So after reading the many Saw rip offs and having thought of one of my own after seeing the movies I figured I'll write it and see what others think of it… of course the reason I thought of it to begin with was because I like to torture and cause my Hitori physical pain… I'm creepy. Ok I'll shut up now. If anyone wants I can post a picture of any of these charaters to Flicr.
Crimson eyes opened to see what they wished they hadn't. In front of them lay his twin brother, caged and injured. From where he himself lay it appears his twin is injured rather severely. He tries, and fails to sit up when his hands are bound to what he now realizes is a wall he's strapped to, and correcting himself that he's not actually laying down. "Hari… Hari wake up!" He calls to his brother who stirs hearing his voice call to him. "Hi-Hiri?" He struggles to say, pushing himself up to a sitting position. "Good you're alive…" Hitori - nicknamed Hiri - sighs, relieved his brother is alive, though injured and by the expression on his face, in major pain.
Upon this remark Hatori - nicknamed Hari - just catches the small pool of blood he now realizes is his own. Finally hitting him he reaches for the left side of his stomach where the blood had come from, surging with pain and making him nauseous. "Hiri…" He mumbles out loud looking for his younger twin. Once his eyes fell on his brother, Hatori gulped as he saw that his brother is strapped to the wall across from him. "Where… are we…?" he finally asks, pretty positive there's an answer, however unknown to either of the boys. Hatori takes a good look around, Hitori doing the same, for any sign of the reason they're in the positions they are and where to get out at. The room wasn't very cozy, the walls were a dark brown and the floor was wood. It was slightly dark, the only light from one incandescent tube on the ceiling.
Both have found only one door in the room they share, with a rather unique lock. The lock was shaped much like a combination lock, however it has a key hole. "Looks like we need a key…" Hitori stating the obvious merely for the sake of thinking out loud and getting more from his brother to get a better idea of his condition. "I don't like the look of it though…" Hatori chimes for the same reason, wanting to hear some clue as to his twin's state. Hatori is the elder of the two by a couple of minutes, though it seemed like Hitori was more mature when it came to situations requiring a leader. That's who he is, Hitori is a leader, the one to take charge when no one else will. Both are 28, Hatori, though older, tends to rely on his younger brother's, more than his own abilities to fend for himself. Despite being the younger twin, Hitori has trained to earn the title he wears as Guardian. Even so, Hitori isn't invincible. He has his weaknesses, and Hatori knows them all too well. Both boys said simultaneously with a slight nervousness in their voices, "Looks like our key is somewhere on us".
Hitori more than anything is uneasy about his brother's injury, despite the ache he has in his arms. He was born with the gracious gift to heal, though the ability has its drawbacks. It takes a large amount of energy that after so long will render him unconscious. Not only that but he can only heal an injury within a certain amount of time and he cannot heal himself. He takes another look around and notices something he couldn't believe he missed the first time. Hung above his brother's head held in place by a chain attached to a conveyor belt is a large and sharp scythe. Hitori takes notice to another sight he somehow missed his first glance around, Hatori's injury had been stitched sloppily.
Hatori decides after a little while to fight his pain and stand, regretting it immediately as he is hit with a wave of sharp shooting pain. He pushes the pain aside as best he can and starts to wonder as far as he can, before pulling the chain attached to a collar he is wearing, which he hadn't noticed until now. When he pulls the chain as far as he can he realizes he can make it half way to his brother, where a white line lay on the floor but no further. He strains a little to try and reach his brother until a sound stops him dead in his tracks. "Stop!" Hitori shouted at him. "Don't move" he cautioned his twin in almost a whisper as he nodded towards the ceiling behind him. Hatori, confused but understood the urgency in the words, follows the nod and spies the scythe that had moved ever so slightly as he did. The chain on his collar is the one holding the scythe up, if he tried to get any closer to his twin it would surely drop. "What now?" He asks no one in particular. Hitori, the leader he is, takes charge and immediately tells him, "Don't move for now. Your weight will hold the scythe in place if you made it over to me, but it'll likely be way too heavy and pull you back."
Hatori has no idea what to do. If he moves the scythe will pull him back, kill Hitori and most likely strangle or rip his own head off. They both know getting out without a scar isn't likely, and they both think for a long while before a sound interrupts their thoughts. The sound seemed to surround the room though they saw the speakers on the corners of the ceiling. A voice, deep and rather calm came to speak, explaining what they had already figured out. "I have been hired to assassinate you, Hitori, Hatori. However I would like to know if you really deserve to die. Let me explain your situation. Hatori. The collar you are wearing is chained to a scythe hanging above your head. Once you cross the white line in the middle of the room the scythe will begin to drop and will drag you back as it does. If the scythe falls all the way it will lodge itself in the heart of your younger twin and retreat, ripping it out of his chest."
