The Phone Call That Changed My World
By: luvhapyhoa
Revised by: DragonFlyies
{Nina's POV}
"I'm at a payphone trying to call home, all of my change I spent on you. Where have the times gone, baby, it's all wrong. Where are the plans we made for two. If happy ever after did exist, I wish to be holding you like this. And all those fairytales are full of it, one more stupid love song I'll be sick. Now I'm at a payphone."
My friends and I sang Payphone by Maroon Five (of course the clean version.) It was July 7th, my 18th birthday. No one at Anubis house was here. It was just me, my friends, Jessie, Jackie, Sarina, Jamie, and Tori, my gran, and our neighbors. There were about 30 people at the house.
"Nina, phone from England," my gran said, handing me the phone. It was Amber.
"Hey, Ambs," I said.
"H-h-happy B-b-birthday," she said, as if she was crying
"Amber, what's wrong?" I asked. I stopped dancing. My friends stopped dancing too, as if they knew something was wrong. They looked at each other. And what I heard next, changed my world. My legs felt weak.
{No one's POV}
The home telephone dropped from Nina's now sweaty hand. A single tear dropped down her face. It fell from her face. It all happened like it was in slow motion. Nina's legs gave out. She fell. She held on to a nearby chair to steady herself. It didn't work. She fell into the fetal position. She wrapped her arms around her legs. She started hysterically crying and there were so many 'Nina's!' and 'What happened?' She didn't say anything. Her chest heaved with her crying. People crowded around her. In her head all she had was memories. Bitter sweet memories. The memories that her and Fabian had. She hadn't told anybody what had happened. She didn't even talk to anybody for three days. She didn't cry. She didn't smile. She didn't show any emotion. All she did was stare out the window of her living room. She watched the sunset, and the sunrise. It rained the whole time. Fabian was going to surprise her for her 18th birthday. They weren't together, but best friends. His plane crashed mid-flight.
Please tell me how this is. This will be only my 2ed story and the 1st with chapters. I would love to hear what people think of the revisions I've made to this story. ^_^
