This Is my First story so don't be too harsh but I want all of you to tell me what you think, tell me what I need to add, and tell me if I did a good job. it is slightly revised.
The Common Boy
CH1 Introduction
I am an orphan I am told that I am seven years old, but no one really knows. My parents died in a fire that destroyed everything that I would have ever known. I was saved by a strange man, he brought me to the orphanage right after he saved me, I was supposedly 3 months old then. He left a box with my name, David S., I don't know what the S means but I have always wanted to know.
I turn eight tomorrow, and every night I dream about a man in gold armor telling me that I would be adopted on my eighth birthday. But that is still a day away and you need to know some details.
Everyday me and the other orphans have to go out into the city and retrieve money to help keep the orphanage/'The Big House'/ alive. Most of us beg or pickpocket around the city, we each get our own area, I work at the court of the rough, I spend most of my time there as a semi waiter. I started working there about 3 year ago. I bring in enough money to make up for whatever the others miss, and when we bring in more than enough we get some of the extra.
I was the weak child of the group I brought in maybe two copper nobles in every day, from begging, I was told to try a different technique so I tempted my hand at pick pocketing. But unknown to me then, I accidently attempted to pickpocket the rough, or thief king, the leader of the court of the rough. He thought it was funny saying, "If you really want to pickpocket someone never pickpocket a person that is a known thief." I was scared because I got caught; the other boys said that whenever they get caught they get a beating. But to my astonishment he was amused, he asked, "Why would such a smart looking boy like you try to pickpocket the king of thieves." I told him about the orphanage and how we are supposed to make money to keep the orphanage from falling apart. He smiles at my story and tells me I can work as a servant of the court. And so I have worked there every day since.
The men at the court thought that I would crack after a few days of work but I was having fun, I started to ask those who had special skills to teach me, and over the next year I learned to pickpocket without the person feeling the slightest touch, I learned how to through daggers and hit the bull's eye from fifty feet away, shoot arrows with twice the distance of the daggers, how to roll, punch ,and jump in extreme combat situations (which really helped when it came to serving with a full house) I learned to test for poison without magic, and how to sleep with one eye open, which is harder than it sounds.
When I learned all this in one year he decided that I needed advanced training from what he called 'The Master'.
So he brought in a past Rough, his friend, George Cooper, we started training whenever he came over until I learned everything he could teach me, when he could teach me no more he decided that I needed to meet wife , The lioness, she was a living legend, but I have never had enough time for her to teach me, she was at war half the time and with her family the other half, the three times that I have met her, neither of us had enough time for lessons but we have gotten to be friends. I enjoyed learning to battle, but Today is the day before I get adopted, or so that man in wondrous gold armor tells me, so if I get adopted by a family that doesn't want me to fight then I will never learn, or so that's what they will think.
That is the end of my intro to my story stay in touch for chapter 2, The last day as an orphan,
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