hey this is my newest story tell me if you like it and how i can make it better.
Declimer: sadly i don't own yyh i only own a snake.
The Ice Maiden's Revenge
A boy of about 14 or 15 was chained to a wall. His feet barely touched the cold floor. He had blue-black hair with a white starburst in the center but that was barely visible. Covered by months of not washing. His arms were above his head and his wrists were rubbed raw from the cruel cuffs that imprisoned him. His chest showed signs of a beating. It was covered in bruises, cuts, gashes and scares. This boy didn't have much clothing on, only a pair of tattered pants its color unrecognizable. The boy's name was Hiei but to some he was the Forbidden Child. His mother's people, the Ice Maidens, had imprisoned him. They had found their mistake and decided to fix it. You see when he was born the Ice Maidens threw him off their floating island hoping he would die, but fate decided otherwise. He survived the fall and somehow they found out he didn't die.
So now he was in a room that had no windows, just a door that was locked form the outside. It was dark, damp and you could hear the rats scurrying around. This is the place the Ice Maidens kept him and found ways to torture and starved him. Today they finished the first torture block but all Hiei could do was let them punish him in about a few minutes they would come back to hurt him more.
A few meters away from Hiei's cell was the sound of approaching foot step they were coming to decide how Hiei was going to be put threw next.
i don't know if i should continue? please tell me!