This is my first Fanfic please tell me what you think of it

Pokemon: Dawn's Secret Chapter 1: Big Party, Dawn's big secret.

After the grand festival and the sinnoh league our heroes find themselves in twinleaf town.

"Hey Ash I invited may over so you two can catch up", said Dawn with an evil smile.

"Why'd ya have to go and do that!" said Ash angry.

"Calm down Ash it's probably for a party." said Brock trying to calm Ash

"PIKA PI", said Pikachu holding Ash's leg

Upon their arrival Barry runs into Ash (for the upteenth time)

"That's it Ash I'm fining you and you better pay up in 10 seconds!",Barry said.

"Calm down Barry", said two voices.

Behind Barry was Paul and Palmer.

"Dad, Paul?! what are you doing here?!"Barry asked confused.

"Well, I live here don't I" said, Palmer making a Joke

"Your Dad invited me", said Paul annoyed

"Meow,Meow", said A Glameow who made Ash jump up and hold onto a branch scared.

"Hey guys", said a familiar voice.

"ZOEY!", said Dawn running to hug her rival

"Hey Dee-Dee", Said Kenny behind Zoey.

"Kenny stop calling me that!", wait a second, Kenny!, said Dawn angry then Happy

"Hey Ashy-boy, scared again", Said Gary coming up behind Paul.

"Gary?!"

"Hey Dawn who's the cute boy" whispered Zoey into Dawn's Ear

"Hey Ash!" said fourteen familiar voices

"Brandon, Anabel, Spencer, Noland, Tucker, Greta," said Ash until

"And Lucy!" said Brock in love "Lucy my darling will you finally be my girlfriend"

"Croa", said Croagunk starting poison jab.

"Okay Brock", said Lucy blushing.

"WHAT?!" Said everybody in amasement

"Anyways, Misty, Max, Norman, Prof. Oak, Tracey, Mom, and May." said Ash getting down from the tree

"What are you all doing here", said Ash and Dawn confused.

"I invited all of them for a party", said Dawn's mom coming with party supplies.

"What party?" asked Ash and Dawn together

"Well to celebrate you getting in the Sinnoh league and for Dawn getting into the grand festival." said May speaking up

A few hours into the party Dawn's mom said someone Special was coming to celebrate Dawn's accomplishment

"Ding,Dong" the doorbell rang.

When Barry opened the door a trainer With a blue hat, Red sleeveless jacket, White longsleeve shirt underneath and an Infernape outside its Pokeball Well

"look who it is", said Barry Smiling.

"Welcome back", said Palmer to the boy.

"Good to see you man", said Kenny smiling.

"Hey Dawn who's the cuter boy" Asked Zoey and May.

"He's...

"Hey little sis", said the boy smiling.

"... My big brother Blake Berlitz". said Dawn nervous.

"Brother?"! Said everyone one confused

"Well what way to say hi to your brother dawn". said Blake hugging Johanna

"Look punk I don't know who you are but dawn never told us she had a brother!" said Ash holding Blake by the shirt.

"Ash let him go!" said Zoey, May, and Dawn yelling at Ash

"Ash I never Told you or Brock because he was always the cooler sibling, and I never wanted you to meet him." Said Dawn quietly but loud enough for him to hear.

Wow what a twist Dawn has A big brother Blake but will Blake make Ash leave, wait for chapter 2 of Dawn's Secret: A new friend appears, but a new rival for Ash?

Well what ya think? chapter 2 will be up soon