hiya stubbornninja here

with my new story

this is an xmen origins story so tell me how you like it, and give me feedback on the characters.

Itallics- thoughts


Name-Kiara skelling

Age- 21

Appearance- Cheryl Cole in '3 words' when she has the white hair

Powers

Mind-reading to any species, talking, look through memories can also see future,

Telekinesis,

Speed, great fighting skills,

stealing- can steal someone's power, though not for a great deal of time and can't always control it

element control

'overload' if things become too much for her shadows swirls around her, and her powers are enhanced

Can control heat, if she is mad temp goes up, and if sad it goes down,

Working with Nathan when he uses liquid manipulation they can control the temp of someone's blood


Name-Nathan Skelling

Age-23

Appearance -Oli Sykes

Powers

Enhanced strength

Speed

Telekinesis

Create force fields

Earth manipulation

Healing factor

liquid manipulation


Name-Alex darkholme

Age-don't know but looks 23

Powers

Languages,

hyper senses,

heighten strength,

immortality

Transform into animals (after experimentations)

Appearance- tonks for harry potter


We were sitting in a small gym tired...after training for over two days straight, it was the first time we had felt tired in weeks, you see we don't get tired so easily, we can go for weeks without getting remotely tired, it's up to nates healing factor, which I can just steal.

I was leaning on the wall and he was just stretched out on the floor. It looked like he was sleeping, he looked like a little boy again, even though this is what we were building up to, I didn't want to go to sleep anyone could sneak up on us, and the whole town knew what we were. Even though we've only been here three days at the most, probably the worst thing about not being able to control your powers.

I couldn't stop them , my eyelids were getting heavier and heavier , I was about to drop off when the doors slammed up, I was alert now more than ever and Nathan jumped up , we saw one of the police for let three men in, signalling over to us. The three men made their way over, they were a strange group, but something didn't feel right.

They were all rather tall, the man in the middle was the oldest, and looked like he was part if the army. To his right stood an oriental man. He had a gun in his hand and was cleaning it with a cloth. His head was bowed but his eyes were fixed on us. The man on his left, had tanned muscled skin, had two katanna's strapped to his back.

All in all it was rather intimidating. The man in the middle spoke first,holding his hand up to his left silencing the man with the swords, as Nathan sat up properly still in front of me.

'How are you? Are you kid's sick of running?'

'No, not really, we don't get sick that easily, and besides at our speed it fun'

The man did not look impressed by my comeback, his eyes narrowed into a glare, and Nathan turned round and looking at me hard, don't make them mad, we don't know what they can do, he openly let me read his mind. The man started to talk again.

'My name is William Stryker. And I want you to help me help your country'

'I didn't know Americans cared so much about England' Nathan bared a large grin.

'What's the matter? Didn't realise we are English?'

'Even so, I can offer you shelter and food and safety if you do a few tasks for me'

'What kind of tasks?'

'fighting retrieving , you will go on a series of missions, you will be taught to handle guns etc'

Guns? Missions? great now it sounds like a bond film!

'We are in!'

nathans enthusiasm was high, he turned around and said,

'dont worry i know i owe you...BIIIIIIIG TIME'


tell me what you think, whether it is about they story line or the characters, no flames