So I wrote this story called Be my Bride and I like it but it has a lot of errors, I could just go back in and fix everything but there were a ton of things so I'm just re-write the story, but it will be a little different than the original.
I'll probably delete Be my Bride soon but you can read it if you want
Anyway enjoy!
Rins pov (when she is 6 years old)
"I love you Len!"
"I love you too Rin," said my friend Len with a smile.
"But…you're going to leave soon," I said as tears filled my eyes
"Then lets make a promise!" Len said as he grabbed my hands.
"I'll come back when we are 16 and old enough to get married, then we'll get married!" said Len with a smile on his face.
"It's a promise?" I asked.
"No, it's a vow," he said.
"Oh! Like a wedding vow!" I said.
"Yep!" he said.
He then got down on one knee and kissed my hand.
"I vow to come for you when we are 16 and we will get married," said Len.
He left the next day right after our shared birthday party.
I haven't seen him since, because he's…
10 years later
I shot up in my bed, I was dreaming about Len again.
"HAPPY BIRTHDAY!"
I almost jumped out of bed in surprise, around me were my mom, my dad, my sister Lily, and my friends Miku Hatsune, Gumi Megpoid, Neru Akita and Teto Kasane.
"Oh right it's my 16th birthday, I totally forgot," I sluggishly said as I crawled out of bed.
"Says the girl who hasn't stopped talking about this birthday for months," Lily replied sarcastically.
"Anyway it's noon so you should get dressed so we can eat, celebrate than meet the others at the movie theater," said My mom.
"Okay," I said having them get out of my room.
I put on my jeans and an orange sweater then went out into the living room, on the coffee table was a cookie cake that said "Happy Birthday Rin" and my favorite flavors of ice cream, chocolate, vanilla and orange sherbet.
We all ate the sweets and then I opened my gifts.
Teto got me a coupon packet that karaoke place we all like to go to. Neru got me a keychain for my phone that said 16 on it in orange numbers. Miku got me an orange plush pillow for my bed. And Gumi got me a orange charm along with a charm bracelet. The charms represented all my friends, a cell phone for Neru, french bread for Teto, a bottle of sake for our friend Meiko, ice cream for our friend Kaito, two leeks together for Miku and her older brother Mikuo and a carrot for Gumi.
I put the charm bracelet on, "It's so cute!"
Lily got me a card and 10000 yen.
Then I opened the gift from my parents, there was a tiny box and inside was a paper that said 'go into our room'.
I went into their room and on their bed was a sleeping husky puppy in a cage.
"A husky!" I said with a squeal.
I've wanted one since I was 6, better late then never.
I took the husky out of the cage causing it to wake up and look at me, it gave me a smile and wagged it's tail.
"It's a girl," said my dad.
"I'm naming her Miyuki," I said.
I handed her to my mom.
"I'll come back home soon Miyu," I told her.
"Now let's go to the movies," said Miku with a smile.
We all go on our coats and head out into the snow. The buildings were tall and there were clouds in the sky so not much of the sky could be seen. My nose was getting a little runny so I took my handkerchief out of my purse, I was about wipe my nose when a gust of snowy wind flew the handkerchief out of my hand and onto the sidewalk.
I went to go grab it in the haze, then somebody handed it to me.
I looked up at who it was, it was Len!
I was going to say something but the wind left and so did he.
"Did you see him? I saw Len!" I told Gumi.
"There was no way you saw him," said Gumi.
"But he handed me this handkerchief! I saw him!" I said.
"Rin, you must be tired, there is now way you saw Len," said Gumi.
Miku and Teto were concerned and Neru wasn't paying attention. They didn't know about Len, only Gumi knew, she did move into his house after he left so that's how we became best friends. She also knows what happened to Len, we both do…
"You're right…Len's dead…" I said as tears filled my eyes.
Gumi hugged me and I wiped the tears from my eyes and we started to walk again.
Len doesn't matter anymore, of course I miss him but now I'm dating Mikuo and I'm perfectly happy.
We got to the movie theater and Mikuo, Kaito and Meiko were waiting for us.
"Everyone is here, let's go in," said Miku.
Everyone started to walk towards the theater but Mikuo grabbed my arm.
"Rin, can we talk?" asked Mikuo.
"Sure," I said.
They all went in ahead of us.
"Rin, have you been happy with me?" he asked.
"Of course I have, why ask?" I asked with a little concern.
"I haven't been all that happy, and I hate to do this on your birthday but I think we should break up…" he said.
"That's fine…" I lied.
"But I still got you a present," he said handing me a cheap box of chocolates.
I put them in my purse I he walked out.
He dropped his ticket on the ground and I picked it up, on the back it said 'Sorry Rin'
Yeah right, like you really are sorry! What kind of a dick breaks up with a girl on her birthday? And I was already sad enough because of Len… The next thing I knew I was crying again and the tears were getting on the ticket and blurring the ink.
"Why are you sad dear?"
I looked behind me to see a girl with white hair and big boobs smiling at me.
"I got dumped," I told her.
"Thats terrible!" she replied as she hugged me.
"I'm Haku and to cheer you up I'll be your date for this movie," she said with a smile.
"Uh…okay?" I hesitantly replied
"Can I have that ticket so I can go with you?" she asked.
"Yeah," I said.
We walked into the movie theater and I sat down next to Gumi.
"Where did my brother go?" asked Miku.
"He wasn't feeling good so he asked me if I could go home," I lied.
"Oh," she said.
I hated lying but I didn't want to tell them we broke up, I'll tell them tomorrow. I didn't care right now, I just wanted to forget so I could enjoy this movie…
Normal POV
A exhausted girl with long white hair and big boobs walked into her house.
"I'm SO tired!" said the woman with a sigh.
"Welcome home Haku," said a girl with black pigtails.
"Hey," said a boy covered bandages.
The boy with white hair that was on the couch with the other two teenagers ignored her.
"I made dinner," said a red haired man with a matching red scarf.
"Hey where is Len? I wanted to tell him about this girl I meet!" said Haku with a smile.
Just then a teenage boy with girl short blonde hair came out of the bathroom with a towel around his shoulders.
"Did you want to see me Haku?" asked the boy named Len.
"Oh Lenny! I saw this girl at the movies who look just like you! I swear you guys could be twins!" said Haku.
"What was her name?" asked Len.
"Her name was Rin, she's around your age," said Haku.
"Why does that sound familiar?" Len asked himslef.
"Maybe you meet her in a past life or something," said the girl with the black pigtails.
"Stop with the voodoo babble Zatsune,"
"I'll stop talking like this when you stop talking like an ass," said Zatsune.
"You bitch!" yelled the boy.
"Zatsune! Dell! No fighting!" said the red haired man as he started to set the table.
"Sorry Akaito," both teens said with apologetic voices.
"Our family is weird," said the bandaged boy with a sigh.
"I couldn't agree with you more Oliver," said Len.
They all sat at their table and started to eat. The whole time Len couldn't get that girls name out of his mind.
Was Zatsune right? Had he known Rin before?
I hope this is decent.
If you see any mistakes please don't be afraid to point them out!
Anyway if you liked it please review!
