This is a idea for a story I got. Please review and tell me how you think it is and if i should continue. thanks!
She had never gotten this feeling before, the tingling throughout her body, the blush that crept to her face when she was around him, the way she lost control of all her senses. Her friends thought she was crazy. Her parents didn't know. It was just too bad the boy she was falling head over heels for was the son of her fathers worst enemy. Too bad that boy was Derek Harrington. Too bad Massie's father warned her to stay away from him. Too bad they went to the same school. Too bad her friends and his friends hung out together. Too bad Massie had to see him everyday, excluding weekends. And the worst part of it all was that Derek or Derrington as she secretly called him had a girlfriend who was cheating on him. Too bad she didn't have the guts to tell him that. Just too bad.
Massie's father, William Block was the proud owner of the world famous news channel CNM, while Derek's father Sam Harrington was the proud owner of the competing world famous news channel NBD. Currently both fathers were fighting for the chance to get a top secret news story.
8:27 pm
The Block Estate: Massie's Room
Massie was doing it again. Thinking about him when she was supposed to be doing her math homework. She just couldn't stop imagining his shaggy golden brown locks and how it would feel to run her hand through his hair. She could only imagine how soft, tender, and sweet his lips would taste. Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaah... "Massie, come down here right now! I need to talk to you its urgent!" Her father's stern voice came through Massie's white intercom interrupting her daydream. "Coming", she yelled. Massie took the steps down two at a time making sure not to leave a scratch on the precious hardwood with her two inch Jimmy Choo wedges. Before opening the tall 12 foot door that led to the dining room she pressed her ear to the the door's vannila finish. She gasped when she heard her mom tell her father that...
I know this is really short. It is not the whole thing only a part of the first chapter. I just want to get peoples opinion before I post the five chapters I have so far. Sorry!
This is sort of a cliffy. I"ll continue if you review telling me what you thought. Constructive criticism accepted as long as no flames.
