my first time with a freeverse fic...it was interesting. i don't think it's very good, but oh well. those of you that have more experience w/ freeverse, tell me what i did wrong.
read, review. thanks.
btw, it's alecto narrating the first 'stanza', evan for the next two, then alecto, and then evan.
kiss me
(touch me and make me feel beautiful)
like someone worth loving
The first time his mere presence drugged her
A quick unconsciousness
(if I just lose my grip)
WHAT IF?
…`+`…
And so ensued their tryst
he thinks she looks just like her namesake
an avenging a n g e l
&&torn from heaven&&
but it's not like he's going to tell her this
no, he'll just settle for the taste of her sweat
((lapped up by his errant tongue))
…`+`…
They landed on her bed
(the strangest little thing)
hands reached out ohsoveryd e s p e r a t e l y for each other
clothes torn from sweat-glimmered bodies
just like a second skin
her slim little hip—hardly an o d a l i s q u e' s hip
but it's just as soft and lovely
e s p e c i a l l y when he rests his weary head on her body
hush, hush and just let me hold you, pretty girl
…`+`…
Consuming heat and quickening fingers throb to the
beat
beat
beat
of her heart
((the lights overhead burn brighter and brighter))
and she thinks
his hands are pure fucking magic.
…`+`…
They said the world would end
not with a bang
but just with
a slow sweet w h i m p e r
slipping from her lips in the heat of the moment
((he gathers up her spent form in his arms))
and as he watches the falling stars
he thinks about what they did
it's ohsovery wrong
and that's just the way evan rosier likes it
…`+`…