Authors note: I don't own Naruto
I read some of the other fanfics and was very impressed about the stories and how you guys write them. This caused me to come up with something and I began to create my own fanfic and here is my first.
I want to apologize for my bad English because my native language is German. I hope it's not so bad to read since my writing stile is also a little different then most of the other fanfics I read.
I also want you to review me about how you like the story and maybe some tips to write it better. But pleas don't write stuff just like "This is junk." Or "This sucks.". Please tell me what is bad or good so I can adapt the future chapters and also write my next story better from the beginning.
To the story itself:
3 years after Naruto left Konoha Akatsuki and Orochimaru are dead and he managed to bring Sasuke back. But Sasuke is not very pleased about it and hates Naruto for killing his brother Itachi. Meanwhile a new and even stronger enemy appeared.
It's an adventure/romance story with most of the main characters and some OC's. Essentially it's a Naru/Hina story with a little bit (or most likely complete) different Hinata then you know. Enjoy.
Prologue: „I promised you, that I would bring him back ... didn't I?"
3 years after Naruto left Konoha
*** Konoha forest***
It was late afternoon in the Konoha forest as two Shinobi slowly walked on the road heading to Konoha. The big one looked a little old and had long white hair and red marks in his face. He was wearing a grey suit and a red jacket.
The small one was definitely younger and had blonde spiky hair and 3 whisker marks on both of his cheeks and wearing an orange suit with black stripes. Almost his whole body was wrapped into bandages and some of them were very bloody. They young man carried the body of another young man with black spiky hair with blue and white cloths. This body also was bandaged heavily and this man looked like he was unconscious.
The blonde carried him with hard steps and he looked like he would pass out any minute now. It was very hard for him to keep his eyes open, and look straight on the road but he was determined to continue.
The white haired man looked at the younger one and asked him "Shall I carry him?"
Without any reaction the young man walked forward. "Naruto!" the old man said a little louder. "Don't worry about me, Jiraiya-sama. I carry him home."
Jiraiya knew that he couldn't convince Naruto with words. But he accepted his wish and they carry on.
***Konoha***
The dawn almost begun in Konoha and the guards sitting at the front gate were already tired and waiting for the replacement as Jiraiya and Naruto walked through the gate. Instantly they jumped up and wanted to welcome the two Shinobi, but they ignored them and walk straight forward. Two Shinobi both in a green dresses walked by on their hands as they recognized Jiraiya and Naruto. They stopped and stand up on their feet again watching them walking by with surprising faces. Naruto stopped and said "Hello Lee. Where is Sakura-chan?". The smaller Shinobi still had a surprising face and answered. "She .. she must be at the school actually!" Naruto nodded gratefully and headed on to the school leaving the two behind him. "What the hell happened Jiraiya!" the mature Shinobi asked. "I'll explain it later, Gai!" Jiraiya said and followed Naruto. Lee and Gai waited a few seconds and followed them afterwards.
In front of the school a large number of Shinobi was training. Most of them were about twelve years old. They were trained by a handful of young older Shinobi. One of them was a girl with pink short hair and a wide forehead.
"Hey Sakura-chan." A little Shinobi said to her with a bored voice. "What is it again Konohamaru!" the girl said with a little bit of anger in her voice. Since his training time with Naruto, Konohamaru grew up to a pretty good ninja student. But his behavior was still the same. "Why do I have to train with kunai's? I want to learn a new Jutsu and not this damn shit I can anyway!" he said bored.
