From Three Magic Users, A Magical Duck, and a Loverboy to Fan Fiction Critics: FanFicCritic's Apprentices Prologue


Sae Sawanoguchi, Takeo Takakura, and Ayanojo Aburatsubo were taking a visit to a town known as Goldcrown. There was a ballet academy of the same name, but it was shut down; The building was demolished and replaced with an average private institute for college students (in the European sense, but American and Japanese students also learn in this Germanic atmosphere, as the oldest students in the school.)

Goldcrown University was their new home. At least for now. Takeo and Aburatsubo are both college sophomores now. Sae is a college freshman. Takeo and Aburatsubo are now 19, while Sae is 18. They were both adults and it felt weird when the students that were native in Goldcrown are actually of age to be high school students back in Japan. Then again, in Europe, you graduate high school when you're only 14.

Sae was able to pass an exam that would have made her enroll here too. Sae may be a klutz but she was far from an idiot. In fact, Sae was book smart. Street-wise? Well, that's a whole other story entirely.

Sae bumped into some kids the first day of school. They weren't picking on this boy, but Sae was curious as to why they surrounded him. That's when she realized the kids were of the opposite sex to the white haired boy.

"Did you just bump Mytho!", a stuck up girl with blonde locks hissed.

"Hey Lilie! Leave her be! She's probably lost!", the only normal girl... At least, normal in Sae's eyes, yelped defensively.

"Oh Duck! You're so concerned. How about while we talk more with Mytho..."

Then Sae heard foot steps, but it sounded strange. They weren't human at all.

"While you introduce the new girl to Femio!"

The girls ran off, pushing Mytho the opposite direction.

"F-fe-Femio?!", Sae shivered. She was worried he was either the class bully, or the token nerdy kid.

"Don't be scared. He may be... eccentric, but he's a pretty nice guy once you deal with his... oddities."

Sae was wondering if Femio was like Aburatsubo.

"Bonjour mademoiselles!"

French?! Not even Aburatsubo knew French! He was trying to tutor Sae and Takeo in English as it is! If Aburatsubo were that talented and were here at the moment, then Sae would ask what the mystery boy just said.

Rose petals started to rain on the girls.

"He's here...", Duck muttered.

The rest of the classmates started to move away, the girls hiding in restrooms, janitor's closets and teacher's lounges in the hallway as Sae gasped. There was a cow in the building! And a maroon-haired boy was riding it!

"I... uh... Cow... uggh...", Sae shrieked in confusion.

"You didn't know?", Duck muttered, "He's the school's... shall we call it, 'Casanova'."

Were they serious?!

"By the way... I freaked out about the cow the first time as well..."

Sae got up and started to run, but as always, the ground pulled her and she fell face-forward towards it.

"Ah... Such a timid soul... I bet you in Japan they call it, the 'tsundere', non?"

Duck stood up.

"Mr. Femio, do you think we can actually have a more... casual introduction?"

Femio nodded, "Very well then... As mademoiselle wishes..."

Femio kissed Duck before dancing off. Duck shivered, but remained calm otherwise. The boy showed his doe-like lilac colored eyes before leaving.

Sae got up.

"That guy was so strange!", Sae shrieked, but not before checking to make sure he left earshot of the comment.

"I know. Say... Doesn't he look like a kid that you and Mr. Aburatsubo would have?"

"Don't pair me with people just because we went to high school together! We are FAR from sweethearts!", Sae declared.

"I wasn't trying to say that, Miss..."

"Sae. Sae Sawanoguchi.", Sae then muttered, as she followed it by apologizing for her rudeness.

"It's fine. So what was your relationship with Mr. Aburatsubo?"

"We were... Students to Mr. Takakura!"

"Ah. So you were in the same class?"

"Well, it isn't really a class, I mean... It was more like a club. A magic club, I should add."

"Wow! So cool!"

"Mr. Aburatsubo though was always hostile towards me, especially when I get close to Mr. Takakura."

"Huh? So he had a teacher, student relationship?", Duck asked.

"N-no no! Mr. Takakura and Mr. Aburatsubo are the same age!", Sae shrieked.

