Disclaimer: I do not own Yu-Gi-Oh! or Taboo. They are not mine. I created none of the characters from Yu-Gi-Oh. The game Taboo and the makers of the game Taboo had no say in whether or not I implemented Taboo into my story. Do you get it? Good.
This is my first fanfic, and I need advice on how to improve it. Please review it, when you are done. Thanks!
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Welcome, to the first official Yu-Gi-Oh Taboo Tournament! We now join the game in progress, a match between Jounouchi Katsuya and Mai Kujaku vs. Yuugi Mutou and Honda Hiroto...
Jounouchi looks thoughtful as Mai tries to describe her card. He thinks, "Why is she yelling at me? She seems to be trying to tell me something..."
"You idiot! A chicken says this when the sun rises! What is the word? What does a chicken say?"
"Chicken? Um, I thought that chickens couldn't talk?"
Mai calms down and tries to be clearer. "A male chicken says this at sunrise. A rooster says this at sunrise." She freezes as she realizes her mistake.
"Ha, Mai! We got you there!" Honda exclaims. "The word rooster was taboo, so you lose a point! Which puts us in the lead by- oh, maybe 24 points!"
Jounouchi blinks sadly at the scorecard. "Yes, we're losing by 24 points," he thinks. Suddenly he yells out loud.
"Hey, Yuugi! I think that it's your turn!" He lowers his voice as he speaks to Honda. "Take it easy on me, okay?"
Yuugi hurries over from the refreshment stand. "They were all out of popcorn, so-" He spies the look on Mai's face. "So I will go get some more..."
Mai then runs off to the powder room, where she promptly puts on more makeup and fixes her hair.
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We watch now a match between Ryou Bakura and Yami Bakura vs. Mokuba Kaiba and Maxamillion Pegasus, where some fiery action is taking place.
Ryou is lying unconscious on the floor, where Mokuba is trying to revive him with smelling salts. "Ryou, are you okay?" he asks.
We know that Ryou is in fact not okay, and is also, in fact, not unconscious. For standing above Mokuba is the ominously evil Yami Bakura, who, in his complete power, has taken complete control of Ryou and is now locked in a battle of will with Pegasus.
Pegasus takes a look at the card he is holding. "Mokuba!" he commands. "This is a dress that men in northern Great Britain wear! It is often in a certain pattern that shows your clan, or family. The place of its origination is in the rocky Highlands. Remember Loch Ness!"
Mokuba does not hear Pegasus's reference to a kilt, and therefore does not earn his team the point they needed. He stares intently at Ryou and wonders what he, Mokuba Kaiba, was doing there on the floor, and why he ever would have wanted to be in such a place.
Mokuba wanders away in search of his brother, Seto.
As Pegasus watches helplessly, and wonders what part of his wonderful description of a kilt was unsatisfactory, Ryou stirs. His Yami grins and marks down their fourteenth win that day.
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Moving on, we follow Mokuba, who has found his brother Seto and is now watching his game. This game is between Seto Kaiba and Yami Yuugi vs. Anzu Mazaki and Sugoroku Mutou.
Kaiba graciously allows himself to lead the first round, calling out clues to Yuugi's Yami.
"Bite!" He yells. "Ook! Boxers!"
"Vampire!" The Yami answers correctly. "Baboon! Wedgie!"
And so the game progresses.
Suddenly, it is Anzu's turn. She tells Sugoroku her clues. "I have frostbite. My leg is going to fall off, and so the doctors will take it off instead."
But Sugoroku is very concerned. "Frostbite? That sounds bad. I am worried by this news. And to think, it will be amputated!"
"Yes! Amputate was the word!" Anzu exclaims. "Now, there was once an animal called the quagga. It is now extinct, but-"
"A quagga?" Sugoroku interrupts once more. "Wasn't that like a zebra?"
"Yes! Yes! You got it, Sugoroku! Zebra!" And Anzu hugs Sugoroku fiercely.
