Warriors:The lost Warrior

Book one: The unavoidable storm

This is my first story/novel thingee based on Erin Hunters Warriors. I do not claim to own any warriors related ideas. However, the cats names are originally mine, and always will be. Please review, and rate. I hope to be a writer one day. Writing for the children 10+. This could make my dream come true. I need a good critique. Please help!

Allegiances

Ivyclan:

Leader: Petalstar (small pale coloured she-cat with black paws)

Deputy: Moongaze(Silver coloured tom)

Medicine cat: Liontooth(Flame coloured tom with snow white paws) apprentice-Featherpaw

Warriors:

Berrynose(Black tom with a red nose)

Ashbreeze(Grey she-cat) Apprentice: Meadowpaw

Lightningfeather(pale ginger tom with white paws) Apprentice: Shadowpaw

Silentclaw(snow white she-cat with black paws)

Cloverpelt(Light tabby she-cat)

Thistlenose(Dark tabby tom) Apprentice: Heatherpaw

Jayfeather(small grey but lithe tom)Apprentice: Darkpaw

Apprentices:

Meadowpaw:( cream coloured she-cat)

Shadowpaw:(Jet black tom)

Heatherpaw(Dark ginger pelted she-cat)

Darkpaw:( Dark tabby tom)

Featherpaw:(white she-cat)

Queens/kits:

Dawnwhisker(light ginger pelted she-cat):

kits:

Tigerkit(bright ginger tom)

Pinekit(Jet black she-cat)

Elders:

Frostmeadow(gentle white she-cat)

Mintclaw(Rough, short tempered, tabby tom)