Hello,I have found my other introduction to be boring and uninteresting so I have re wrote it for your enjoyment. I hope you enjoy it and don't be afraid to give constructive criticism.

September 14,2003.

"Wake up ladies!"! boomed a voice."You better get your lazy asses up right now before I stick my M16 so far up your ass your kids,kid will feel it!" The men in the room hurried to get out of there beds and line up.

"Sir yes sir!" they responded.The drill Sargent examined the room looking for any twitching or eye movement.Than he huffed and walked into the front of the room.

"Now dirtbags"! he screamed,"Do you all know what your getting your pathetic selves into?"

"Sir yes sir" they responded.

"We'll now, he spoke,you better.Because this ain't cubscouts and were sure as hell not making no god-damn cookies!"This is the United States Marine Corps and for the next 8 months I will be your mother and father." "You will respect me,you will say Sir yes Sir and if I tell you to jump off a building than you will sure as hell jump off that building!"Can I get a sir yes sir!"

"Sir yes Sir"! they spoke saluting.

"Good now",the Sargent humorously grinned and continued,"get dressed and report at the training field in 5 minutes or I will force you to run but naked through the west side barracks." "Now move it Marines!"

The Sargent walked out and every one in the room panickly started to put there equipment on.One of those man quickly put on his pants and armor.Than he took his combat knife and stuck it in his holster.He made sure he had everything before running out with the other Marines.

He sighed and whispered under his breath,this is going to be a long,long.day.

May 23rd,2004
I have to get back home,

How did you get that?,

You must kill the Bane,

Gregor,A plague has struck the Underland,

Ares I'll be alright,

They have slaughtered the nibblers,

Time is running out,

Luxa I love you,

Ares don't go,please...Gregor's eyes flung open as he gasped for air.His chest started moving violently and his forehead was dripping bands of sweat rolling down it.

He quickly got up and ran to his apartment's kitchen.He took his hand and tried desperately to find a cup.He grabbed one not caring if it was dirty or not and turned on his kitchen sink.

He filled the cup about halfway before shoving it in his mouth gulping all the water

Finally he slouched down and put his hand on his chest.It started to subside and go slower but Gregor's breathing was still harsh and blew hot streams of air out of his mouth.

Gregor allowed himselt to calm down more before he thought oh god no,It happened again.

Those dreams-no.Nightmares of the Underland returning to him.Those fears which he would love to forget.

The fear of never seeing Luxa's beutiful face ever again,the fear of never laughing with his bond Ares,who died to that monster Bane,The fear of never having birthday parties with Hazzard ,The fear of never seeing vikuses cheerful face,the fear of never seeing any of his friends again.

."I wish it would all stop," he whispered as he curled up leaning on his kitchen cabinet.

"Please"he cried to himself."Please","please",he kept repeating this over and over until his restless mind went into another empty slumber.

"WILL YOU WORTHLESS MAGGOTS GO FASTER!" the angry Drill Sergent roared,"YOU ALL REMIND ME OF MY GRANDMA WHEN SHE DOES PUSH-UPS!"NOW MOVE! MOVE! MOVE!"

The Soldiers ran the track each competing about who will win.They had to do a 17 mile run on the track because one of there teammates had been too busy chatting with another. So the whole team had been punished.

They were all exhausted and yearned to take a break but none of them dared to stop.That was until the Sargent pointed at one particular soldier and yelled,"Come with me private!"

The soldier hurried off the track and stepped in front of the drill Sargent raising his hands to salute. "Sir!" he responded.

"What is your name boy!?"

The marine looked up for a second before saying,"Adrian Sharp Sir!"

Adrian ey?"The Sargent replied.

"We'll "Adrian"I don't like you". "You remind me of my lazy broke-ass cousin in Colorado" ,"And just because I don't like you I want you to give me 75 push-ups and 3 extra laps on the track.Now move your lazy ass!

Adrian didn't say a word as he got on his knees and began.

We'll that was my remastered prologue.Oh and don't worry I'm not going to describe his whole training experience.I'm going to skip a couple of months.Also Did I make Gregor good?Or was he ooc?Please tell me!Thank you and remember give constructive criticism.Also seraphania, was that better? I realized that I diden't put enough spaces between lines and I re-read some other people stories to show me how.We'll the second chapter will come when I get just a few more reviews.