Hey, so I'm writing this fanfic for my friend's birthday present, and this is what I have so far. I would really like to know what you guys thing, because I think it's pretty stupid, and feel like just giving up and trying something else. It's a JohnKat story with the plot and dialogue of Romeo and Juliet:
Who's this douchebag? With his perfectly mess up hair and stubbly little horns peeking through the blackness?
== Enter Name
Your name is KARKAT VANTAS and, Jegus are you angry. Most people would question why, and you wouldn't have an answer. You would merrily frown at them and ask them to GO THE FUCK AWAY. When you talk, YOU SCREAM, due to your always upset mood, and always speak with perfect syntax, under the pseudonym: carcinoGeneticist.
Karkat: What will you do?
You decide to wander these HALLWAYS aimlessly, for you are feeling rather down today, as you have been for quite some time. No one has been able to figure why you've been so sad; you yourself can barely understand it. But it's a sadness that you can feel overcome your body, and taken a toll on your feelings for everyone but one person.
So, you walk alone. Little do you know you're about to take part in practically the worst play written by any human in the history of this universe you created. Yet, it's marked as the most tragic love story ever written.
Prologue
AA: Tw0 cults b0th alike in dignity
In fair Manhattan, where we lay 0ur scene
AA: A l0ngstanding hatred between tw0 families
Erupts int0 new vi0lence
AA: Fr0m f0rth the fatal l0ins 0f these tw0 f0es
A pair 0f star-cr0ssed l0vers take their life
AA: Wh0se misadventured pite0us 0verthrows
D0th with their death bury their parents strife
AA: The fearful passage 0f their death-marked l0ve
And the c0ntinuance 0f their parents rage
AA: Which but their children's end, n0ught c0uld rem0ve
Is n0w the many pages traffic 0f our st0ry
AA: The which if y0u with patient eyes attend
AA: What here shall miss, 0ur t0il shall strive to mend.
Act I
Scene 1
== Enter Name
Your name is TAVROS NITRAM. Recently, you were given a new pair of LEGS and are now still getting used to them. yOUR SPEECH TENDS TO PAUSE, OFTEN; wITH A BIT OF AN INVERTED TONE. After having a fierce discussion with your UNCLE, you wait patiently for your COUSIN, Karkat, to walk over to you - you're still trying to work on this walking thing.
Tavros: Pester Karkat
AT: gOOD MORROW, COUSIN;
CG: IS THE DAY SO YOUNG?
AT: bUT NEW STRUCK NINE;
CG: AY ME! SAD HOURS SEEM LONG.
CG: WAS THAT MY FATHER THAT WENT HENCE SO FAST?
AT: iT WAS...
AT: wHAT SADNESS LENGTHENS rOMEO'S HOURS?
CG: NOT HAVING THAT, WHICH, HAVING, MAKES THEM SHORT.
AT: iN LOVE?
CG: OUT...
AT: oF LOVE?
CG: OUT OF HER FAVOUR, WHERE I AM IN LOVE.
AT: aLAS, THAT LOVE, SO GENTLE IN HIS VIEW,
AT: sHOULD BE SO TYRANNOUS AND ROUGH IN PROOF;
CG: ALAS, THAT LOVE, WHOSE VIEW IS MUFFLED STILL,
CG: SHOULD, WITHOUT EYES, SEE PATHWAYS TO HIS WILL!
CG: WHERE SHALL WE DINE?
You watch as Karkat notices the blood on the ground. Little does he know that this is a result of your failed attempts to stand up straight.
CG: O ME!
CG: WHAT FRAY WAS HERE?
CG: YET TELL ME NOT, FOR I HAVE HEARD IT ALL.
CG: HERE'S MUCH TO DO WITH HATE, BUT MORE WITH LOVE...
CG: WHY THEN, O BRAWLING LOVE! O LOVING HATE!
CG: O ANYTHING, OF NOTHING FIRST CREATED;
CG: O HEAVY LIGHTNESS! SERIOUS VANITY!
CG: MISSHAPEN CHAOS OF WELL-SEEMING FORMS!
CG: FEATHER OF LEAD, BRIGHT SMOKE, COLD FIRE, SICK HEALTH!
CG: STILL-WAKING SLEEP, THAT IS NOT WHAT IT IT!
CG: THIS LOVE FEEL I, THAT FEEL NO LOVE IN THIS.
A tear trickles down your cheek as you listen to your cousin's beautiful speech. Hoping he does not notice, you cover your face in a rush.
CG: DOST THOU NOT LAUGH?
AT: nO, COZ, i RATHER WEEP;
CG: GOOD HEART, AT WHAT?
AT: aT THY GOOD HEART'S OPPRESSION;
CG: WHY, SUCH IS LOVE'S TRANSGRESSION.
CG: GRIEFS OF MINE OWN LIE HEAVY IN MY BREAST,
CG: WHICH THOU WILT PROPAGATE, TO HAVE IT PREST
CG: WITH MORE OF THINE: THIS LOVE, THAT THOU HAST SHOWN,
CG: DOTH ADD MORE GRIEF TO TOO MUCH OF MINE OWN.
CG: LOVE IS A SMOKE MADE WITH THE FUME OF SIGHS;
CG:BEING PURG'D, A FIRE SPARKLING IN LOVERS' EYES;
CG: BEING VEX'D, A SEA NOURISH'D WITH LOVING TEARS;
CG: WHAT IS IT ELSE A MADNESS MOST DISCREET,
CG: A CHOKING GALL, AND A PRESERVING SWEET.
CG: FAREWELL, MY COZ.
AT: sOFT, i WILL GO ALONG;
AT: aN IF YOU LEAVE ME SO, YOU DO ME WRONG;
CG: TUT, I HAVE LOST MYSELF; I AM NOT HERE;
CG: THIS IS NOT ROMEO, HE IS SOME OTHERWHERE.
AT: tELL ME IN SADNESS, WHO IS THAT YOU LOVE?
CG: WHAT, SHALL I GROAN AND TELL THEE?
AT: gROAN? WHY, NO;
AT: bUT SADLY TELL ME, WHO;
CG: BID A SICK MAN IN SADNESS MAKE HIS WILL:
CG: A WORD ILL URG'D TO ONE THAT IS SO ILL!
CG: IN SADNESS, COUSIN, I DO LOVE A WOMAN.
AT: i AIM'D SO NEAR, WHEN i SUPPOS'D YOU LOV'D;
CAST:
Romeo - Karkat Vantas
Juliet - John Egbert
Montagues -
Benvolio - Tavros Nitram
Mercutio - Gamzee Makara
Montague - Eridan Ampira
Lady Montague - Feferi Pepexis
Capulets -
Nurse - Rose LaLonde
Tybalt - Dave Strider
Capulet - Jake English
Lady Capulet - Roxy LaLonde
Others -
Rosaline - Terezi Pyrope
The Prince of Verona - Dirk Strider
Chorus/Servant - Aradia Megido