Here's a rewrite! It's better than the first one and contributes to the story more as a whole. It adds more to Sadie's background and has more of Ringo in it. If this is the first time you're reading this, then I'm happy for you you didn't get to read the terrible original. Please enjoy! And Review!
P.S. I'll be rewriting some of the chapters to make them fit too!
Sadie lay on the couch of her rich Liverpudlian home while her mother vacuumed the carpet. She lived in the middle part of the town and her family frowned on the working class citizens except for Sadie. She was interested in everything, being a rebellious teenager and all, she wanted to explore as much as she could of the "other side".
The rise of the so called "rock and roll" music made Sadie's mother nervous and protective of her only daughter. Her mother, Suzanne, had come from the poor side of Liverpool. She didn't like her daughter associating with the side she had come from in fear that Sadie too would end up going through the same thing she did.
Sadie twirled her long blonde hair between her fingers while she read the magazine in her other hand. Suzanne was starting to get annoyed with her daughter. "Sadie, will you please get up and help me clean?"
"Sorry, mum! I don't want to start something and not be able to finish!" Sadie yelled over the vacuum, leaving her mother confused. Suzanne stopped the vacuum.
"What do you mean?" her mother asked from behind the couch. Sadie looked up at her.
"Umm, Lizzy is coming to drag me somewhere with her. . ." Sadie trailed off and Suzanne looked down at her.
"Oh. . ." Sadie's mother approves of most of Sadie's friends except for Lizzy. She believes that since Lizzy is so rebellious, that Sadie will follow Lizzy wherever she goes and do whatever she does. . .
"Yeah, I know how much you don't like her, mum but she said it's important! Though Lizzy does get excited over dull things. . ." Sadie's ears perk up as the door bell rings five times simultaneously. "That must be Lizzy!"
Sadie rises up from the couch and grabs her bag from the coffee table. "Have fun then. . ." Suzanne says quietly as Sadie rushes out the door.
Lizzy stood at the bottom of the stairs in her leather jacket. She was kicking some snow around in her boots impatiently while waiting for her friend. Her short blonde hair was tucked into a hat to keep warm. "Took ya long enough!" she exclaimed when she saw Sadie. She looked her up and down then shook her head.
"What?" Sadie asked nervously.
"Yer dress is just so posh! I dunno 'ow yer gonna survive two seconds whurr we're goin'!" Sadie frowned at her friend in confusion.
"Where are we going?" Sadie put her jacket on over her dress but still felt insecure next to Lizzy's rebellious leather jacket and boots.
"That my dear, is a secret that'll you'll 'afta wait tah be revealed!" Lizzy ran ahead of Sadie but stopped at the bus stop ahead.
"I hate it when ya do that!" Sadie groaned to her friend who was laughing. "Lizzy! I can't run in these shoes!" Sadie speed walked up to her friend as the bus came up to the bus stop. The two girls boarded and sat in a seat at the back of the bus. "So where are we going again?" Sadie smiled mischievously, knowing her friend couldn't keep secrets long.
"No, Sadie!" her friend scolded her like a dog "Ya 'ave tah wait till we get there!" Sadie looked down at her bag on her lap in disappointment.
"Umm" Lizzy looked at Sadie awaiting what she was going to say, "How long is it going to take?"
"For Goodness Sake, Sadie! Can't ya wait a couple seconds?" Lizzy's voice got higher in annoyance with her friend. "See! 'Ere we are!" Lizzy stood up from her seat before the bus was able to stop. The two girls walked off of the bus to be hit with the cool night air.
"Thank you, Mr. Harrison" Sadie said to the driver, giving him some extra money. He smiled at her as a thank you as he closed the door.
"Do you know everyone, Sadie?" Lizzy asked her friend with a blasé expression.
"Well. . . My dad is a big part of Liverpool. . ." Sadie looked down nervously as someone came behind Lizzy and wrapped their arms around her.
"'Ellooo you two!" he grinned and kissed Lizzy on her cheek.
"Eddie! Stop it!" Lizzy laughed as he nibbled on her neck.
"So, you two 'ere tah see me band? Oh! Looks like ya finally got me cous' outta the 'ouse!" Eddie Clayton is Sadie's cousin from the poor side of town. He's the son of Sadie's mother's brother and apparently has his own band.