After the next turn, Anzu shrieks. "We won! We won! We won- oh." She ducks from the glares given to her by Seto Kaiba and Yami Yuugi.
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This is my first fanfic, and I need advice on how to improve it. Please review it, when you are done. Thanks!
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Welcome, to the first official Yu-Gi-Oh Taboo Tournament! We now join the game in progress, a match between Jounouchi Katsuya and Mai Kujaku vs. Yuugi Mutou and Honda Hiroto...
Jounouchi looks thoughtful as Mai tries to describe her card. He thinks, "Why is she yelling at me? She seems to be trying to tell me something..."
"You idiot! A chicken says this when the sun rises! What is the word? What does a chicken say?"
"Chicken? Um, I thought that chickens couldn't talk?"
Mai calms down and tries to be clearer. "A male chicken says this at sunrise. A rooster says this at sunrise." She freezes as she realizes her mistake.
"Ha, Mai! We got you there!" Honda exclaims. "The word rooster was taboo, so you lose a point! Which puts us in the lead by- oh, maybe 24 points!"
Jounouchi blinks sadly at the scorecard. "Yes, we're losing by 24 points," he thinks. Suddenly he yells out loud.
"Hey, Yuugi! I think that it's your turn!" He lowers his voice as he speaks to Honda. "Take it easy on me, okay?"
Yuugi hurries over from the refreshment stand. "They were all out of popcorn, so-" He spies the look on Mai's face. "So I will go get some more..."
Mai then runs off to the powder room, where she promptly puts on more makeup and fixes her hair.
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We watch now a match between Ryou Bakura and Yami Bakura vs. Mokuba Kaiba and Maxamillion Pegasus, where some fiery action is taking place.
Ryou is lying unconscious on the floor, where Mokuba is trying to revive him with smelling salts. "Ryou, are you okay?" he asks.
We know that Ryou is in fact not okay, and is also, in fact, not unconscious. For standing above Mokuba is the ominously evil Yami Bakura, who, in his complete power, has taken complete control of Ryou and is now locked in a battle of will with Pegasus.
Pegasus takes a look at the card he is holding. "Mokuba!" he commands. "This is a dress that men in northern Great Britain wear! It is often in a certain pattern that shows your clan, or family. The place of its origination is in the rocky Highlands. Remember Loch Ness!"
Mokuba does not hear Pegasus's reference to a kilt, and therefore does not earn his team the point they needed. He stares intently at Ryou and wonders what he, Mokuba Kaiba, was doing there on the floor, and why he ever would have wanted to be in such a place.
Mokuba wanders away in search of his brother, Seto.
As Pegasus watches helplessly, and wonders what part of his wonderful description of a kilt was unsatisfactory, Ryou stirs. His Yami grins and marks down their fourteenth win that day.
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Moving on, we follow Mokuba, who has found his brother Seto and is now watching his game. This game is between Seto Kaiba and Yami Yuugi vs. Anzu Mazaki and Sugoroku Mutou.
Kaiba graciously allows himself to lead the first round, calling out clues to Yuugi's Yami.
"Bite!" He yells. "Ook! Boxers!"
"Vampire!" The Yami answers correctly. "Baboon! Wedgie!"
And so the game progresses.
Suddenly, it is Anzu's turn. She tells Sugoroku her clues. "I have frostbite. My leg is going to fall off, and so the doctors will take it off instead."
But Sugoroku is very concerned. "Frostbite? That sounds bad. I am worried by this news. And to think, it will be amputated!"
"Yes! Amputate was the word!" Anzu exclaims. "Now, there was once an animal called the quagga. It is now extinct, but-"
"A quagga?" Sugoroku interrupts once more. "Wasn't that like a zebra?"
"Yes! Yes! You got it, Sugoroku! Zebra!" And Anzu hugs Sugoroku fiercely.
After the next turn, Anzu shrieks. "We won! We won! We won- oh." She ducks from the glares given to her by Seto Kaiba and Yami Yuugi.
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