Ok people, if you have seen my other fics (which I have deleted) you may know that those first two stank. But I got good reviews for some reason. Anyway this is my next try at a good fic; tell me what I need to change if I have to change anything. I don't think it will be perfect and if you don't like it and you think I should add some things please comment, anything that will help with my writing is welcome, yes that means even flames. It may seem off from pokemon for the first chapter but it will come to. Well let's get on with the story shall we…
Disclaimer- If I owned pokemon don't you think this would be in a book?
(Location: Somewhere in the real world)
"So have you found anything yet Uncle?" A young girl asked.
"If I did I think I would have solved this darn case by now." A middle aged man with graying hair answered.
The two were walking down a white tiled hall, and it was a noticeable fact that nobody cleaned it up often. There were boxes with many folders and papers every few yards down the hall, and metal file cabinets cluttered on the sides of the walls. They were all stuffed with folders and papers with names on every tab and heading.
The young girl looked about fifteen-years-old, had waist length brown hair, and bright green eyes. The man beside her, presumably her uncle, had black hair that was graying at the bottom, he also had green eyes, but not as bright as the girls.
They stopped walking in front of an office door. "You go back home now Ban I'll take care of the paperwork and see you later." The man said to the young girl.
The girl frowned. "Why can't I help you out? Come on! Please?" The girl protested.
"I won't have you staying up all night helping me out with a case that I can get by myself." The man paused as he saw the girl glare at him. "Don't look at me like that Banira, you have school tomorrow as I recall."
The conversation ended at the mention of school. The girl, Banira, shuddered and started back down the hall. "G'night then"
(Location: A small house in a small neighborhood)
"Auntie I don't understand. Why can't Uncle Willard let me help him with his cases?" The same young girl asked.
"Because Banira, he is a detective, it is a dangerous job at times." A middle aged woman answered back. She had shoulder length blonde hair, with only a hint of gray and bright blue eyes.
Banira snorted, very un-ladylike but, who cares? She was only fifteen and she really wanted to be a detective. Too bad her Auntie Cassy and Uncle Willard didn't want her to have anything to do with the detective agency. Uncle Willard was a top detective known throughout the state. Auntie Cassy was a gardener and provided tips for gardening on her own website.
Banira Masuki lived with her aunt and uncle because her parents died in a car crash when she was only six-years-old. Her dream job was to be a detective but nobody took her skills seriously. It was her only skill, solving problems, because she had never been good at hide and seek, she stank at video games, especially pokemon. She didn't have a boy-friend because she was too shy to go anywhere near them, and her grades were pretty good, getting A's in all her core classes. (Which would be social studies, science, math, and language arts).
"You should go bed to Ban. School is tomorrow remember?" Auntie Cassy said.
"Yes, yes I know." Banira replied and walked out of the kitchen. She walked down the hall and went into her bedroom. She changed into her pajamas and went to bed.
Banira woke up early the next morning, normally enough. She got up took a shower brushed her teeth, and got dressed. Since her school let the students wear whatever they wanted as long as it didn't offend the dress code.
She wore dark blue jeans and a pale blue shirt. She brushed her hair, and grabbed her school bag. She left the house early, not like she usually did, she used to always wait until her aunt and uncle woke up and they would have breakfast together but she felt today was different.
She walked along the sidewalk taking her usual route to school. This route went past all the houses in her neighborhood, went out to the main street past the town park, and to the high school. Since it was so early she decided that she would stop by the park on her way to school.
The park had a big patch of trees and bushes off to the west side, a fountain some benches and an ice cream stall, which was not open yet due to the time, in the middle of the park. Past the middle there was a small playground that had no children there yet. To the east side of the park there was a big hill that a lot of the older kids liked to roll down.
Banira went to the hill and walked up it. It was a steep walk, even for a hill that did not look steep at all. When she was up at the top she sat down and lay back. She let the coolness of the morning air brush across her face, making her cheeks tingle for it was getting close to winter.
As she was lying down enjoying the cool breeze, she heard a rustle in the bushes at the bottom of the hill on the opposite side that she climbed up from. She sat up and looked around. She didn't see anything and she didn't hear it again either.
Just as she was about to lay back down, something jerked in the bushes. She stood up quickly, and squinted at them, trying to see what it was. The jerking continued, so she walked down cautiously to check it out.
But, apparently not cautious enough. For she tripped over a root or rock, she couldn't tell and fell down. Since it was a steep hill and she landed on her head she somersaulted down the hill and went straight into the bush. She hit her head on something and blacked out. But not before seeing big blue eyes staring down at her….
End Chapter One
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I hope you like it, I will update as soon as possible… The name? Oh Banira Masuki is Japanese Banira means vanilla, It's my personnel character's name so don't steal it! That and Aunt Cassy and Uncle Willard are mine too… And I love detectives that's why I made her based kinda on that . Well do you like it? Does it stink? Let me know!