"Cheeky!" Sadie called to him. Eddie took out a cigarette and lit it, which disgusted and intrigued Sadie at the same time. She really should be getting out of the house more. . .
"He is right yano Sadie! Ya don't get out enough!" Lizzy took out a cigarette of her own and let Eddie light it for her.
"Wait! You're smoking too?" Sadie gasped at her friend and cousin.
"Aw, lighten up a little! Here! Just try it! It's not gonna 'urt ya!" Eddie extended his arm to Sadie but she didn't take his offer.
"I think I'll pass. . . So what are we doing here?" Sadie rocked on her heels and looked at the building she was standing in front of. It was made of bricks and went down to a cellar like area. People wearing clothes a lot like Lizzy's were walking up and down the stairs. In and out of the building.
"Eddie's band is playing 'ere so we came tah see 'em!" Lizzy grinned in excitement and clinged onto Eddie's arm for warmth.
"Yeah, we should probably go in. I think my Skiffle Group is goin' on soon!" Eddie led the two girls down the stairs to the crowded area. Full tables were everywhere around them except Eddie had reserved a table just for them.
"Is someone else coming to sit with us?" Sadie asked Lizzy after they sat down and Eddie had walked away to on stage.
"Oh, right! Yeah, Eddie's got this drummer in 'is band and they're like best mates now!" Sadie nodded with Lizzy until Lizzy's attention got dragged away from her friend.
"'ello, 'ello everyone! I'm Eddie Clayton and this is me Skiffle Group! I'd like to dedicate this fihst song tah me girl Lizzy right down therr!" he pointed to Lizzy who screamed his name. Eddie laughed into the microphone then introduced the song. Sadie was suddenly enthralled with the music.
She kept her eyes on the drummer of the band. His dark brown hair was gelled back to match Eddie's and like Eddie, he was in a suit, except Eddie had a leather jacket on over his dress shirt. The drummer's head bopped side to side to his own beat of the drums. He drew so much of Sadie's attention that she forgot that her mother was going to scold her when she gets home. She forgot the dangers of this so called "rock and roll" music.
The band stopped playing after the fifth song but Lizzy continued screaming and Sadie kept staring at the place where the drummer was until Lizzy started shaking her. "Isn't Eddie amazing, Sadie? 'Is voice works so well with the music!"
"Huh? Oh, right! Yes, it does. . ." Sadie took a sip of her drink nervously as Eddie came out from back stage with the drummer behind him. Eddie sat down in the chair next Lizzy while the drummer sat down in the empty chair next to Sadie.
"This is me mate, Richard. We all call 'im Ritchie though" Sadie turned to the drummer as Lizzy and Eddie got really touchy. Ritchie turned to Sadie and smiled at her.
"'Ello, you can call me 'Ringo' actually" Sadie raised an eyebrow at him. She couldn't help her snobbiness by looking him up and down. He had side burns and a slight beard that connected to a mustache. Usually, Sadie would think of him as looking messy with the facial hair but this drummer looked cleaner than Eddie.
"I'm Sadie. It's a pleasure to meet you" Ringo chuckled at how polite Sadie was being but the girl didn't understand. "What are you laughing at?"
"Yer just so posh! It's like ya stick out" Sadie looked down at the skirt of her dress in embarrassment. She wouldn't say anything in fear of sticking out more "I'm sorry, I didn't mean it like that! Umm. . . Ya look really nice in that dress"
"Thank you. . ." Sadie mumbled, not loud enough for him to hear. Ringo looked down at his hands and played with his rings, feeling awkward with this quiet girl and the couple making out across the table.
"Yer umm. . . Really pretty actually" Ringo's face turned red and Sadie looked up in surprise.
"I should really be getting home. I mean, it's late and my mum gets worried easily" she stood up from the table getting the attention of Lizzy and Eddie.
"But, didn't ya just get 'ere?" Ringo asked her with his eyebrows knitted together.
"It's already eight though and I don't wanna worry my mum. I'm sorry, it was really nice meeting you though" Sadie rushed out of the door of the pub and found the bus. It had pulled up right when she walked out. It was a different bus driver that she doesn't know which made her nervous. Once she got home, her mother scolded her for being out so late but Sadie dared not to tell her mother what she had been through.