Me: Yeah…this is the new chapter she did for chapter 1, but the rest of the chapters will be the other version-unless she redoes the others as well. It's pretty well written, but still has a bunch of mistakes. Here's what I said in the old version of chapter 1:

Okay, I'm going to say this once. This story is not mine, but I want to put it here because the one who wrote it doesn't have a fanfiction account, and also because I wanted to see how you guys would think of it, because when I tried to give her advice she wouldn't listen, she called me a jerk, and also she put "rules" so only one person can give her constructive critism and that she'd only get good reviews. The story is poorly written and is highly Mary Suish, I want her to get better but she won't listen to me. This is the new version, the original(it was on 4kids)was deleted, due to some reason(probably because Angela, the writer was mouthing off.). Please be honest of what you think, and flames are accepted. Also, I wanted to mention that the title, Legend of The Blue Eyes White Dragon Queen, has a very overpowered made up monster. BEWDQ is said by Angela to be some "ULTRA MONSTER!" or something. It is particularly unstoppable, and like a Card Mary Sue. She also mixed things up by at first saying Merry Ann was the monster in Ancient Egypt, but later changed it because I said something about it. Enough of me ranting, please read. (PS: Hyruleepona, if you are reading this, then let me just say you don't desrve the flames, but you do know who does. XP)

Taryn: Yugiohgx5dsgrl doesn't own Yu-Gi-Oh! 5 D's, nor this story or its contents. But if you do try to copy this, Angela will be notified.

Chapter one: Neo Domino City

As 17- year old Merry-Ann walked with her small family, Harriett, Crystal (bloomruby's character), Blake (WarpVoid characters), William (Mkflag's character) and Matthew, she thought about the last time she was here. "Wow! This city is huge!" shouted 16 year old Crystal Yuki, a girl with light brown hair that was always in a low side ponytail.
"I agree!" shouted Blake, Matthew and William together. Harriett was quiet, because she and her older sister had a fight the night before.
"Why can't she just leave me alone?" thought Harriett angrily, as she walked in front of a speeding car.
"Harriett!" shouted Merry-Ann as she looked up from her feet, "Look out!" and she ran in front of the car and pushed her younger sister out of the way.
"What the heck?" shouted Harriett angrily, as she glared at her older sister.
"What were you thinking?" Merry-Ann said softly looking at her younger sister, as Crystal, Blake, William, and Matthew came up
"Why do you care?" shouted Harriett
"Because you're my sister and it is my job to keep you safe," Merry-Ann whispered. Harriett glared at her older sister.
"Ya well you need to start calling me Netty!" she shouted, and stomped away. Merry-Ann looked at her sister's retreating back, and sighed. She walked away, with Crystal looking at the two sisters.
"I'll talk with Netty, You guys talk with Merry-Ann," Crystal said as she ran to catch up with Netty. The three boys looked at each other and Matthew ran after Crystal and let Blake and William talk with Merry-Ann
Netty
"I don't like my sister!" shouted Netty as she walked around in the park.
"What sup?" asked Crystal softly walking up behind her.
"Ya, you are never this mad at your sister!" Matthew said running up.
"Merry-Ann thinks she knows best for me!" Netty shouted, tears finally spilling from her eyes, "I wish she would just quit trying to take card of me! I am old enough to do things by myself!" and Netty sobbed in Crystal's chest. Matthew looked at Netty and scooped her up.
"Shh!" Matt said, "You just sleep and we'll take care of you!" and carried her to where Merry-Ann was at.
Merry-Ann
"Why am I so mean?" Merry-Ann asked herself, hearing Blake and William running up behind her.
"Hey are you ok?" asked Blake placing his arm around Merry-Ann's waist.
"Oh hey Blake, William," Merry-Ann said softly, as she sat down on a bench, "What's sup?"
"Oh nothing trying to figure out why you and Netty are having a fight," Blake said, rolling his eyes
"Oh that," Merry-Ann said, "Netty and I were fighting because I don't want her to be a duelist, though she is really good at it," she got real quiet after that, "It's been hard on me, because I have you, William, Matthew, Crystal and her to take care off. I guess I don't want to lose her like I did with my parents. I miss my mother so much that I cry just thinking about her!" Merry-Ann's face went pale again, "It hurts just thinking about losing my younger sister. I guess I shouldn't act like a mother for a while,"
"Merry-Ann?" William said coming up behind them, "You are the best sister/mother in the world! Any boy or girl would've been lucky to have you for a mother, a sister, or an aunt!" His face got red aft4er he said that. Merry-Ann laughed and hugged both boys
"You are right!" Merry-Ann said as she stood up, "Lets go find them!" and dragged her two best friends away, not realizing that she was being watched, by a young man with blonde hair and violet eyes.

Me: Yup, here it is. Unedited and just put up. I might update more, since I want this story to be over with soon. Please read and review. Flames are accepted. And don't mind the people's names in the parentheses in the first few sentences.