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Five/Yasmina:
phew. A beam of light from a Mogadorian cannon just raced past my face, I was too busy concentrating on firing the lasers coming from my hands in the direction of about twenty Mogs and US military agents coming my way, the enemy, to deflect the shot with my mind.
I blow up a car that they are approaching with my lasers and send the five or so, that escaped the explosion as something other than a pile of ash or an unconscious body, racing towards the building to my right, I am too focused at the moment to realize what the building is but I know, from the strength of the push, that they will be in no condition to come back after me.

Another wave if Mogs is coming my way and I don't think I have the strength to carry on. I am getting weaker and weaker, I send a Mog careering into another pack on their way over; they are all heavily armed. I am getting weaker and I can sense my legacies starting to lose their strength. Another Mog bursts into a cloud of ash thanks to the lasers that I am producing. All the time, I am running, at the same time as deflecting bullets and beams with my mind and shooting lasers from my hand. I finally spot what I was looking for, a possible way out of this mess. There is a very wide river with no bridge in sight about fifty meters away. The gap is further than I have jumped before and I know it's a long shot but I have to get out of here. I gradually start running faster and faster reaching amazing speed as my legacies allow I know they won't catch up for the moment and I know they can't make it over the river. This is surely going to buy me more time. I am running flat out now and that is an amazing speed compared to what a human had ever seen. As soon as I reach the edge of the river I take a giant leap.

I am relying on a legacy I developed just before my lasers, it allows me to jump much higher than most other Loric and much farther. I don't know the proper name for this legacy but I named it super jump; not very imaginative, I know. I am falling through the air and am approaching the other side, when I see what a huge mistake I have made. I couldn't see the ground on the other side properly from where I stood so I didn't notice where I was going to land. Too late, I realize that I am going to land on a huge heap of rocks that have formed on the river's edge. I was so busy thinking if I could jump the river clearly I forgot to think of the landing, I close my eyes and wait for the inevitable. I can almost feel the pain already, maybe I will die instantly and won't have to feel much pain, maybe the others will feel another scar burning into their ankles in a few seconds, and I just hope they aren't in the middle of something. I laugh at the thought, seconds from death I am worried about what the others are up to. I notice that I am still waiting. Why won't the end just come? I can still feel the wind blowing fiercely onto my face and I know the ground must be approaching. I am still waiting. How can it take that long? I wonder if I am already dead. No. I wouldn't feel the wind. So what is happening? I brave a glance and as I flash my eyes open I am amazed, frightened and relieved by what I see. The trees are disappearing beneath me. The clouds are getting closer and the air colder and thinning. I am flying.

How am I flying? This isn't humanly possible. The irony of what I just said makes me chuckle and then I just can't help myself and it becomes full blown laughter because of the feeling of freedom while I fly through the wind. It makes me overwhelmed with glee and joy even though I know I have only narrowly escaped death and I need to get away. The fact is I am not human. I am Loric and a member of the Garde and the fighters for our planet Lorien. I am one of the nine Garde who were sent to earth during the Mogadorian invasion when we knew the war was lost. We were sent to earth with nine Cêpan to teach and protect us and our legacies; our inheritance from the original elders of Lorien. There was a charm placed on us before we left meaning as long as we stay apart we can only be killed in order, and the Mogs are the ones that want us killed. one, two and three are dead four was hunted and is still alive along with what I believe to be other Garde, maybe they are all together by now but I am alone. I am number five.

I know by the absence of any more scars other than three on my ankle that the other five are left but the charm is broken now. We can be killed whenever we like. I know as I have been near death twice before at the hands of the Mogs guns and blades but have miraculously survived both times. I realize that the scar system might have stopped now that the charm is broken, I hope not. I wonder where the rest are, I need to find them or they need to find me. We need to be together. I sit in a high up tree in the south of Cuba and try to clear my head and think of what I need to do next. I have just flown across the sea separating Jamaica and Cuba at amazing speeds getting a feel for flying and moving faster as I went. The weakness I was feeling earlier has now gone and I feel better than ever. Apart from singed hair, tattered clothes and a load of scratches and bruises I am fine. It is about midnight in Cuba now and I am tired, I need to find a place to sleep. I look up to the sky and spot Lorien. For some reasons my eyes are just drawn to it and it is not hard for me to find. It looks brighter now. Maybe getting stronger as the Garde are coming together and getting stronger themselves. The planet is preparing for our return.

Four/John:

Six has just beaten me up again for the fourth time in the past five minutes. Marina is now sparring with nine, Ella is fighting Sarah and eight is fighting Bernie Kosar, they are both in some kind of wolf form. All of us apart from Sarah are Garde from the planet Lorien, Sarah is human but Ella is much younger and is only slightly faster and stronger than Sarah and has got better technique. So they are an okay match. Sarah fights well and I am glad. This means she can at least defend herself in battle but Ella is a natural and is beating her nearly as much as Six is beating me. When Ella wins she helps Sarah up and goes a little easy but I get no such luck with six as I am brutally floored again and again and she stands above me daring me to get back up. I like this element of bad-ass in her it makes her look quite fit. No, I think. I am with Sarah, I can't lose her now, not again, and I have to stop thinking of Six like that.