Sakura got very angry. Since she went through a very hard training with Tsunade she became a very good Shinobi and because of her skills she became a substitute teacher and educate the after school classes. "If you wouldn't be sleeping all day in the classroom, Konohamaru then you wouldn't be here in this extra training class." She answered him angry. She was really pissed of by him, because he complains about everything and he was very childish. But on the other hand she liked him. Maybe because he reminded her to somebody…
"Pahh ... you're just doing this because you got no mission from Tsunade-sama lately. When was your last mission anyway? About 2 or 3 yea..." *SMASH* Konohamaru said receiving a bone breaking punch on his head causing him to smash with his face straight into the ground. "What was that?" she screamed. The whole class was looking frightened at her and slowly stepped back. "Not again!" said another substitution Teacher who was standing only a few meters away with his group. He had black hair middle long hair which was tied together strait up. Another female Shinobi with blonde long hair wore as a ponytail turned next to him and said. "Every day the same picture. Can't she simply ignore that kid?" the blond girl said. The guy looked at her with a sarcastic glance. "Oh sure, cause you can!" With an angry face the blonde girl shouted at him and clenched her hand into a fist "What was that Shikamaru?" "Oh no. Now she's pissed. What a draaag!" he thought with an annoyed face up but his face changed immediately as he looked behind her. "Hey Ino look." As she turned and saw what Shikamaru means she froze immediately.
Konohamaru rapidly jumped up and landed a few meters away from Sakura holding his hurting red face. "IDEEEEE ... " he said. As he opened his eyes and looked through his fingers he saw the raging Sakura walking to him with slow earthquake steps. "That's it. ... I'm dead!" he though as suddenly a familiar voice froze the whole scene.
"Hello Sakura-chan!"
Sakura instantly froze. She didn't have heard that voice for a long time. It sounded a little bit mature than before but she definitely recognized it. "Could it be?" she thought as she slowly turned around. As she had fully turned around she saw who was talking to her and immediately recognized her blonde former teammate. She felt a great happiness as she saw him causing her to stutter. "N .. Na .. Naruto ... " But then as she looked closer and recognized the man he was carrying she froze again instantly. "I .. It .. can't be!" she thought. A lot of people gathered around to saw the return of the long awaited Shinobi. In the first row there were some familiar faces like Neji in his traditional white Hyuga clan clothes or Kiba and the adult Akamaru and Iruka-sensei for example. They all watched the scene in tense.
With slow steps Naruto walked to Sakura and everyone could see how hard it was for him. He carried the man in his bad condition for the last two days without any sleep and food. He hardly could keep his eyes open and everyone thought he will pass out any moment. The pink haired girl was still unable to move or to say anything like almost everyone around. In the meantime a woman entered the scene with fast steps and stopped right behind the crowd and looked at Naruto. She noticed immediately that Naruto was in a bad condition and she pushed the crowd in front of her aside in order to help him. But she was stopped by the hand of an old friend.
"Wait Tsunade-sama." Jiraiya said with a serious voice while holding her back with one hand. "He has to do this by himself." The blonde Hokage said with an angry voice "Baka. He isn't in the condition ... " but Jiraiya cut her sentence to convince her. "Naruto carried Sasuke since he awaked after the battle. The whole time there was only one thing in his mind. To bring him back to Sakura. Let him do this Tsunade." With an angry and simultaneously sad face Tsunade nodded and looked over to the scene.
Naruto were only a few meters away from Sakura as he suddenly felt dizzy and had to stop for a moment. It was very hard for him to stand on his feet with Sasuke's body on his back. But he has done it up to here and he fought against the tiredness of his body who wanted to simply fall down and rest. He hardly could keep his eyes open and he couldn't even see Sakura clearly. But it doesn't matter to him and so he carried on.
Step by Step he slowly walked ahead to keep his promise. Sakura was still frozen and looked to Naruto with tears in her eyes. She firmly made the decision not to cry when he came back but she couldn't help it. The feelings inside her went crazy and she felt a mixture of joy, happiness and sadness. The sadness came from Naruto's half dead appearance and the unconsciousness Uchiha he carried on his back but was overwhelmed by the happiness of having her closest friends back. As Naruto was only less than 2 meters away he couldn't stand anymore and broke down on his knees while he nearly lost consciousness. Sakura could catch him by a reflex and tried hold him straight up but with Sasukes body on his back they were too heavy so the both fell on their knees.
With his last bit of strength he looked in Sakura's eyes and said with a happy voice "I promised you, that I would bring him back ... didn't I?" Sakura's couldn't hold back any longer and hugged him. She pressed his body against hers and cried and with a happy smile on his face he thought "I did it!" as he lost consciousness.
