I started writing this for a club that i joined that is trying to get published. Please rate and tell me what you think! All criticism is welcome and helps improve the story!
The darkness slowly swallowed the young woman, clinging to every part of its struggling victim. The desperate girl screamed and thrashed about with all her might. Voices penetrated the deep silence that surrounded her, but none of the words made any sense. The dark shadow grew faster and raced towards its prey's head. Fighting for all she was worth, the young lady thrashed. Abruptly she felt a prick in her nonexistent arm. The darkness that had seemed so fast before suddenly engulfed the helpless woman in an instant. The girl screamed as she fell into a never-ending pit of darkness.
Jerking awake, the young woman looked around. The small white room had little decoration. To the right of the bed and a few feet away was a door, opposite that was a single window, large enough to let in light but small enough that it would be impractical for anyone over 160lb. to try and escape through. (Not that anyone would since the room was on the second floor.) Sunlight shone through the small square window, lighting up the desolate space. The young woman got up, crossed over to the clear window and looked out at the unfamiliar landscape. The most beautiful scene in the world met her eyes.
The sun rose over the distant snow caped mountains. The snowy terrain gave away, gradually, to a thick, dark green forest. The spellbound girl looked down at the busy village. Children ran around the small buildings laughing, screaming, and playing amongst each other. Nearby adults watched and chuckled as the kids rolled around in the dirt, before continuing on their way to do their daily chores. The young girl watched with absolute rapture.
"I see you're awake."
Responding with unknown reflexes the young woman rushed across the room to the newcomer, threw him to the ground, and set a foot on his chest. Blinking her eyes the surprised attacker stepped back and nervously laughed before answering, "Sorry, I didn't even know I could do that!"
Laughing uneasily, the young man stood up and dusted off his pants and sleeves, then replied, "That's okay I guess I deserve it for startling you. Here, let start over… My name is Dr. Will Hekim."
"My name is… I think my name is Reise," stated the confused young woman.
"You think…"
"Well I can't really recall anything, but… yes… I am certain… now, that my name is Reise. Unfortunately though, everything else is black."
"Hmm… interesting." Will examined Reise, more closely. She had black hair which hung loosely around her shoulders and accented a face that held a small nose and light purple eyes. She was thin but fit, fitter than other girls her age, which he guessed to be about 16. Reise wore a loose white shirt, and pants, both of which belonged to the hospital. Will continued talking. "You wandered into the village badly wounded; we stitched up the wounds and cared for you."
"What wounds?" Reise asked worriedly.
"A deep knife wound to your abdomen, a 2nd degree burn on your left leg, and several scratches all along your arms and face… You say you can't remember anything?"
"No… the only thing I'm sure of is my name… how long have I been asleep?"
Dr. Hekim looked at Reise and shrugged, "About… two weeks."
"WHAT!" the girl shouted.
"You lost a lot of blood… that's probably why you don't remember anything… and why you were asleep for so long." Will said still thinking about the amnesia and its causes.
Riese just stared at the young man. Looking him over she sized him up, unknowing that he had done the same think to her. He was handsome, with brown hair and green eyes, about 17yrs. old, how'd he become a doctor at such a young age. He was about six feet tall, lean and muscular, not so much that he was huge but just enough to know that he was in shape. He wore a deep brown tunic and breeches under a long white lab coat. He carried a clipboard in one hand and was currently tapping on his other hand while he thought.