Chpater oen prouloge
The cats gathered around a pool.
They all looked into it eagerly. A dark shape appeared on the surface.
Since when do random 'Dark Shapes' randomly appear on water surfaces?
A blue she cat looked up. Her eyes were bright.
A blue she-cat. You couldn't have called her 'Bluestar'? We're off to a great start so far :/
"There is a prophecy!" She said. "out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly."
Holly? Has the author even finished the series? Since when was Hollyleaf evil. For fuck sake make it 'The evil tiger and dove.' Please ;-;
"Its about StarKit!" A white tom said. "Shes going to save the forest," He looked at a gold tom by BlueStar.
Yeah, we're all fucked.
"she has powers nobody dreamed of." Said the gold tom.
What if I dreamed of 'em?
"Should we tell JayFeather?" He asked.
No. He doesn't need to know that a kit is going to save the forest. Otherwise the whole forest is gonna be heading for bomb shelters.
"Yes." Said BlueStar. "he needs to know."
Cop on Bluestar! You're meant to be smart ._.
She walked away from the pool to tell JayFeather about the prophcy.
JAYFEATHER! DON'T GO TO SLEEP!
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