Hello, this is Hazuki with a rewrite of the original chapter 1 for Discipline! Yeah, I was just looking back at it and I just...ugh. So I had to rewrite it.
Tell me if you think it's a bit too descriptive.
Before reading, please note that the Japanese school year begins in April.
Discipline
Chapter 1 - A New Member
The door to the disciplinary committee clubroom opened, making a creaking sound which caught the attention of everyone in the room at the moment. They definitely did not expect what they saw at the door. Teal strands, pulled into two long, messy side ponytails. Slim fingers were on the doorknob, the nails painted teal to match her hair and eyes. A face completely covered in neatly done makeup. Finally, a uniform that definitely went against the school regulations. Her first two buttons were undone, showing off a bit of her cleavage and her pale pink bra. The red thin school ribbon was nowhere to be found. The blue skirt was obviously too short. This girl was, with no doubt, a rebel who likes to break the rules.
She opened her mouth to speak, but she was interrupted by another voice. "Who are you, and what are you doing here?!" the stern voice said. The owner of the voice, Megurine Luka, pointed a finger at her. Her eyebrows furrowed, and she spoke once more. "Surely, you are not here to join the discipline committee."
Luka looked like a complete opposite of the teal-haired girl. Her light pink hair was out and flowing, and her fingernails were neat but not painted. Her uniform was perfect, nothing in it even slightly the breaking school's rules. Her ribbon was blue instead of red, due to the fact that she was a second year. The only thing different from a usual student's uniform was that she wore an armband on her left arm. 'Discipline', it read, written in Hiragana. She was obviously a no-nonsense type of girl.
The other discipline committee members were silent, looking at Luka, then the girl, and repeating.
The girl standing in the doorway was silent for a moment, eyes slightly wide. Then, all of a sudden, she began to giggle as she let go of the doorknob and stepped in the room. "What do you mean by that last comment," she took a moment to observe her ribbon, "senpai? Are you saying that I can't join?"
"Of course not! With that appearance? How dare you even walk in this room, actually?!" she slammed her hands down on the table. "What? Did a teacher send you to us to slap some sense into you? Because, I'm completely fine with that."
"You're half right. A teacher sent me, but not for you to 'slap some sense into me', whatever you said." she crossed her arms and rolled her eyes. "You see, I recieved my eleventh detention slip from a teacher today. Since the school year started in April and it's only May 5th, you could see how that would be a problem..."
"So, where are you going with this?" the impatient committee president began to tap her foot.
"Well," she gulped. "s-she said I should join this committee. You know, so I can be surrounded by good examples and change my ways. Then, I called the lady insane, which resulted in my 12th detention slip. So yeah, you have no choice but to let me join! Talk to Yowane-sensei if ya don't believe me."
Suddenly, one of the members stood up. "Megurine-senpai, you absolutely cannot let this girl join!" she said, shaking her head. She had short, choppy honey blonde hair with a large bow resting on top and ocean blue eye. Her name was Kagamine Rin. "Hatsune-san is in my class, and she will be the worst thing to happen to this committee if she joins! How can she possibly enforce rules when she breaks them!? Talk to Yowane-sensei, please!"
"Wow..." another member murmured, not expecting the sudden outburst from her. She had very light, long blonde hair with two sections of it in braids laying on her shoulder and the rest flowing freely down her back. Her eyes were blue, but a little lighter than Rin's. She was a second year, but not in the same class as Luka. Her name was Hatsukawa Aria.
"Kaga-chan? I forgot you were in this committee!" she skipped over to the blonde, immediately hugging her. "It's nice to have someone you know!"
"H-hey! Don't call me Kaga-chan, and stop hugging me!" Rin quickly pushed the tealette off of her.
"Stop causing such a ruckus!" Yet another member yelled. He had dark blue hair with eyes of the same hue. He was a first year as well, and was wearing a tie instead of a ribbon. His name was Shion Kaito. "You can't just come in here, abruptly say you're joining, and then randomly hug one of the members! Megurine-senpai, Sakine-senpai, do something!" he looked over at his two senpais, a new name being introduced.
The brunette chuckled, standing up and walking over to to Rin and the rebellious girl. She had short brown hair that only went down to her neck and matching eyes, but her chest definitely proved that she was a girl. She wore a yellow ribbon, showing that she was a third year. Her name was Sakine Meiko. "What do we have here? Suddenly coming in here, and making a mess of things. Who do you think you are?" her lips formed a smirk, and she bent over so she was eye level with the younger girl. "Though it doesn't seem like you would join by choice, I still need to have a talk with Yowane-sensei. Luka and I are definitely not letting you join unless what you say is true. By the way, what's your name?"
She gulped. "O-of course it's true! Who would join this dumb committee by choice?" she crossed her arms, eyebrows furrowing. She was obviously challenging Meiko. "And, my name? Hatsune Miku. D-don't you forget it!"
"Don't forget it, huh? I'm not scared of you, Hat-su-ne Mi-ku." Meiko stood up straight, snickering and saying each syllable of her name slowly. She then turned to Luka. "I'm going to go speak with Yowane-sensei about this. I'll be right back." she waved, and soon she was out of the room. Rin didn't want to be in the room with Miku any longer, so she quickly chased after Meiko to go with her. That left Luka, Aria, Kaito, and of course, Miku.