"Oh! I forgot! You address classmates and teachers by their last name regardless. How polite... I'm sorry!", Duck muttered.

"It's okay..."

Sae and Duck realized they both acted like each other; Sae and Duck both apologize when they do something ridiculous, they both have two left feet, and they both sometimes daze off and dream. Difference was, Sae's profession was always magic, but in a business setting, she would be a novelist. Duck staid with dancing, no matter the scenario.

Sae had short, shaggy brown hair, and she wears a headband to keep the hair off her face and Duck also had wild pink hair, but she tamed it in a braid. Both had blue eyes and the both of them like fairy tales.

Though, difference was, Sae had Mr. Takakura and Mr. Aburatsubo for friends, and they were both usually nice gentlemen. Duck had female friends, and the both of them were meaner than Mr. Aburatsubo in a bad mood. Pique and Lilie were fawning over Mytho, despite being Rue's boyfriend. At least Mr. Aburatsubo was dedicated to hanging out with the two of them, despite holding some reservations against Sae when Takeo rewards her for her trying to do magic.

"Hey! Maybe we should hang out sometime! I think Mr. Takakura would be happy to have someone show us around!", Sae smiled.

"Thanks! That'll be a great idea!"


Meanwhile, in another classroom, Aburatsubo could not stop staring at Takeo with his emerald green eyes.

Takeo and his brown rattail, Takeo and his shaggy hair, Takeo and his glasses, Takeo and his bright amber eyes, Takeo and his light tan skin... Those were traits Aburatsubo couldn't get enough of!

Takeo was studying to be a History major. Aburatsubo only followed suit because he was madly in love with him, and going with him to Germany was a wise choice, especially to get away from his clingy mother and help Takeo at least understand what people are saying. Though, he was disappointed Sae was able to go to Germany as well.

There was one kid that bugged him, though. He had curly locks of maroon hair and his doe-like eyes, a lilac color, just staring at him. The hair was long for a boys, but then again, nothing can compare to Aburatsubo's long locks of straight hair. He was wondering maybe because they have the same hair color, or maybe the boy was in curious about him, and is wondering if they were cousins. The thought made him shiver as he leaned towards Takeo.

"Takeo..."

Takeo tried to ignore him, paying close attention to what the teacher was saying. When classes dismissed, Aburatsubo followed Takeo out the door and then the maroon haired boy followed him.

"Takeo... I think we're being followed."

Takeo turned and smiled nervously, knowing what Aburatsubo meant, "And who might you be?"

As soon as the boy opened his mouth, Aburatsubo at first thought it was going to be a declaration to be his rival. He was so loud, and at first he sounded angry. He didn't know why, but then...

"However, since you're such... an exceptional beauty... I'm prepared to forgive you."

Aburatsubo looked confused.

"Please, good sir! Tell me your name!"

"Aburatsubo. Ayanojo Aburatsubo."

He looked at Takeo in confusion. Usually it was girls fawning over Aburatsubo, despite him obviously not caring about them. Sure, he was a terrific athlete, a strong actor, and overall, a good student, but he was only going to the club meetings to get away from his overbearing mother, who keeps babying him and ruining any chance of him having a normal life. He wasn't expecting girls to be doing that in class. Now, he fell in love with Takeo, and even if he was gay, he wasn't expecting a boy to confess his feelings for him.

"Aburatsubo... I shall remember that... Oh God! Pour judgement on this sinner!"

Suddenly, the butler that Femio had was about to bring a red flag to provoke the bull Femio had to attack him, but he was stopped.

"Wait a minute!", Takeo said, yanking his hand and saving him from being mauled by a bull's horns.

Aburatsubo gasped. Was Takeo going to... No... Not really. For all the years he knew Takeo Takakura, Takeo never loved Aburatsubo. He saw him as a friend, yes... But never as a lover. Takeo was straight, and Aburatsubo knew it.

"So you're just going to leave us like that?", Takeo hissed, as he held the small boy's shoulders and shaking them.

"But... Don't you know? I am a prince that loves all and is loved in return! Doesn't that trouble you, monsieur?", the boy sobbed.

"What the...", Takeo asked confused.

