Dance in the Rain

This is my first full fanfic, so I'd love it if you'd have any pointers! Read the summary; if you want to know what it's about, and of course R&R!

Ferncloud was having her kits. Leafpool was standing aside overseeing Jayfeather's work, he had only kitted a couple of times! Ferncloud took her breath the last kit was out. "Congratulations," Daisy purred. "You have two toms and one she-cat."

Ferncloud sighed, as she looked at her kits. She laid a tail on the black tom, "This is Swiftkit," She murmured and turned her attention to the tabby white tom, "He is Sparrowkit," she declared, and at last looked at the light gray she-cat. "She is Rainkit," Ferncloud announced. The Swift, the Sparrow, and the Rain were born.

How did you like it? Please review to tell me what you think, or you can pm me. Just so you know this does take place with Omen of the stars, just Jayfeather hasn't been told about the fourth yet.