Between the Night and Day: Twilight Rewritten

by Exedous

A better executed version of Twilight with Bella replaced by a well adjusted if rather nerdy Hanami Zuikaku. Some of the characters have been changed to fit a plot that's no longer a confusing, sappy, romance story. Features Bella's replacement acting in a realistic fashion. Gets darker later on. Review or Flame but whatever you do, make it constructive. (Unedited version)

1. Preface

Should anyone deem to find this then please note that this was not a work born of love for the Twilight Saga. No, it is a work born of my vehement desire to see that the Twilight Saga undergoes the proper revision that is due before a work of literature is published for the general audiences. Now, you may be thinking "Oh no, it's another hater who has never read the book and will not understand its greatness." I will tell you right now. I have read the book.

I have read the book and I did not like it. I found it poorly written, the characterization shallow, the plot more twisted and convoluted than that one time my girlfriend attempted to make spagettiimsoRRYPLEASEDONTKILLME!, Bella to be a completely uninteresting, unsympathetic and unlikeable main protagonist, Edward to be more suited to being a minor antagonist rather than a main protagonist, and Jacob (in the first book anyway) to be a decently well adjusted guy.

I'm not hating on the series. I read the book after all. It's just that while the story had potential, it was poorly executed.

So here I am. I'm going to be going through the book and rewriting the Twilight Saga, or at least the first book anyway. I am going to be deconstructing every asset of Twilight, changing it into a narrative that can stand on more than the premise of sparkly vampires and hormonal teenage girls, and hopefully not get an aneurysm halfway through it. Spoiler alert! I'm going to make Bella a slightly strange and a bit nerdy but otherwise well adjusted and strong female protagonist.

I am also going to do what should have been done from the beginning and put Edward Cullen in his proper place, as an antagonist. Nothing will dissuade me from this. He's pretty creepy and not at all romantic if you think about it for a split second.

Also, I'm going to be changing the names around to circumvent copywrite and stuff. It's just how it's gonna go, just bear with it.

I am also going to tone down Vampires, as in, make them actual vampires without superpowers. If you want superpowers, go have a looksee at Vampire Knight. Not only is it actually coherent, the vampires are very much more interesting. AND THEY STILL GO TO HIGH SCHOOL!

In case I do get an aneurysm from this venture and somehow die, I leave all my worldly possessions to my best friend and my dog Dr. Prof. Adv. Lord Sir Roger Ramius Sergei Alexander McPupperwinkle Sr. 1st Esq.

In any case. Wish me luck guys.