"Ignore that... So you're saying you're the school playboy..."

The boy looked up. Aburatsubo was not amused. He was about to slap the poor kid.

"Aburatsubo... No!", Takeo growled.

The boy then saw Takeo. He was defending him.

"Don't get mad!", Takeo exclaimed.

"Why? You're jealous of his bravery to fling himself at every woman he sees?", Aburatsubo hissed.

"Even if that is the case, don't you think he would be a great addition to the Magic Club?", Takeo then asked.

"Oh Takeo! I didn't know you were the type to advertise the club!", Aburatsubo then grinned devilishly, saying it in the most snarky way possible.

Takeo was taken aback by Aburatsubo's sarcasm. He's obviously jealous, and Takeo couldn't tell why. Then he looked down. Both the boy and Aburatsubo had feminine features, but were still male. The mystery boy acted more like a girl, though, screaming 'Unhand me' and 'Help' when Takeo kept holding his hand. Aburatsubo at least acted like a man when necessary. There was also that thought that the boy said he was a prince who loves all.

Takeo's fantasy overthrew him as he then pictured the boys at first getting mad because they both love him. But then it escalated to heated make outs and the boys forgot about Takeo altogether, finally freeing Takeo of Aburatsubo's affections.

Sadly, reality slapped him in the face in the form of a scared Aburatsubo.

"Don't tell me you're taking advantage of this guy! He may be younger than me, but you would NEVER stoop that low, would you?", Aburatsubo yelped in Japanese.

"Me?! Why are you saying that?!"

"Takeo..."

"Aburatsubo! You're silly! I'd never swing that way. C'mon... Let's take this kid into a private area."

The Casanova shivered as Takeo took him by the hand as he and Aburatsubo were walking. This maroon-haired pretty boy gulped scared and confused.


Sae and Duck waited in the shabbiest room in the school.

"Mr. Takakura and Mr. Aburatsubo tend to find small spaces for us to perform magic. Then again, we kind of got used to that since everyone else took the larger rooms.", Sae muttered depressed. She thought of Takeo's bully back in Japan, Mizuha Miyama.

Mizuha only bullied him because of her feelings for him. She just didn't know how to react though. The girl ruined his childhood, from stealing his swimsuit and filling them with crabs, to basically drawing over his pictures, Sae was relieved she didn't follow Takeo to Germany. She also kept on hogging all of the space Takeo had, so they couldn't do as many spells because of it.

The girl also didn't help that she was the most snobbish girl Sae ever encountered. She forces people to do what she wanted. She stole the spotlight when she had the chance. Tyrant and egotist would be understatements. Sae only wished that Mizuha learned that doing those things to get her way isn't always the way to go.

"Sae... Are you okay?"

Sae blinked and turned to Duck, "Oh! I'm sorry, I was just thinking of when we were in high school together."

"I see... I guess you're lucky you passed that entrance exam; You get to be with your friends. And no worries! Once you guys start using magic, then maybe the school would get interesting."

"Yeah! Thanks for the input. By the way, how did you get the name, Duck? Isn't that strange for a girl to be called that?"

"Well I..."

She was interrupted by the sudden opening of the door showing Takeo and Aburatsubo carrying a familiar face to the girls.

"It's Mr. Femio!"

"Femio?", Takeo muttered.

"Ah... so he has a name.", Aburatsubo sneered.

Femio looked scared and confused. He hugged Duck for comfort. But when she quacked, that's when things get really strange for the three Magic User's.

"Quaaaa!"

The girl that was Duck was now a yellow duckling. She could be the size of an adult duck, but the coloring was still that of a duckling's.

"Oh my... We didn't even have to use magic for that...", Aburatsubo muttered.

Femio still hugged the duck, not caring one bit about what was going on.

"Takeo... You didn't have to be so forceful, though...", Aburatsubo fake moaned, caressing Takeo as if he were the bad guy.

"W-what will you two do with me?", Femio asked, looking like a mouse about to be eaten alive by a cat.

"Nothing. Why? You're scared?", Takeo asked casually.

Femio muttered, "Heh. The only thing I fear... is moi's own beauty. But you want me... What's your reason?"

