I am trying a new kind of story, so I need a lot of feedback.
Summary: Kairi is a single mother with an adopted daughter. Her daughter, Namine needs a father in her life but Kairi doesn't have enough time to date or look for a guy. When Namine is saved from drowning, she has her sights set on her savior.
Kairi was hurrying to work in the cold rain. Working in Bloomingdale's in New York City, especially when you are the assistant manager,was not the life she had pictured when she was younger. Her whole life had changed right down a different road at the end of her freshman year in college. She had skipped a year of high school and graduated with honors.
"Hi! I'm home." Kairi called out when she came back from her first year of college. Things had been brutal but she had made it to the top ten in her class. It was quiet when she entered and dark.
She walked inside and saw her parents sitting down next to her little sister,Gia,who was 15. They were crying and Gia told her the news.
"I'm pregnant." Kairi was shocked when she heard it. She had the urge of slapping her sister but couldn't do it. Kairi knew that Gia wouldn't be able to take care of a baby.
"How many months has it been?" She asked her parents.
"Five." her father told her.
"You couldn't tell me that my baby sister is pregnant until she has been for five months!" She screamed shrilly.
"We just found out today when Gia decided to tell us." She looked poisonously at her daughter.
"When the baby is born, I will take it far away and won't return." Kairi finished that conversation by going to her room.
Kairi left with baby Namine on September 12, 1994. She went to New York City and found miscelaneous jobs everywhere. Namine never knew her mom's relatives or knew that her biological mother was Kairi's younger sister. When Namine was five, Kairi got a job as a clerk at Bloomingdale and had a heavy salary. This turned their lives up and they moved uptown. Kairi left nothing out of Namine's life. She put her in the best school around and bought a nice apartment. The only thing Kairi left out was a father.
"Namine." Kairi called to her daughter. Namine was drawing and was deep in her own thoughts.
"Yeah, Mom."
"Have you decided what you want for your birthday?" She asked softly knowing what the first thing that would come out of her mouth.
"Yes, but I don't think I will be able to have that wish this year. I think I'll save it for another." Namine got up and walked to her viola, which played very well, and started to play beautifully.
"Did you forget what we have done every since you were five? We go window shopping until you know what you want."
"I actually already know what I want, but it might be too expensive." Namine told her mother.
"Try me."
"I was thinking that the Philharmonic will be playing on my birthday, and you would come with me, since you always take the day off for my birthday." Her blue eyes turned wide with excitement.
"If you want it, I'll try my best." Kairi told her.
After school on the way back from home, Namine and her friend Nadi took a shortcut home. Nadi was an Indian girl that had moved from Texas when she was five and became Namine's friend instantly. Her real name was Nandini Patel, but she would drastically hurt someone if they called her that. She had long black hair that she always put in a long black braid and they both lived in the same apartment building so they often went home together. The school itself wasn't very far, but they wanted to do some exploring.
"Nami, where the heck have you brought me?" Nadi asked her friend.
"I once took this shortcut home through this forest a few years ago. I wanted to try it again. The only thing dangerous is a creek that is kind of deep."
When they reached the creek, Nadi asked Namine "How wide is it?"
"It's not that wide. Maybe three feet." Namine said innocently.
"Three feet! That's it. I'm going home the normal way and you are coming with me." a passerby stopped to see what was happening, but the girls took no notice of him. Nadi kept on tugging the blond, but Namine was tugging toward the creek. Then suddenly she lost her balance and fell into the creek. Nadi screamed and reached out for her. The passerby ran to the girls, gave Nadi his jacket and hat, and dove into save her.
Nadi was worrying so much that she didn't know when he came back with Namine seconds later.
"Oh Namine, are you alright? I am so sorry. Thank you Mr.? " She asked him.
"Hikari, but just call me Sora. I believe that you are also going to Edgewood Gardens." the spiky brown haired man asked them.
"Yes, how did you know?" Namine asked quietly.
"It's the big building over there and I heard you girls talking. I moved in yesterday."
"Wait, do you live at 512?" Namine asked him.
"Yes, I do."
"My mom and I live at 510. You're the person that moved in yesterday."
"Then why don't we all go back together? It'll give me a reason to call my mom and say that I am at Namine's."
When they got to the apartment building, they stopped at Nadi's and told her mom that she would stay at Namine's for the night.
"So, what does your mom look like?" Sora asked Namine.
"Her mom is gorgeous, with dark auburn hair, and the prettiest violet eyes." Nadi blurted out, "Oops. Sorry."
"It's okay, big mouth." Namine said. They got to her apartment and asked Sora, "Will you come over sometime, maybe dinner tonight?"
"First ask your mom. I wouldn't want to impose."
"I'll tell you when she calls at five." When she looked at her watch she shrieked. "It's a minute to five. Sorry bye. Come on Nadi."
The phone rang as soon as they opened the door. Namine rushed to her room to get a towel, while Nadi stalled on the phone.
"Hello Ms. Sonoda. Namine's just freshening up. How are you?"
"Nadi, what happened?"
"What do you mean?"
"I have known you for the past eight years. I know you are hiding something."
"Here comes Namine." She quickly gave the phone to her.
"Namine Gia Sonoda." She said icily, "What happened?"
"We were taking a shortcut home and Nadi was trying to get me home the regular way, but I was stubborn and tripped into the creek. Luckily there was a man passing by and he saved me. And Mom guess what? He's the man who moved in yesterday. Would it be alright if I invited him to dinner tonight."
"Yes, but Nami, I have some bad news." Kairi said through the phone.
"What?"
"I couldn't get the tickets, because apparently the box office for this concert closed yesterday. I am sorry."
"It's okay mom. They are so great so I was wondering if I could ever hear them. But Mom, I'm not mad. I know how hard it is to get the tickets." With that she turned off the phone.
"So, Mr. Hikari, what do you do? Like what is your job?"Namine asked her new neighbour.
"Please call me Sora and my new job in the morning is teaching orchestra at Ereckson Middle School.
"That's great. We both are in the orchestra at Ereckson. We are the best violists in the orchestra." Nadi pointed at her and Namine.
"My night job is playing the bass in the Philharmonic."
Namine shrieked at hearing that. "Wow. I've always wanted to hear the Philharmonic, and we could've seen them on Thursday, but my mom couldn't get the tickets."
"I think I can help. I get three free tickets each month to any concert. So I can let you and your mom have the two tickets and then you can have the extra one. I don't need it anyway."
"Thanks so much Sora. You don't know how happy I am. Shoot Nadi, we have to go and do homework. Remember 8' o clock sharp." She told her new neighbor.
"It would be so great if your mom found someone like that. But she is always working. With her looks and personality, any guy would like her." A light bulb clicked in Namine's mind when Nadi said that.
"Oh Nadi, you're a genius. Why didn't I think of that?"
"I know I am, but why exactly am I a genius?"
"Why look for another guy? Sora would be perfect for my mom. There is no guy better for her
than Sora."
"If you actually go through with this, you are going to need some help and I know the perfect mastermind for this kind of thing." Nadi told her.
"Who? Artemis Fowl?" Namine asked, making fun of her friend's love of books.
"No, Roxas Strife." She said seriously.
So the first chapter. Please give some feedback. I will think this is terrible if you don't. I don't mind flames either. Just Review.