Nine and six are clearly the best when it comes to one on one sparring, nine is the strongest and Six is the most skillful with some pretty good legacies as well. She can go invisible which gives her a great advantage when it comes to fighting with legacies, she can control the elements, meaning she can also control the weather making storms and fog at whim and she can, like the rest of us, move things with her mind using telekinesis. Nine has super hearing and can hear for miles, he can use anti gravity, transfer legacies to humans and others, he is extremely fast, can talk to animals and is stronger than any of us, even Six. I can't help but admire and envy them both.

I have Lumen which means I can shine lights from my hands, not very impressive but it also allows me to be impervious to flames and heat and lets me set fire to things such as myself, turning myself into a fireball of fireballs. I like that part of it. I can also talk to animals like Nine and heal like Seven (Marina). My way of healing is quite different though. She seems to just be able to heal anything from small cuts to gaping gunshot wounds. The only times I could use my legacy was when Ella and Sarah was in a life threatening situation and whenever I get the same feeling of desperation and need. The thought of losing Sarah again and the thought of losing another Garde just drove me to do it and I have to get that horrible feeling of hopelessness whenever I use it. It almost makes me wish I didn't have it but I have to remind myself that Sarah and Ella wouldn't be here if I didn't have it. I just hope I can control it better soon without the need to be in that state.

Marina just keeps dodging nines repeated punches, it all looks like a blur, and they are going so fast. I can just make out the two figures. Marina has turned out to be the quickest of us all, mean nine is super speedy but Marina could run circles around him so what she lacks in strength and legacies to fight she more than makes up for by dodging. She can also breathe under water, see in the dark and can heal better than me. I can tell she is really happy now her super speed has developed so greatly, she doesn't feel intimidated by us all anymore and no longer feels useless.

Me and Six have stopped sparring and are taking a drink break, I look over at Eight and Bernie and can't tell who is who but I talk to BK with my mind and urge him to win. I see Nine smiling and I know he heard the transfer of thoughts and while he's distracted Marina takes him down for the first time in days so now it's my turn to smile. They walk over to us and stand near taking a sip from their canteens and I can see they're quite tired after that session. Ella telepathically tells everyone that we should all have a rest now after all that training and I can't help but join in with everyone's agreement. Telepathy is a damn cool legacy to have and it's the only one Ella has developed unless you count her ability to switch through ages which she had since the Elder Loridas died. We had ended the training with a no legacy fight in the woods. Eight was allowed to use his as he was against BK, my Chimæra, who is basically an animal who can change shape, my favorite form being the beagle he has now turned back into. Also super speed and strength is almost impossible to avoid so it was only Ella, Six, Sarah and I who were following the rules of now legacies. That is if you don't count our natural enhanced, speed and strength.

We are standing around our makeshift table (a tree stump); we have been running through the woods and shrubbery since the fight with Setrákus Ra, our enemy. We are making our way towards the John Hancock Center because this is the only place where we know we can get a computer easily to check the white Tablet in my Chest to see if we can locate the remaining Garde member, number Five.

Nine insists that they will not have found the safe house yet and that it will be safe and as there is no other plan we have to believe him. Hopefully we won't have to fight our way through a swarm of Mogs to get there.

It is hard finding our way through the trees, especially as no one knows where we actually are and where we are actually meant to be headed and I feel that we need to move to the road and look out for some signs. Or something but when I finally say this I get the reply in a form of Six shouting,

'What do you mean, go to a road? Are you mad? We are Six aliens and a human who are all being viciously hunted by another alien race and the US Military and you think we can just go out in the open and hitch a ride?, and you!', she turns to Nine, 'You are planning on taking us to the sixth tallest building in the country which is probably being watched by Mogs and Military officers. We all must be mad if we are following these jerks into to our imminent capture.'

By the ferocity of these words I can tell that the anger has been building up for quite a while, I am trying to think of what to say when Ella's small voice chimes in,

'I understand what you are saying Six but I think I have to agree with John and Nine. I mean we need to find Five somehow and we need a computer to do it and we can't make it there if we don't know where we are going and also I could rally go for one of Nines frozen pizzas he keeps telling us about, I need food. His sustenance just isn't enough, it doesn't feel right. And you know we have to stick together now, we don't want to lose another one of us.'

Her small voice seems somehow soothing and we all nod in agreement, even Six, Ella and Marina seem like the only people who can get to six and make her see sense. Ella is like our little sister who always knows what to say.

'Sorry for snapping like that, this whole thing is just getting to me,' Six says in reply.

'So what are we waiting for, let's move and Johnny my boy, or should I say Pittacus, you ready to get your ass kicked again in the safe house,' Nine says to me.

I smile knowing what he is talking about and dig him in the ribs, all the others just look at us bewildered. Nines cockiness is something we all just have to get used to.