I'm back! I've decided to rewrite me story Frozen Hearts because I feel it was super rushed and no explanation to anything that happened in the story. So this time around I'm going to go slow and make sure I pay attention to detail. In the last story everyone hated these two for no reason and honestly, I can't explain why I made them like that lol. But here it is Frozen Hearts Rewritten!
A small snow white kit jabbed at her sister's side, trying to get her attention. "Greykit? C'mon the ceremony has been over for a few minutes, let's get back to playing!" she squeaked, poking once again at her sister's light grey fur.
Greykit looked at her with dark blue eyes that were shining brightly. "Snowkit! Redpaw and Brackenpaw are so lucky! They got to be apprentices today!" she mewed excitedly.
"Didn't you hear mama and papa talking about them? Redfoot came back home after being missing for three moons, and he came back with those two and said he was their father, but refused to name a mother." Snowkit mewed with scorn.
"Yeah, but that doesn't make them any less of warriors like us. Plus, they always played with us." Greykit mewed, her tail swishing excitedly.
Snowkit watched her sister's tail swish around the ground and her icy blue eyes watched it with intense concentration. She crouched down, waiting for her chance to pounce.
"Alright kits time for a story!" a silky voice called them.
At that moment Greykit pricked her ears, her tail stopping its motion. Snowkit let out a loud cry and pounced, pulling her sister off her feet and tumbling on the ground with her.
Greykit squealed with happiness, forgetting the newest apprentices immediately.
Snowkit heard a soft mrrow of laughter as their father took his place next to their mother. As the played they rolled under the feet of a silver she-cat carrying smelly moss.
"Watch it!" she hissed, almost seething with venom.
"Silverpaw!" their father cut in, his voice stern.
"Yes Spottedpelt?" Silverpaw asked sweetly, batting her dark blue eyes at him.
"Don't speak to my kits that way." he meowed, his sapphire blue eyes narrowing to slits.
"Y-Yes Spottedpelt…" Silverpaw murmured, picking up the moss she dropped and walking away with her head down.
"What am I going to do about her? She won't even talk to me anymore…" their mother said, her voice sounding sad.
"Ashflower she's my apprentice, so I'll take care of her." Spottedpelt promised.
Snowkit stopped playing with Greykit and turned to her parents, curious to know what they were talking about.
"How was the border on RiverClan? I've really messed up in the past season cycle…" Ashflower murmured, her dark grey fur ruffling up and her icy blue eyes glazing over. Spottedpelt laid his tail over her shoulder, nuzzling her neck.
"It was strange. Their scent was way across our border, but no traces of any cat anywhere. I'm afraid they might attack any day now." Spottedpelt meowed, before noticing his daughters were staring at them.
Ashflower noticed as well and nudged her daughters away, "Maybe if you take the elders some prey, they'll tell you a story." She mewed softly to them.
Snowkit jumped up excitedly, running towards the prey pile with Greykit hot on her heels. "I think today we should ask Brackenfoot for the story today! He hasn't had one for us in a long time!" she squeaked, pulling out a squirrel.
"Yes! Hopefully it'll be a good one!" Greykit mewed excitedly, helping her sister with the squirrel. As they arrived at the Elders Den the pulled the squirrel to Brackenfoot he had prepared a spot for the sisters.
"Hello little ones! I see you brought me some lunch!" the elderly tom purred helping the two kits place the squirrel in front of him. "I don't suppose you're here for a story?" the golden-brown tom asked, taking a bite of the squirrel.
The two sisters nodded eagerly, sitting down and waiting for him to start.
"This story is called The Flower and the Reed. There was once a beautiful grey she-cat who lived in a forest just like this one. When she was young a nice tom saved her from falling to her death, we'll call him Reed. Now every so often the two would meet in secret and- "Brackenfoot began his story only to be cut off by Greykit,
"Why were they meeting in secret?" she asked, her eyes alight with wonder.
Brackenfoot chuckled, hushing the little kit with his tail as he continued, "They met in secret because their parents had found out and didn't want them to be together, but despite their parents protest they found a way to be together. Now do not forget that Reed lived in a territory much like RiverClan's and loved the water just as much as he loved Flower." He explained, watching with amusement as the kits scrunched up their faces in disgust.
"Ew, who would even like water in their fur? That's so weird!" Snowkit exclaimed shaking her head in disbelief.