Luka stayed in her seat, and didn't even bother going over to Miku. "Listen, nobody in this club likes you, and I'm sure you know that. But if a teacher forced you here, we'll just have to deal with you. And part of dealing with you, is changing you." she glared at Miku. "You're definitely not going to be considered a member dressed like that. After school, we're going to the school shop. That shirt is too tight for you, you don't have a ribbon, and that skirt is too short. Man, I can't believe you can even walk in the halls..."
"Whatever. Yowane-sensei said I only have to be in here until she says I can quit, and if I act like I've changed that shouldn't be very long." she smirked. "What are you, the vice prez or something?"
"President," Luka corrected quickly. Miku was obviously stunned since Meiko was older, so Luka explained. "Meiko-senpai was the president before I came last year. You see, Senpai is way more laid back than me when it comes to rules. In fact, sometimes she lets rule breakers go off with not even a warning. So, mid last year I took over as president and she became vice."
"Such a laid back person is in this place? That's surprising."
"Don't underestimate Sakine-senpai," Aria spoke once again, making Miku and the other committee members look over at her. "Once, she gave a whole class detention just for one uniform being slightly incorrect. But, apparently, that was in her first year. She started relaxing a bit more last year, in her second year."
"That's right." Luka nodded. "Never underestimate Sakine-senpai. Or any of us, at that. We're serious, Hatsune. And now that you're here, you should take this seriously too."
The door creaked open again, Meiko walking in and Rin following, the blonde sitting down in her seat and the brunette walking over to Miku. "Looks like you're right." she then looked at the other committee members. "It took a bit longer than I expected, since Yowane-sensei was sobbing about her drinking buddy quitting alcohol. She told us the whole story too."
"Her drinking buddy even cut all connections with her since she wouldn't stop calling..." Rin added.
While everyone else was in shock, the tealette couldn't seem to stop laughing. She held her hands on her stomach, mouth wide with laughter escaping. "Hahahaha! Hahahaha! I can't believe Sensei was that upset over a freaking drinking buddy! Wow, this is gold!" she said, finally calming down and wiping away tears that had formed in her eyes. "Ha...okay, sorry. What were we talking about?"
Luka looked at Miku even weirder than she had when she first walked in. What a twisted sense of humor this girl obviously had. But, she just gulped and stood up. "Well, if it's official..." she opened a box in the corner of the room, pulling out an armband then closing it back up. She walked over to Miku, and held it out. "Here. Put it on, and we're going to the school store immediately after you put it on. Even if it is after school, no one can you see you with that armband dressed like that."
"Whatever," the girl quickly pulled it on her arm. "Let's go, then, Senpai."
But while she was saying it, Luka had already began dragging her out the room.
The two went to the school store together, but the second year had to basically drag her kouhai inside. She first took her to the shirt section, and picked out a white blouse that was in Miku's actual size (which she reluctantly gave up after telling her the size that was too tight on her), then to the skirt section where she got a skirt that was just above her knees, way longer compared to Miku's current one which could give people a show if she even slightly bent over. Finally, she dragged her to the ribbon section and got her a red ribbon to match her year's color. First they paid for it, then Luka immediately made her exchange it for her current outfit, making sure that her top button was actually buttoned, the ribbon was tied correctly, and that the skirt was not even a centimeter too short. When it all checked out to be okay, they exited the school store and walked back to the clubroom.
On their way there, the now neatly dressed girl was complaining already. "Man, having on a shirt that doesn't cling to me feels weird. And my thighs aren't getting any air now that my skirt is so long." she complained.
"So basically, what you're saying is, 'Man, having the correct uniform feels weird', right?" Luka pointed out.
But Miku, being the smart-ass she was, nodded in response. "Yeah. Having a correct uniform sucks ass. Now I look just like everyone else."
It took all she had in her to not slap Miku right then and there.
When they returned to the clubroom, everyone gasped. Even though everyone minus Rin had only known her for maybe thirty minutes, it felt weird seeing her in proper clothing.
Suddenly, Meiko started laughing. "Well, this a sight. But, welcome to the committee, Hatsune-chan. I'm sure you'll enjoy your time here." she said, and it almost seemed like teasing. The third year opened her school bag, and pulled out some tickets. "Oh yeah, I was about to mention this before Hatsune-chan came in, but my best friend gave me these tickets. She won them at some place, but she said she couldn't go. Luckily it's just enough for all six of us, now that we Have Miku! So, if you're all free, how about we go?"
All of them agreed, but the rebel seemed to be the most excited out of all the them. "Woohoo! Maybe there will be some benefits to joining this dumb committee! Yay!" she smiled widely. "Maybe I will stick around, even if it means being stuck with you boring guys! While we're there, I can actually teach you guys how to not be boring rule-obsessed idiots! And maybe, just maybe, I can -" Miku was interrupted by a slap to a face, leaving a red mark. The slap was so hard that it turned her face, so she was looking in the other direction for a bit with her eyes wide. When she looked back to see who it was, it was Luka.
"Did you feel that? I bet. Everyone calls it my special slap-of-sense. Hopefully it worked a little bit." she gave Miku a death glare. "Now, I'm a little glad Yowane-sensei sent you here. Because, you definitely need some work."
Miku was angry, but she didn't want to be slapped again, so she just kept quiet and nodded, holding back tears that were beginning to make her eyes burn.
Luka returned to her seat.
This was going to be a long journey to change Miku.
Anybody who read the original chapter can see that this was obviously way better. I changed a few details though.
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