Aburatsubo turned to Takeo, "Should we tell him?"

Takeo was too busy noticing Duck's clothes on the floor: a puffy lemon yellow turtleneck with brighter yellow pants with pockets that look like wings, pink and orange socks and shoes. Aburatsubo averted his gaze and pulled his face towards his.

"Takeo?"

Takeo blinked as he snapped back to reality after imagining Duck turning into a human girl again.

"I... Well..."

Takeo then adjusted himself and addressed Femio, "Femio..."

"It's just Femio...", Femio smiled, shaking his head presuming Takeo was wondering what his last name was.

"Right... *ahem* Femio, would you like to become a magic user?"

"Ah! So a prince like me will finally have a mentor like Merlin?"

Takeo wasn't thinking about King Arthur. In fact, he was too busy realizing how much of a ham Femio was.

"Umm... Yes... You can say that...", Takeo murmured.

"Yes! Teach me magic, oh wise one! Help me learn the ways of magic so that one day the girls would like me for more than just my good looks!", Femio smiled. His doe eyed expression showed a newfound inspiration to be Takeo's pupil. They looked so odd on him though; They reminded him too much of Sae. At the same time, it was so wonderful to know that Femio was looking for advice on how to impress women... from someone like Takeo.

Takeo decided not to distract himself with those thoughts as he grinned, "It's going to be a long ride! After all, Sawanoguchi, Aburatsubo, and I are actually veterans while you and... Duck, are new."

Duck carried her clothes as she jumped on the water fountain and turned it on, spraying it all over her body. She turned back into a human girl and Takeo's mind went blank as he actually saw a naked girl in front of him.

Duck though, covered herself as she slowly started to get dress. As a ballerina, her form was small and demure, also skinny and bird-like. So Aburatsubo didn't understand why Takeo's nose began to bleed excessively.

She slowly put her clothes back on, also revealing a ruby red pendant she put on after her clothes. Sae was surprised Aburatsubo and Femio weren't paying attention. Aburatsubo she could understand, but Femio proven time and time again to really like women. What happened?

"Anyway, today we'll learn a teleportation spell. It might be a bit difficult at first, but hopefully this might help you visit familiar faces you want to see, no matter how far you live!"

"So we're doing this to see how the Kitanoshi College branch of the Magic Club is doing, right?", Aburatsubo asked.

Takeo nodded, "Right!"

"Time Zones are different here, Takeo.", Aburatsubo reminded him. Takeo shook his head in shame.

"Well, either way, we have Skype and texts to see how Nanaka and Akane are doing, anyway. Sure, we miss them, but that's the great thing about technology!", Sae smiled.

"Sae brings up a good point. Maybe we should just do this teleportation spell for fun!", Takeo smiled. His face shown that he really did want to make sure Nanaka was doing well as the new president of the Magic Club, especially since she was the one always being reluctant to do magic because she wanted to be the 'Normal Teenaged Girl'.

"Well, shall we begin?", Aburatsubo asked.

"Sure. We'll work on your uniforms tomorrow, but for now... Let's begin!", Takeo smiled.

He gave Duck and Femio each a wand. Takeo was expecting more, but at least he felt satisfied there were more than three-to-four people in the room.

After they chanted the spell, they wound up in America somehow, instead of Japan. It was in a young adult woman's well-lit room. To their left were live cats on her bed just sitting there. To their right, there was a girl speaking in fluent American English. She was reading a fan fiction on her computer out loud and then turned to see the five of them just opening their eyes in shock.

Duck quacked in shock, but she didn't turn into a duck like she would have expected. The girl turned, startled by the sight of five young adults just standing there. The cats on her bed dashed underneath it, also startled by the strangers.

"WHO ARE YOU, GUYS?!", the woman asked.

The woman had dirty blonde hair, and bright brown eyes. She wore glasses, a lot like Takeo's, but while Takeo's were in a semi-circle, hers were in an ellipse. She had a black suit on over a white shirt. Her light brown hair was in a pony-tail and her bangs were parted at the center.

"We are the Magic Club of Goldcrown University in Goldcrown, Germany.", Takeo replied.

