Vicious

12-5-03

Friday

So this is mine review, even if it is bad, enough said read or die.

If you can't review don't read it, damnit.

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'I wonder if either of them will come back, even if it is just for a little while,' Naota thought to himself as he placed his 1$ into the soda machine, he chose a sour drink and a pulpy drink, 'In honor of Mamimi and Haruko,' Naota drank the sour one while he placed the pulpy drink into his leather jacket's right hand pocket.

He then walked to the bridge where he used to meet Mamimi; Naota took a seat underneath the bridge, and leaned against one of its pillars.

Naota had changed over the past 2 years, he was now 14, his hair was a brown mess but he kept it the same length as it used to be, his hoodie he switched for a 269$ leather jacket that had an un-namable amount of pockets on the inside, which was good for his cigarettes and lighters he carried around now, his pants regularly had 12 pockets or more and were loose, usually black colored, he only wore a hat on occasions and when he did it was a black one with H and M embroided on it, he had made it himself, the scarf Haruko gave him he had spray painted black and now wore it everywhere.

Naota took and crushed to can between his hands and threw it into the stream before he reached into his jacket and grabbed the other soda, 'to Haruko, the woman that crushed me with those last words "your still just a kid..." and Mamimi who left for the better things in life leaving me in this boring town of Mabase.'

Naota had also started speaking a lot less since the two had gone, 'of course there is still Eri unfortunately she is way too...too what's the word I am looking for?'

Naota drank the last of the pulpy soda and threw it into the stream. 'Sane for me,' Naota stood up took out a cigarette and lit it before placing the pack and lighter back into his jacket.

He inhaled and started heading back to the school he went to, 'damn school is Hell, I realize why Mamimi had a hard time,' Naota was the most feared 14 year old in Mabase, he was late every day but it didn't matter because the teachers were too afraid to do anything about it, he came into the classroom smoking and no one told him to put it out, the whole town feared him because of what he had become.

{Flash Back} After Haruko left the young 12 year old Naota was standing on the pile of rubble, which had Haruko's Rickenbacker on it, then the sky darkened and a black liquid-looking-substance landed on Naota, Naota turned into something something horrifying, his shoulder blades cracked and snapped until two black wings sprouted out, his teeth elongated and mouth got bigger, his eyes turned a bright red, the muscles on his arms stretched and ripped his shirt off, Naota's legs became longer and leg muscles ripped his pant legs, his toes melded together to form three sharpened talons, his whole body turned black, the not-so-Naota's fingers became longer and fingernails became sharp as razors, then it ended he changed back just as suddenly as he changed.

Naota remembered what happened and could control it, but everyone thought he was now a monster, a monster they feared.

{Present} Naota was now passing by a restaurant and looked to the right there was a window reflecting Mamimi Haruko!

Naota turned around, but nothing was there unfortunate, 'I must be going insane or something.'

Naota turned and continued his walk to school; the only reason he went was to get a scholarship to a good college outside of Mabase, hopefully in the United States.

Naota entered the school doors and went to his classroom, when he entered the whole room became quiet and he swiftly went to his desk at the back of the room.

"Well class, as I was saying..." Naota had turned his attention to the seat where Eri Ninamori sat, she also feared him but not as much as the other townspeople did at least she talked to him even though he never said anything back she understood him.

'Strange Ninamori is not here today, I wonder where she could be, she is probably just sick,' Naota thought Naota had other things besides a lighter and cigs in his jacket; Naota took a fold out 4" knife from his jacket and started carving on the desk.

'I am sure that will make anyone who sits here in the future wonder;' when he had got done carving the desk read? HOW ABOUT FOOLY COOLY STYLE? What he had carved made him think again about Haruko and Mamimi, she always said that, Naota folded the knife back up and placed it into his jacket.

"Well class the what happens when we..." the school bell rang signaling school was finally over, "don't forget do pages 1-100 all problems."

There was a loud mumbling from the students in the class and then writing sounds when they took down the homework for that day, 'that's over 355 problems, if she is counting the reviews,' Naota thought angrily, almost as if on queue the teacher said "oh yes class one more thing the reviews also."

There was an even louder mumbling and some curses thrown about this time, Naota got up and walked out of the room into the hallway where he took out his pack of cigs and lighter "you know you should not do that, but you don't have to listen to me" Naota kept looking down at his cig, 'so Ninamori isn't sick, I wonder what she is doing here after school is over,' Naota thought before he pulled his scarf down and placed the cigarette into his mouth, he raised his lighter up and lit it, ignoring what Eri had said.

He then looked up, 'what the hell is going on, I know Eri does not play tricks like this especially not on me,' Naota thought still inhaling on his cig, the voice along with the person had disappeared, but he knew it was Ninamori's voice.

Naota's scarf draped over his shoulders, and his cig in mouth he started walking back to the stream, 'something isn't right with all of this stuff happening, maybe I am just not getting enough sleep or maybe oversleeping,' Naota considered those possibilities while he walked back to the stream.

Naota went back to the spot he sat in during lunch break and leaned against the pillar, 'another possibility is that thing inside of me...that monster, no it can't be that because I have it fully under control.'

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So, what did you think liked it, hated it, any ideas, questions maybe?. If I switched from present to past and back and forth, I have a horrible habit of that, I will continue to work on it got it now REVIEW. Trust me on this it gets even more interesting.

Signed,

Vicious