May I Have This Dance?
Final Edition
This is my final fixing of this story, in other words: I'm done revising. As was recommended, I tried to add more detail. Thanks for the criticism. I hope it succeeds this time.
- gendo.ikari (gendo.ikari@flash.net)
NOTE: This story takes place over 5 days, Monday through Friday. It is divided amongst 5 chapters so that it is not as easy to get lost in all of the words. As for where this takes place on the timeline... I guess it would be a good time after Asuka has arrived but before everything starts majorly going downhill.
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Day One - Monday
"I Have an Announcement"
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*Buzzzz* The digital alarm clock was ordering young Ikari to wake up, he grudgingly complied. The morning was like that of any other morning, the sun was up and all was right within Tokyo-3. Shinji, as he always did, put on his clothes and went to make breakfast for his two female companions.
Shinji: "Misato! Asuka! Breakfast is ready!"
Hearing this, Asuka knew it was morning, another day that she had to wake up early, and another day at a Japanese school. Although she did not want to, the girl decided that she had to go get up, which she did. After getting dressed in her customary red dress, she found her way to the kitchen table where Shinji and Misato had already began to eat the well-prepared, although she'd never admit it, breakfast.
Asuka: "Guten morgen, Misato. Hello, Shinji."
Shinji: "Good morning, Asuka."
Misato: "Sleep well?"
Asuka: "Yes, quite well, thank you."
The three roommates eat breakfast and discuss important events, sync ratios, grade cards... et cetra. After everyone was ready and the breakfast was well over ninety percent devoured, there was a buzz at the door. Asuka arrives to answer its call. The visitors were Hikari, Kensuke, and Toji who had come to pick up their classmates for school.
Hikari: "Hello, Asuka!"
Asuka: "Guten morgen, Hikari!"
Toji: "Where's Shinji?"
Asuka: "Baka Shinji? How should I kn-..."
Shinji (coming from behind Asuka): "...I'm right here. Hi Toji, Kensuke."
Kensuke and Toji: "Hi."
Hikari (motioning to Asuka): "Come on, let's go."
Asuka (turning towards the apartment): "Goodbye, Misato!"
Voice from inside: "Goodbye, Asuka."
Asuka and Hikari head down the hall leaving the three young men behind them. As it approaches time for the three boys to leave, Toji and Kensuke first say goodbye to the beautiful Misato and then follow after the girls towards school. When class begins, the teacher asks Hikari to inform the students of the upcoming event.
Hikari: "Hello. I wanted to just let everyone know about the dance on Friday. It's going to be really fun... we're going to have a local band and dance contest. Thank you."
Following Hikari's return to her seat, conversations erupt from her fellow classmates. Who's going with whom? Who's going to wear what? What band is going to be there? All the students are filled with excitement over the new announcement, all but Shinji. He thinks to himself: "What's so important about a stupid dance?", "Why does everyone care about who everyone else is going with?" and "Who cares about a stupid dance, I won't go anyways..." As for the lovely Asuka, most of the boys instantly gather around her, all seeming to ask her to the dance at the same time. She tells them each no. "What kind of girl would I be if I said 'yes' the first time?"
Hikari, after about ten minutes of trying, is able to quiet the class so that the teacher is able to actually teach. The class goes through the normal routine of math, physics, language and history. When the bell for school to end sounds, the students exit their class similar to rats escaping a sinking ship. Heading home, Shinji's thoughts always seem to drift towards the upcoming dance... "Should he ask 'her'?" "Would 'she' even go with him?" He thinks about the times when Asuka, through her harsh exterior, has shown a glimpse of the soft underbelly of her emotions. He decides that he is going to give her a letter so that, if she does say no, he will not have to deal with her initial reaction. When he arrives home, he finds that Misato has already began to prepare dinner... ramen and curry.
Misato: "Hello, Shinji! Dinner will be ready in about fifteen minutes."
Shinji: "Okay. Thanks, Misato. I'm going to be in my room until then."
Misato: "Okay. I'll have Asuka go get you when it's ready."
Shinji walks down the hall of Misato's apartment and into his room. He sits at his desk, pen in one hand and a piece of paper on his desk. "Asuka, please come to th-... no, that's begging." He begins to write...
"Dear Asuka,
Would you like to go to the school dance on Frida-..."
Shinji: "What am I thinking? It's Asuka. She'd never go out with me... Why would I even think that she would? This is stupid..."
Shinji crushes the piece of paper. At that time his door violently swings open.
Asuka: "Hey, idiot! Misato said to tell you that dinner is ready! So get in here!"
Shinji rises from his seat and follows Asuka to the table for dinner. After everyone is comfortably positioned at the table, the three apartment residents begin to eat their meal.
Misato (after taking a sip of beer): "So, I hear that your school is having a dance Friday."
The mention of the dance only goes to excite Asuka and to depress Shinji.
Asuka: "Uh huh! I've already had twelve older boys ask me! Not that I'm going with any of them, mind you."
Misato (glancing over to Shinji): "What about you, Shinji? Have anyone in mind?"
Shinji: "No... not really." (to himself) "Why is it such a big deal, anyways? It's not like it's important."
All three, who by this time are each finished with their meal, get up from the table and retire to their rooms to rest for tomorrow. Shinji's dreams are filled with familiar events: The rendez-vous with the UN fleet to pick up the second child and her eva... the battle with the angel Sandalphon... working with a pilot to fight an angel in complete synchronization. He knew what the similar link in all of these dreams was... Asuka.