Hushing the kits once again Brackenfoot continued with his story. "As the two grew older they realized they fell in love with each other, but Flower also had feelings for another tom that she had grown up with. His name was Spotty. She had a hard time deciding between the two and decided that running to Reed would be the best thing to do for her. While her parents had given up on trying to convince her to stay Spotty refused to give up on her! Just before she stepped paw onto Reed's territory he cried out for her to stay with him. He asked why she would leave her family, and her friends behind just to be with a tom that didn't even understand her. Confused Flower listened to his plead learning everything about this tom as he explained why she wouldn't even be happy in Reed's home. He explained that she wouldn't ever get used to getting her fur wet and that her favorite type of food wasn't even in his territory. And that she would just feel like an outcast in Reed's home. Slowly Flower realized that her choice would come with consequences she wasn't ready to deal with. She apologized to Reed for changing her mind, but Reed refused to listen to her, calling her a lying she-cat that she was just like the rest of them and that he shouldn't have rescued her from falling to her death. During his bitter rant, he swore revenge on both Spotty and Flower as he disappeared into his territory. Heartbroken, Flower let Spotty lead her home. Only relying on her close friend made her realize how stupid she had been and how much she had almost ruined her life. She also realized that she had fallen for the spotted tom that saved her from ruining her life. Moons after of her recovery she asked him if he would be her mate and he happily accepted her offer. Soon they had a family on the way and on the night of her birth Flower gave birth to two beautiful she-kits. We'll call them Snowy and Cloud. And they all lived happily ever after!" Brackenfoot finished, digging into a squirrel, content with the story's ending.
Snowkit gaped her jaws and a small yawn and stood up, stretching her tiny legs. "Wow what a great story Brackenfoot!" She mewed, nudging her sister who was deep in thought.
"Yeah it was really good! Thank you!" she purred stretching her legs as well. Suddenly one of the elder's head shot up, sniffing the air.
"What's the matter Cherrynose? Is something the matter?" Brackenfoot asked seriously, his tail wrapping around the kits protectively.
"I smell a strong scent of RiverClan warriors!" the she-cat hissed, her pink nose twitching furiously.
"Okay little ones go to your mother now, I'm sure she's worried." Brackenfoot meowed, a slight edge to his voice.
Snowkit nodded and followed Greykit out of the elders den, spotting their mother racing towards them.
"Thank goodness you two are alright, now get inside please, there's trouble stirring and your father has gone to get Sunstar." Ashflower mewed worriedly, picking up Greykit and trotting towards the nursery at a brisk pace.
Snowkit sprinted after her to keep up with Ashflower. As she was pushed into the nursery she saw strange cats flood into the clearing, their fur ruffled and their eyes narrowed into angry slits.
"What are you doing here Shellstar? You have no business being here in our camp." Sunstar growled, padding into the center of the clearing, ThunderClan warriors standing behind him, ready to fight.
"StarClan has spoken to my Medicine Cat, Rippleshine, that two cats will stand alone and destroy both RiverClan and ThunderClan, surely you have gotten this message as well? We've come to… dispose… of this little problem." the dappled grey tom pointed out, staring pointedly at the newest Medicine Cat, Flamedapple.
The tortoise-shell tom looked at the ground with embarrassment, his paws scuffing the ground nervously.
Sunstar looked at him with reassurance and looking back at Shellstar, "Of course I have, but it is no business of RiverClan to 'dispose' of these cats." The golden leader snarled, getting nose to nose with Shellstar.
Shellstar hissed at him, shoving the ThunderClan leader back. "It is our business if StarClan has predicted the fall of RiverClan! We shall stop these cats once and for all!" Shellstar yowled, leaping onto Sunstar, beginning the battle at once.
Snowkit let out a squeak of terror and cowered against Greykit, who was covering her eyes with her paws. She noticed that her mother was blocking the entrance of the nursery and fighting off a rather large tom.
"You won't enter this nursery! I won't let you!" she hissed, hatred seeping through her voice.
"You… You have kits in there?" the tom asked, he sounded so sad to Snowkit.
"Yes Reedtail, my kits are in there." Ashflower growled.
"Then I think I know who StarClan was talking about." The tom, Reedtail, meowed darkly. He bit into Ashflower's scruff tossing her aside like she was a piece of prey and squeezing himself into the nursery, his dark green eyes finding her and Greykit. His mouth twisted into a sick grin as he picked up Snowkit first and started to shake her around.
"No please! Stop it!" Snowkit cried flailing her paws around until finally one of them hit his left eye.
The tom screeched in pain and dropped her, backing out of the nursery only to back up into Ashflower who quickly pinned him down. "Just give up already! ThunderClan has got you beat!" she snarled at the dark orange tom.
Snowkit noticed another tom sneaking up on her mother and she cried out trying to warn her. "Mama look out!" she cried.
Ashflower looked to her kit with confusion and her slight distraction was all Reedtail needed as he bit into her throat deeply, ripping the life out of her.
Snowkit watched in horror as blood dripped from Ashflower's throat. "MAMA!" Snowkit screech, catching the attention of her father who dropped whoever he was fighting and sprint to where Ashflower lay dead.
"Reedtail how could you?! After all you've been through together?" Spottedpelt snarled, leaping at Reedtail. The two fought each other until Reedtail had her father pinned.
"It's such a shame that I've always been stronger than you." The dark orange tom chuckled, biting savagely into his throat.
Snowkit heard Greykit scream in terror at the sight of their dead parents. The newest queen came out of the nursery and wrapped around the two shocked kits as RiverClan ran away, trying to comfort them. "It'll be okay my sweets, everything will be okay." The black she-cat cooed at them. But she was wrong, everything wouldn't be the same ever again.
Okay, I honestly think this is already better than when I wrote the first on some four years ago. I'll try and update every other day or so, it depends on my motivation, don't forget to read and review!
