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Engineer
General Note
I appreciate constructive criticism, and don't offend easily. Feel free to highlight an inconsistency, codex issue, or any other major issue. Message me, or write a review(messaging is better. I cannot alter reviews). I'll try to read 'em. The more specific the criticism, the better. Cogent feedback will always be welcome.
This is my first major attempt at writing. Shepard will romance Tali in this story(and her only). This story will stick, basically, to the ME2 plotline with several notable changes and rabbit trails, some of which will effect the major elements of the story. I hope it's at least somewhat entertaining. I will try to be as accurate as I can to canon mechanics and history, but will not be copying dialogue from the game regularly. I find that's boring. I will put appropriate dialogue in when I can. Ultimately, I'd like to write something of my own. However, if I can't make a worthwhile story from a plot I know by heart, I don't expect to create an engaging story from nothing. A 'Mass Effect' story seemed like an opportune test and outlet. Again, feedback(the more specific the better) is always appreciated(barring trolling and pointless/aimless negativity).
My DeviantArt account is 'Gloomreachestates'. The outline for this fiction can be found there. A simplified outline of unfinished chapters can be found in the information chapter. It's the last in the list of chapters.
I had released this story before. I deleted it, and this is a reboot. There were several reasons for this, foremost among them spelling, formatting, and updating issues. All of these problems meant the document needed a fresh start.
Just to clarify...
This is narration.
This is thought.
"This is dialogue."
"Italics emphasize a word, but not at elevated volume."
"THIS IS SPEAKING TOO LOUDLY."
"This is shouting normally!"
"THIS IS YELLING AT MAXIMUM VOLUME!"
Subject: Notification
From: StillholdingoutforGDI
This is an OmniTool message.
Issues I'm working on
1: More lively, accurate, and entertaining dialogue.
2: More interesting and organic character interaction. Also, less awkward and slow character interaction.
3: I don't like Jacob. That shouldn't come across so clearly.
Note: The funeral chapter(#2), and first Cerberus station chapters(#3, 4) are admittedly rough/awkward. Feel free to skip them, or make constructive recommendations.