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Next chapter: "Angels Waiting"
Final Edition
This is my final fixing of this story, in other words: I'm done revising. As was recommended, I tried to add more detail. Thanks for the criticism. I hope it succeeds this time.
- gendo.ikari (gendo.ikari@flash.net)
NOTE: This story takes place over 5 days, Monday through Friday. It is divided amongst 5 chapters so that it is not as easy to get lost in all of the words. As for where this takes place on the timeline... I guess it would be a good time after Asuka has arrived but before everything starts majorly going downhill.
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Day One - Monday
"I Have an Announcement"
=====================
*Buzzzz* The digital alarm clock was ordering young Ikari to wake up, he grudgingly complied. The morning was like that of any other morning, the sun was up and all was right within Tokyo-3. Shinji, as he always did, put on his clothes and went to make breakfast for his two female companions.
Shinji: "Misato! Asuka! Breakfast is ready!"
Hearing this, Asuka knew it was morning, another day that she had to wake up early, and another day at a Japanese school. Although she did not want to, the girl decided that she had to go get up, which she did. After getting dressed in her customary red dress, she found her way to the kitchen table where Shinji and Misato had already began to eat the well-prepared, although she'd never admit it, breakfast.
Asuka: "Guten morgen, Misato. Hello, Shinji."
Shinji: "Good morning, Asuka."
Misato: "Sleep well?"
Asuka: "Yes, quite well, thank you."
The three roommates eat breakfast and discuss important events, sync ratios, grade cards... et cetra. After everyone was ready and the breakfast was well over ninety percent devoured, there was a buzz at the door. Asuka arrives to answer its call. The visitors were Hikari, Kensuke, and Toji who had come to pick up their classmates for school.
Hikari: "Hello, Asuka!"
Asuka: "Guten morgen, Hikari!"
Toji: "Where's Shinji?"
Asuka: "Baka Shinji? How should I kn-..."
Shinji (coming from behind Asuka): "...I'm right here. Hi Toji, Kensuke."
Kensuke and Toji: "Hi."
Hikari (motioning to Asuka): "Come on, let's go."
Asuka (turning towards the apartment): "Goodbye, Misato!"
Voice from inside: "Goodbye, Asuka."
Asuka and Hikari head down the hall leaving the three young men behind them. As it approaches time for the three boys to leave, Toji and Kensuke first say goodbye to the beautiful Misato and then follow after the girls towards school. When class begins, the teacher asks Hikari to inform the students of the upcoming event.
Hikari: "Hello. I wanted to just let everyone know about the dance on Friday. It's going to be really fun... we're going to have a local band and dance contest. Thank you."
Following Hikari's return to her seat, conversations erupt from her fellow classmates. Who's going with whom? Who's going to wear what? What band is going to be there? All the students are filled with excitement over the new announcement, all but Shinji. He thinks to himself: "What's so important about a stupid dance?", "Why does everyone care about who everyone else is going with?" and "Who cares about a stupid dance, I won't go anyways..." As for the lovely Asuka, most of the boys instantly gather around her, all seeming to ask her to the dance at the same time. She tells them each no. "What kind of girl would I be if I said 'yes' the first time?"
Hikari, after about ten minutes of trying, is able to quiet the class so that the teacher is able to actually teach. The class goes through the normal routine of math, physics, language and history. When the bell for school to end sounds, the students exit their class similar to rats escaping a sinking ship. Heading home, Shinji's thoughts always seem to drift towards the upcoming dance... "Should he ask 'her'?" "Would 'she' even go with him?" He thinks about the times when Asuka, through her harsh exterior, has shown a glimpse of the soft underbelly of her emotions. He decides that he is going to give her a letter so that, if she does say no, he will not have to deal with her initial reaction. When he arrives home, he finds that Misato has already began to prepare dinner... ramen and curry.
Misato: "Hello, Shinji! Dinner will be ready in about fifteen minutes."
Shinji: "Okay. Thanks, Misato. I'm going to be in my room until then."
Misato: "Okay. I'll have Asuka go get you when it's ready."
Shinji walks down the hall of Misato's apartment and into his room. He sits at his desk, pen in one hand and a piece of paper on his desk. "Asuka, please come to th-... no, that's begging." He begins to write...
"Dear Asuka,
Would you like to go to the school dance on Frida-..."
Shinji: "What am I thinking? It's Asuka. She'd never go out with me... Why would I even think that she would? This is stupid..."
Shinji crushes the piece of paper. At that time his door violently swings open.
Asuka: "Hey, idiot! Misato said to tell you that dinner is ready! So get in here!"
Shinji rises from his seat and follows Asuka to the table for dinner. After everyone is comfortably positioned at the table, the three apartment residents begin to eat their meal.
Misato (after taking a sip of beer): "So, I hear that your school is having a dance Friday."
The mention of the dance only goes to excite Asuka and to depress Shinji.
Asuka: "Uh huh! I've already had twelve older boys ask me! Not that I'm going with any of them, mind you."
Misato (glancing over to Shinji): "What about you, Shinji? Have anyone in mind?"
Shinji: "No... not really." (to himself) "Why is it such a big deal, anyways? It's not like it's important."
All three, who by this time are each finished with their meal, get up from the table and retire to their rooms to rest for tomorrow. Shinji's dreams are filled with familiar events: The rendez-vous with the UN fleet to pick up the second child and her eva... the battle with the angel Sandalphon... working with a pilot to fight an angel in complete synchronization. He knew what the similar link in all of these dreams was... Asuka.
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Next chapter: "Angels Waiting"