"Oh... So you're from another fan fiction as well?", the woman asked.

"Well... Um...", Takeo muttered, unaware of what was going on.

"What's a fan fiction?", Aburatsubo asked.

"Hold on... Let me look you guys up on Google or Wikipedia. Can you each tell me your names so I can see if you're acting in character?"

"In character?", Duck muttered.

"Umm... Ms..."

"I'm the FanFic Critic. I read it; You listen.", she replied.

"Oh Lord, what's going on here?"

They turned to see another woman, who looked a lot similar to the Fanfic Critic, except she wore a black shirt and not a white shirt, no jacket, and no glasses.

"Oh, hey Susan! Can you interview each and every one of these characters?", the woman replied.

"Ah. Very well then... Seeing there's five of you, it won't take long to look at you."

Takeo blushed. What were they going to ask? What were they examining? Either way, Takeo liked the thought of being alone with a girl for a couple of minutes.

"Okay... We'll start with you, spiky haired man with glasses...", Susan muttered, cynically looking at Takeo with disturbed eyes.

And soon, the examining began. With Takeo, he had to think through what he was saying or else he'll sound too weird and the woman wouldn't be impressed by her at all.

"Hmm... Takeo Takakura... Age 17... According to the main canon of your series. However, in this fan fiction, you grew older and at college age. So this is two years after the..."

"What are you talking about?", Takeo asked confused.

"Oh yeah... Since you're in a different universe from us, reality and fiction is totally different from you. My apologies. We should have explai-"

"So our magic took us... Into another universe?!", Takeo gasped.

"Now that... That is interesting. Inter-planar magic should be impossible in your universe. However, since you guys first discovered this magic... Do you know what, that might have defiled canon somewhat."

"SOMEWHAT? SOMEWHAT?! Wait... What's canon?"

"Ohhh boy... Well, I guess I'll have similar reactions from your group of friends, huh?"

"Femio though... Not as much. He'll probably fling yourself at you, because you wanted to interview him. I've only known him for a moment, but the kid's an open book. He's totally nuts!"

Susan looked him up on Google. One of the few things that showed up was Femio's Princess Tutu wiki page. Then there was TVTropes. Takeo was serious when he said this.

"Ah. Seeing he's only a One Scene Wonder in his original continuity, just appearing in one episode... It's not surprising even a main character like you can pick up the loon's personality just by one conversation with him. His age is clearly unknown, but according to the continuity in this fan fiction, he's 14. Wait... He's a man?!"

"You too, huh?", Takeo muttered sarcastically.

"Well, gee! Isn't that sweet...", Susan snarked back, ready to kick out Takeo.

Soon, Susan interviewed the rest of the group, each with different reactions to being in a new dimension, learning about things they never knew before. Finally, Susan gave her results to the FanFic Critic.

"Okay... In this fan fiction, it seems a bit interesting, seeing an alternate reality where the students in Goldcrown Acad- Okay, aside from a few canon defilements, and the characters occasionally going borderline out of character, I see potential in this fan fiction being made by someone who actually cares about the series and the main characters in it. Now, can I please get back to my original fan fiction I was supposed to review?", the bifocals clad girl asked.

"Wait. Let's read one of these fan fictions. We want to know ourselves what's going on and what a fan fiction is!", Takeo declared.

"Don't you guys have internet?", the FanFic Critic asked.

"Ummm...", Duck thought dumbstruck.

"Oh yeah... In fiction, the internet doesn't exist for these characters or else they would discover things they SHOULDN'T.", the FanFic Critic remembered, planting the palms of her hands over her face in disappointment.

Takeo thought that the internet was now a dirty DIRTY place.

"The fan fiction I'm currently reading is a Pokémon fan fiction. Pokémon is a more popular series than... you guys' shows. But that doesn't mean the fans of this show are nice popular people." the FanFic Critic restated.

"Fans?", Sae asked, "Like Aburatsubo's fan club except they focus on... Pokémon?"

"Yes. Exactly like that. Seeing you guys are new to Pokémon, then you might not get this story at first because since Pokémon is popular in this universe, everyone would assume you would know the characters by now.", the FanFic Critic smiled.

