Quick things: This is practice for me to become a better writer. I was going to leave these sitting on my computer but I realized I needed feedback, and so I was hoping for feedback on how I wrote this so I can further improve my writing. The main cause for me wanting to do this type of writing, was because of an artist on here called 'Rapey Lemon' who made a fanfic for RWBY called 'Blood Rose'. If you don't mind gore, I extremely recommend you read it.
Blake sat there reading her favourite book, Ninjas of Love, sat on a wooden bench just outside the entrance to Beacon Academy.
"Watch where you're going!" a voice in the background yelled.
Blake, looking up from her book, noticed a girl with long, silvery, white hair yelling at a smaller girl. On the paved floor next to them was a bag with a bunch of books and papers spread out, a piece of paper flying off in the wind.
Approaching slowly, Blake stood behind and to the side of the white-haired girl, looking at her with interest. She had icy blue eyes in a small head, with puffy cheeks, clenching her teeth together angrily. The icy-blue-eyed girl had a slender body, covered in a white dress which went down just above her knees, having long sleeves that turned blue the further down her arm it went. The inside of her dress being red. An apple-shaped necklace around her neck and on each ear, a thin, rectangular earring. She looks like a princess. Noticing the Schnee crest from Schnee Dust Company on the back of her dress, she realized who she was. Oh, she looks like a princess, because she practically is one. She's Weiss Schnee.
Looking over her shoulder she saw who Weiss Schnee was yelling at. A younger girl slightly taller than Weiss, holding silver eyes in her head, scarlet hair on top of it and a crimson cloak draped over her shoulders, covering the back of her black blouse, with a black skirt with red trimmings on her lower half. She looked terrified and upset.
"What are you even doing here!? Weiss continued yelling.
"I'm sorry…" the red girl mumbled under her breath. Blake raised an eyebrow.
"Aren't you a little young to be attending Beacon?" She questioned poking her finger into the crimson-haired girl's shoulder. She does look young, Blake commented in her head, not wanting to alert the white-haired girl. "This isn't your ordinary combat school! It's not just practice and sparring you know. We're here to fight monsters!" Weiss exclaimed, breathing out slowly as if she had finally finished her rant. After that, a tear landed on the floor, Weiss and Blake glanced at the tear and both looked up at the cloaked-girl.
"I-" She started. "I said I was sorry, Princess!" The crimson girl's voice projected forwards, face teeming with tears, slightly reddened because of the increased blood flow to her head due to her crying.
Blake and Weiss stood there, in shock, faces blushing. Standing defeated, they couldn't do anything, as the girl with crimson cape and hair turning away rubbing her face, still crying, started to run away.
The pale girl, regained her senses and started packing her stuff back into her bags, looking slightly angry whilst still retaining her blush, after the scarlet-haired girl had knocked the items out in the first place. Blake regained her senses shortly after. Burying her face back into her book. Who that red-haired girl was?