Me: Ok so here is the new first chapter to the Nagi's Illness Rewritten. I hope you enjoy this version better than the first one. I wasn't at all happy with the quality of it which led me to get discouraged and made me want to just end it and move onto a different one, which is what I did leaving you all hanging so please forgive me. I am currently writing a fanfic for Fragile Dreams called Aftermath which I think is turning out extremely well so I hope this one will too. This is going to have the same plot as the previous but better written.
Me: I do not own Shugo Chara or any of its characters. (sadly I wouldn't mind owning Nagi but oh well I guess I can let Rima have him.) lol enjoy ;P
A cold breeze, excited voices calling to one another. Boys tackling one another and starting snowball fights. Girls huddled together to Keep warm from the blowing snow telling each other what they will be doing over Christmas break and talking about the parties they are having or will be going to. Tomorrow Christmas break would start and the halfway point would begin. The year would soon be over; it all seemed like a sweet, sad goodbye. I don't know why but it did.
My purple hair blew in my face as I walked towards the gate to leave for home. There wasn't a guardian meeting tonight since Tadase had to get home as soon as school let out and Amu had to pick Ami up from school as well so there really wasn't any point in staying. His guardian charas sat quietly on his shoulders watching the snow make patterns as they danced in the wind. No doubt Miki would be drawing such patterns. Over at the gate a small petite girl stood digging around in her bag.
Rima was in the same grade as him and had the queen's chair as a guardian. Her hair was blowing all around her face and I could tell it was getting on her nerves do to the frustrated look on her face and she kept tugging it behind her ear only to have it blow back into her face in the next gust of wind.
"Hello Rima." I said cautiously as I walked up to her. She was very temperamental and she really didn't like me which made it ten times worse. "What are you looking for?"
"Is it any of your business?" she snapped glaring at me. "I'm looking for my phone but I think I left it at home."
Yet you tell me anyways I thought resisting the urge to role my eyes. "I'd let you borrow mine but it died last night."
"I wouldn't want to anyways." she said walking away quickly. I hurried to catch up with getting to her in time to keep her from falling on the ice. Unfortunately it involved me grabbing her arm and waist and pulling her against me so we both didn't lose our balance and fall. "Let go of me you stupid cross-dressing boy." she snapped pulling out of my grasp.
"Well sorry if I wanted to help so you didn't fall on the ice." I replied walking away. "Merry Christmas Rima!" I waved my hand over my shoulder to her but didn't turn around. There was no way her or I would ever get along, whether it was Amu or for the good of guardians. I have no idea what I did to make her hate me but she does, and I have a feeling no matter how hard I try there is no way she would or, most likely, could like me.
"Nagi the lights read." Tamari said, I looked up and stopped at the edge of the walkway, cars zoomed back and forth. They were hurrying home to their families or to the stores for last minuet shopping. I walked past the shops and stands working my way home. I shoved my hands down into my pockets trying to warm them as they went numb from the cold. Tamari and Rhythm shielded themselves from the cold be hiding in my hair.
"Are we almost there Nagi?" Rhythm whined. "It's cold!"
"I know it is." I agreed wincing as a cough tore itself from my throat. "We will be there in the in a few minuets this is our street." I replied as I turned the corner onto my street dodging icy patches on the sidewalk. My house was the second to last on the right side of the street. I turned and forced our gate open watching as ice slide of the lock making indents in the snow.
"Tadaima." I called opening the door and closing enjoying the warmth that enveloped me. I slipped my coat and shoes off at the door and laid my bag in a chair looking in the living room for Mom and called for her when she wasn't there. "Mom where are you?"
"I'm in the kitchen Nagihiko." she replied from down the hall. I walked into the kitchen and smelled bread cooking in the oven.
"Smells good." I replied sitting down at the kitchen table watching her move around the kitchen.
"It's Kurisumasu keeki*." she told me. I smiled, I loved the smell of Kurisumasu Keeki, it smelled sweet and delicious. "It should be done soon you can ice it if you want."
"Kay." I said standing. "Do we have strawberries?"
"Yes they're in the fridge next to the icing." she told me peaking at the cake. "I've made plenty but I can make more if need be." I opened the fridge she had two packages of strawberries next to a bowl of white icing.
"Tadaima*!" I heard my father call. He walked into the kitchen giving my mom a hug and smiled at me rubbing my hair. "Kurisumasu Omedeto*."
"Kurisumasu Omedeto." I replied smiling at him. I had his long purple hair and his easy going attitude (at times anyways) but I had my mom's eyes and graceful style*. We got along pretty well together.
"Nagihiko the cake is done." Mom informed me. "Let it cool for a few minuets then you can ice and decorate it for the Christmas party tonight."
"Alright." I replied to her. I usually did the decorating when it came to doing dishes for celebrations or holiday. I'm gonna go get what I'm wearing out and I'll be right back down."
"Alright but hurry." she told me as I hurried the stairs.
My room was at the end of the hall on the left*. My room could be that of a girl's or that of a boy's it portrayed both of my personalities. My personality as boy and my alter personality as a girl. Opening my closet however was different. It showed only boy clothes. My mother kept my girl clothes in her closet. I pulled out a pair of black dress paints and a black shirt and laid them on my bed. Downstairs I had some black shoes that I would wear to the part.
"Nagi the cake is cool enough!" I heard my mother yell up the stairs.
"Coming!" I called going downstairs and into the kitchen. Mom had already set the strawberries and icing by the cake. I pulled a butter knife out the drawer and stirred the icing up. The icing was fluffy and light and was easy to spread on the cake. It took me about 5 minuets to completely cover the cake with the icing and make sure that it was completely smooth and that none of the cake was showing. I pulled out a plastic sandwich bag and cut a slit on the corner and filled it up with icing. I created circle of swirls about two inches from the center of the cake. In the middle I put strawberries with the pointed end up to fill the middle except for one spot which I had put I slab of dark chocolate the had Kurisumasu Omedeto written on it.
"Looks good Nagi." my dad said looking at my from over my shoulder. "You defiantly have your mom's talent. If I did that the cake would turn out lopsided.
"Dad how do you make a lopsided cake?" I laughed. "I didn't think that was possible."
"I make the impossible possible." he said hugging me. "Now go get dressed we need to leave soon."
"Kay." I said going back to my room and changing. I went across the hall and into the bathroom to brush my hair and wash my face and wash the icing off my hands. I had just finished my hands and hair and was about to do my face when my lungs suddenly felt like they had exploded. I gasped and clutched the sink counter and started coughing hard. Something warm that tasted like metal filled my mouth and spitted it out into the sink. My face paled as I saw something red come out of my mouth. I looked into the mirror with horror as I realized what I had just coughed up.
Blood! I was coughing up blood!
Me: Ok so here is the first chapter. I hope you enjoyed it. I know isn't at all like the first chapter in the previous one but I personally think it's better. Please review and let me know what you all think of it.
Japanese Terms :
Tadaima: I'm home
Kurisumasu Omedeto: Merry Christmas
Kurisumasu keeki: Christmas Cake
Other stuff in story with a star next to it! ;P
I had his long purple hair and his easy going attitude (at times anyways) but I had my mom's eyes and graceful style: I don't know what either of his parents look like or how they act so this might be a little OOC for them and I apologize.
My room was at the end of the hall on the left: I also don't know what Nagi house looks like so if I'm totally off then I apologize greatly for that as well.
Anyways that's it so later! ;P