"What's this 'fan fiction' about exactly?", Aburatsubo asked, a little confused.

"It's called 'The Dress'. It's rated M for Mature. It's by Ginny Perry..."

"Mature? Well, most of us are adults, right?", Duck smiled nervously.

"It's a fan fiction about a boy getting raped by his father. Are you sure you want to read it now?", the FanFic Critic smiled.

The rest of the group stayed silent. Aburatsubo and Femio's jaws both dropped in shock.

"WHY ARE YOU READING THAT?!", Aburatsubo shrieked in horror.

"Because my fans told me to.", the FanFic Critic sighed in shame.

"That's terrible!", Sae sobbed, "Nobody should go through that!"

"I know. But as punishment, my fans will have to hear me read it too. Besides. I've read all kinds of horrible fan fiction! Be happy you weren't there with my friend reading Cloud Mows the Lawn? or there when I was reading Mewtwo's Desires? or Timeless Lust?"

Nobody in the Magic Club, especially not the newcomers, Duck and Femio, ever read any of those cringe worthy fan fictions, but they took her word for it, since she's known as the FanFic Critic. She knew a lot more about this fan fiction thing than they did. Takeo worried there were more stories about them that they didn't know, aside from the current one that the FanFic Critic believes they teleported from.

If it's as dirty as he thought they were, he at least hoped for a story where he was making beautiful love to Sae. He fantasized the possibilities the fan fictions had. However, knowing Pokémon is more popular than their supposed 'series' he was in, and if what Susan was right about them only being slightly out of character, there was a possibility there were fan fictions between him and Aburatsubo. That almost made him throw up in his mouth. As much as Aburatsubo liked him, Takeo only recognized him as a close friend. Sure, his affection drove him to the point of madness, but if Takeo were to hurt Aburatsubo, it's not just him, his mother and his fangirls that would be crying. Besides, he would probably bet not even Aburatsubo likes fan fiction about the two doing it.

"Hey! Takeo! Earth to Takeo!", the FanFic Critic yelled, waving her hand over his face. He snapped back to reality.

"Huh? What?"

"I think after I finish reading this little fan fiction, maybe I can teach you and your little friends more about how storytelling with other people's characters can actually be good. After that, would you like to become a fellow FanFic Critic?"

Takeo would never would have guessed that the FanFic Critic would appoint him and the club as apprentices.

"Well... I could, but we really should get home."

"Good point. You know, your home is back in that fan fiction. If your magic can work as well there, maybe you can return home and maybe with that said, the writer of your fan fiction can probably learn a thing or two from this little experience."

"Thank you FanFic Critic. Alright everyone. Are you ready?"

"Ready!"

The five magicians then tried to chant again. But something strange happened.

"It didn't work...", Sae gasped.

"Oh no...", Susan hissed under her breath, "They're stuck."

"Oh no!", Sae and Duck cried, "We're stuck!"

TO BE CONTINUED?

Author's Note:

Hello everyone! ChickenWings93 here! This is my first fan fiction about the FanFic Critic! You know, originally it was going to be just a normal crossover fan fiction about two shows I like that just so happen to be made by the same creator, be both magical girl anime, and have both characters having both inner and outer conflicts. It was going to be another self discovery fan fiction, where Sae answers a lot of questions.

Then I started watching the FanFic Critic. Since I love the CartoonHero's reviews of Cos-Prayers (which inspired the fan fiction, Cross-Prayers which also crosses over Magic User's Club and Princess Tutu) and I also watched AFanfictionCritic on YouTube, and when I saw her in one of the related videos on YouTube with over 100 episodes more than she did, I decided to give this a shot. Oh boy, were these episodes interesting. Actually, they were pretty good and my only gripe is that FanFic Critic read out every part of the story (or when it's over 10,000 words in the word count, at least one chapter.)

I may just make this a one-shot and leave it up to the viewer to see what she wants to do with it. OR I can at least make another chapter, this time using different characters... Hmm... Maybe a fan fiction critique starring the FanFic Critic and the characters of Tenchi Muyo!?