Hatori gulped, Hitori made a noise similar to a nervous growl and both were silently listening, contemplating. The voice boomed back continuing. "Hitori, you're strapped to the wall across from him. The key to the door lies in your left shoulder, neither of you will escape if you aren't willing to make a sacrifice. Be a good little brother now. And Hatori, don't hesitate too long to make your choice". The static faded as the speakers shut off. The two were silent, and unsure of what to do. Hatori is unsure of what he was supposed to do. He can't reach his brother to merely use his pocket knife and dig the key out, but Hitori can't get it himself either. A few minutes pass before Hatori feels his collar pull him slightly and the scythe fall about an inch. Hitori finally speaks out and breaks the silence. "Hari… run over to me…"
Hatori blinked to make sure he heard right. Hitori continues, elaborating. "Time is key here and we have to hurry. Run over and hold onto me, but take a deep breath first. The collar is going strangle you on your way, so you need to move quickly. If you hold on the scythe can't move until you let go…" Hatori protested in concern, "What about you?". "You have to release my left hand before you let go, and let go slowly." Hatori understood now, he took a deep breath and exhaled.
He took another deep breath and held it, and dashed towards his brave brother. He made it in time to latch his arm around Hitori's before the scythe pulled him back, but he's having troubling keeping hold to him. After releasing Hitori's left hand from its restraint he took hold of it and slid slowly back to his previous place before coming to a stop when Hitori's arm can reach no further. "Try to hold the ground to slow the pull. Let me know when you're ready and I'll let go" Hitori instructed his elder as he held desperately to his hand, the weight of the scythe pulling on them both. Hatori quickly positions himself as best he can to slow the pull, loosening his grip on his brother's hand to let him know he's ready. Hitori was staring at the scythe intensely until he felt Hatori leave him the only one holding on. Hitori takes one last glance at the scythe before releasing his brother and quickly positioning himself so that his left shoulder is in the scythe's path.
Hatori took a sharp breath in from both lack of oxygen and pain as he collided with the wall. He jumped when he heard a scream from the only other person in the room and quickly stood to scan the situation. "Ahh!" Hitori screamed as the scythe sliced his shoulder open, flinging the key out and on the floor. "Hiri!" Hatori cried out to him. The collar at some point broke off of him and he ran over to his brother's side. He released his brother's other hand from its restraint and held him to his chest. Hitori tugged and tried to pull one of the three shirts he was wearing off. Hatori helped, getting the shirt off and sitting him up. He knew what his brother was doing, so he took the shirt, wrapped it around his shoulder and tied it tightly. Hitori moaned lightly from the pain the make-shift tourniquet caused.
Hitori recovered much too quickly from his pain than his brother would have liked, but before he had a chance to doubt the recovery his brother had pulled his shirt up over his stomach. Hitori is a doctor and was skeptical of the stitches. He looked at them carefully and fixed what he could without causing too much pain, since Hatori opened it when he collided with the wall. Once done Hitori sighs and looks to his brother, "We're alive… let's get out of here…". He stood and helped his brother up, picking the key up off the floor on the way. The twins made their way to the door and unlocked the lock.
As they pulled the lock off the door the speakers sounded once again, this time with a familiar voice. "Hari… big brother… please… I want to see you both… I'm locked in a room with monitors, and I can see you both. I can see what you're in for but I can't tell you. Please, you two have to help me. I love you both and I don't want to see either one of you hurt…" The voice sobbed as it spoke, scared and concerned as it's high pitch reached the ears of the now terrified and angry brothers. The two squeezed each other's hand and whispered, "Ellena…" the voice's identity, their younger sister.
The two looked over to a corner in the back where the camera was with a determined and concerned look, hoping they could at least get her condition from her. "Ellena we will help you…" Hatori starts, not knowing if she can actually hear him. "But can you tell us your situation? We'll hurry but please ease our worry a little…" Hitori finishes, with a stare ready to kill, sure that the one holding his sister is watching as well. After a few moments of silence the two passed off as permission, the speakers were alive again. "I have a collar… kinda… there's a timer on it. The time reads 2 hours, 15 minutes. It started out at 2 and a half. I wasn't told what will happen if it reaches zero and I can't hear you… I only know what you asked because I was told. Hurry, I don't want to find out. Flame is waiting for in the next room. It's the only door cracked in the hallway you're about to go in. And please, be careful. If Flame is with you there's no doubt one of you will have to die. I know you two are strong but could you really kill each other?" Her voiced faded as did the speakers.
Ok so explaining Flame and everything in the chapter would make it extremely long, so I'll explain in the next. The next will mostly be a background story on them but there is a bit of twincest fluff hiding here and there so fair warning to those who dislike it. Anyway I write this a lot so I probably will update soon if people like this, my mind is crazy and tormenting poor Hitori is it's favorite thing to do.
For those curious these characters came from a rpg my little sister and I made up when we were little. I think it's been… based off the ages about five years we've done it. Anyway so that's where they came from so most of their back story again is all made up by me and my sister. So technically my only disclaimer would be that I borrowed and ripped off Saw since I do own rights to then as I made them.
Review and please, it is a pet peeve of mine, so let me know if there are any errors in spelling or if I missed words (I tend to a lot). Thank yous~!