyss

You sneer at me and lift your sword

Our sword, our power

As one

You lunge at me

Like a predator on the hunt

Closing in

Closer now

I can see hell's fire in your eyes

A flame so hot

It burns to look

A black emptiness where you can't even fall

A hole

A hollow

Lost

Please tell me what you think of my first Anime poem :3 thanks!