My first fanfic! I had the dictionary sat next to me but I still believe it'll have a lot of grammar and spelling mistake. Warning, I cheated from another people's fics for the grammar, a LOT I have forgotten how many, probably from my favorite writers and stories.

Write, Forgive me, any similarities was caused by that reason or just some coincidences.. Pleas and give me points from 0 to 5 about my grammar.

If any of you (readers) is good at English (or BETA) dedicated at helping people in grammar crisis, please help me! Italic font = Thought

NOTICE : ADVENTURE TIME With Finn And Jake originally created by Pedleton Ward for Cartoon Network

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DEBILE ATTEMPTS

Act 1 : The Fight

The beast silenced, blood streaming down from the little sharp metallic present Finn gave, washed up by the rain. Finn was approaching it slowly while drawing out another sword from his backpack. He carefully poked its body to see if it still alive.

This time, He fully sure It wasn't breathing. A big grin grew on the boy's face as he turned back with his fists aimed up to the mourning sky. He nodded to his injured companion whom showed a weak thumbs up. And then Finn let all of his excitement out,

"We wo..".

Wait

There's something wrong, he noticed his head just in time the beast triggered its claw, ready to sliced up some guts out. Dodge! his mind and company cried out. The beast's gave him no time to react.

In Jake's head, everything went slow. His best friend stood there as the beast's claw scooped him away. No, Finn firmly hold his blade to his side to guard himself, make him tossed away, but not shattered into half. Jake snapped by the sound of clicking metal when the blade hit the ground. He has to stop Finn's fall.

He dashed as fast as his skinny yellow leg could and stretch himself and cushion Finn's impact as they landed. Luckily, rain soaked the dirt soft.

"Finn!", Jake gasped. "Vin.. Finn, are you fine?", he removed a strand of golden hair out of his little brother's dirty pale face.

"Wake up!", he shook him a bit in shock.

"...Jake?", Finn opened his eyes, shifted his head for a better view.

"Where is that beast?", he mumbled while his hands eagerly hunting for his sword.

"Finn? We should draw back to recover our injuries" Jake paused, tried to stop him.

"I'm still strong enough to carry us to safety".

"No, Jake", Finn narrowed his eyes as he forced himself to stance up.

Jake just frowned, By heart he could tell, Finn would never listen to him

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That stone headed boy never listened to his brother. He just pushed himself along the journey, either he was running or wobbly his way to the finish line—or his own self destruct. It breath fired to fried them alive. Even his arms were no longer able to hold his sword, Finn run to his death.

But he's still alive, Jake sacrificed himself as a shield for his partner. The beast flew away without any rational reason..maybe it had already got what it needs?

Oh Glob, What will happen to them?

The chapter's so short isn't it? I can't promise you a long chapter, because i can't. Just continue reading to the next day! ^^.

NOTICE : ADVENTURE TIME With Finn And Jake originally created by Pedleton Ward for Cartoon Network