Chapter 1:

Author's Note: Hey guys! This is that Kirby fanfiction I was talking about. It's actually a re- write, which you can read on my account that I will put a link to in the description below (though I highly don't suggest if you don't want spoilers). I'll try to update this soon. Enjoy!

Nothing but the incessant humming of machinery was audible in the factory of the newly built but poorly constructed Nightmare Enterprises. Outside, the last of the soft, silver evening light was fading away from the expansive black sky. The planet had very few breathable gases, but if a creature doesn't require much said breathable gases, survival is possible. However, there were no inhabitants on this planet, other than the newly arrived demons and others working at Nightmare Enterprises. Nothing had ever lived on this planet before because its star had burnt out long ago and there were no sources of water on the planet. If one were to look at the structure from the outside, they wouldn't find it very threatening, just an average looking factory- type building, the only thing unusual about it would be that it's massively oversized. But, if that individual were to look inside the building, they would find it had a more castle-like style. This "castle" wasn't any sort of comfortable living space that all would imagine when they think of a castle. No, this castle barely served such purpose compared to the size of the structure. But, the horrid creatures inside the factory-castle building, when let loose, would brutally murder and sometimes devour any living thing that came across its path. There was only a slim chance of survival if an opponent of one of these creatures was either very well trained and had very good armor, had remarkable powers that were very strong, or even both. Even though the demons that resided inside the structure were indeed vile and repulsive to think about, none of them could compare to the horrid being that controlled and created them.

His name was Nightmare.

He, his empire, and his "company" of terror supposedly fell at the hands of a young Star Warrior six months before this moment in time. In reality, however, Nightmare simply faked his own death and used his powers to teleport himself, the hired salesman, and several packs of a certain breed of demon wolves, nicknamed "WolfWraths" onto the planet, and slowly built the factory-castle structure. Nightmare was alive, but it was a defeat, no less. Everyone who fought on the opposite side of the battle was tricked by the fake death of the horrid being, and all the planets affected quickly recovered from the all damage Nightmare Enterprises had done, and the inhabitants of those planets grew happier. Life became wonderful for them.

Sadly, this would not last long.

…

On another desolate planet, there lay a large, unnatural piece of rose quartz with an armored body of a Poyonan inside. It wasn't breathing, but it was somehow alive. Two large, pearly white angelic wings sprouted from his shoulders. But, this being was far from being an angel. He was the strongest warrior in the galaxy, but few beings knew that he was a demon created by Nightmare. His shoes mask, and shoulder plates were the same pearly white. In his left hand, he held a lance and in his right, a shield. Two golden horns rested on his head. Galacta Knight was his name. On the outside of the crystal, all was quiet, but inside Galacta Knight's head, millions of whispers were suddenly erupted in his head. The whispers were awakening him from his forced slumber. They were giving him power, so much power that the pink crystal surrounding him started to crack. Eventually, the demon warrior's power level grew so much that the quartz around him shattered. It was a few minutes after that he was fully conscious, two blood red eyes being exposed as he opened his eyelids. He slowly got up, groaning, for his limbs were stiff from laying in the rose quartz for the longest time, and they were sore. When he got up, he scanned his surroundings and flew off the planet. He knew exactly where he was going, and he didn't need to breathe to survive. His body was used to the extreme heat and cold, though it annoyed him. But that was of no importance to him now.

He had a task to do for his master.

…

Galacta Knight eventually arrived on the other planet, and entered the factory-castle building. Though he had never been inside the structure before, some unnatural force was guiding him where to go. He knew that this unnatural force was Nightmare. Many souls would be frightened if Nightmare was to enter their mind, but it gave Galacta Knight a pleasant feeling. Finally, he arrived in the room where Nightmare resided.

"So, you're finally here. It took you longer than I expected." Nightmare said.

"You're one to talk," Galacta Knight responded cockily, using his voice for the first time in what must have been thousands of years. "You were defeated, weren't you?"

"Yes."

"By whom?"

"Your nephew."

Galacta Knight was confused. "But… I don't have a nephew."

"Apparently, you do now. You're idiot younger brother decided to have a son sometime after you were sealed away. "

Galacta slammed his fist on the wall in anger and groaned. "How old is he?" he growled.

"As much as I hate to admit it," Nightmare said bitterly and sighed. "Still a child."

"What went wrong?"

"I think it was mostly because you were absent."

He smirked under his mask. "Why, thank you, master," he said smoothly. "But what are you going to do now?"

"I'm going to use what I'm about to show you," He explained. "Come." He said as he motioned to the doorway that lead to the next room. In the next room, there lay only a large table, perfectly sized for Nightmare's tall statue. Galacta Knight flew up to the table to see what was on it. It was another Poyonan; the color of its body was a very pale shade of blue, except its cherry red blush. Unlike most of its species, it had hair, tied back in a ponytail. Most of it was the same light blue as its body, but the ends were the same bright red as its blush. Its shoulder blades and shoes were as black as the darkest pitch, but its cape was a navy blue. Its eyes were closed, hiding its eye color.

"It's… female," Galacta Knight stated. "A child, as well."

"Yes, and I'm relying on you to train her."

Galacta Knight paused. "Have you checked her for soul energy yet?" Sometimes, if there's a wait before a demon beast gets a soul, the body of the demon beast mysteriously starts to form one its self. These souls are more likely to become Star Warriors than any other demon beast. So, after the delay, Nightmare would perform tests to see if there was a soul inside. These tests sometimes sped up the process of the formation of the soul, but the possibility of that happening was so low that Nightmare continued the tests.

However, it would be a fatal mistake to perform the test on this one.

"Not yet, but I was just about to." Just after Nightmare said this, he lifted his hands above the child. Dark, swirling, tentacle-like forms came from his hands and surrounded the child. After a few minutes, the dark forms receded. For a couple seconds, dozens of large, light blue glowing spots danced across her skin.

"I've never seen so much development in a single demon beast," Galacta Knight muttered under his breath. "Sir, you should handle this right away." This time he said a bit louder. No response was heard. "Sir?" Nightmare looked exhausted, beads of black sweat running down his face. Being hit with the Star Rod had depleted the amount of energy he could use.

"Alright," Nightmare said softly. "But I just need a few hours of rest." Shortly after, Galacta Knight and he left the room.

This was a grave mistake.

A while after the two left the room; the girl began to breathe shallowly. Those breaths became heavier and heavier and soon, the child opened her eyes, exposing their nearly white blue glow. Fear and confusion soon gripped her for she did not know where she was or what she was doing there. She did not want to be there. So, she soon got up, hopped of the table, and went to fulfill an, at first, small goal.

To leave this place.

Author's Note: Well, that was exhausting! I hope you thought it was better than the original (definitely longer than the original first chapter. Over three pages, THREE PAGES!). Don't forget to comment, favorite, and watch! Bye! XD!