Okay, listen up peeps! I had to re-load this 'cause I did some editing on
the chapters I had complete, so, there might be a little more added to it,
or a little less taken away. ^.~
'Who Am I?'
Chapter 1
Battles
"I remember it now, I remember it all, the day my life was turned upside down... Everything seemed to crash, all of it, shattered by the actions by my so called 'brother' Raditz.
"I had endured the beatings, the verbil attacks, and the lack of my freedom, or what little of it I had at the hands of that maniac, Freaza.
It had all started after another one of Raditz's so called 'Training sessions' which always seemed to end in a beating either mentally, or mostly, physically..."
~*~
I opened my eyes to see a flaming ki blast fly towards me, but, before I could move, I felt it's stinging force burn it's way into my skin, and felt the impact knock me up against the training room door. I tryed to move, to put my guard up, and tryed to prepare myself for the blow I knew for certain would come within any given moment, but, nothing happened.
I managed to open my eyes and to look up at the tall figure that stood before me in the red light which lit the room.
The figure was stalky, tall with long, black, spikey hair. A sneer came over his face, and his eyes...I'll never forget the look he gave me then. His cold, black eyes almost burnt straight through me, like a flame with undying anger and hate, my brother Raditz was anything but kind.
"Get up." The he said in a cold, harsh tone. I shifted a bit, but couldn't bring myself to my feet, no matter how hard I tryed, my wounds from the last training session were still fresh and my body wouldn't do what I told it to. "I said get up!" Raditz yelled sending a harsh kick straight into my chest. I didn't move.
He scoweled and turned for the door.
"We're finished here, I can not train such a weak saiyajin, it's not worth my time." He snarled as the opened the door. I felt a pain shoot through me, a worse pain than the wounds on my body, this was the pain of humilliation.
"Wa...wait, Rad...Raditz..." I said, my voice quivering. He stopped and looked back at me, smiling, almost like he was happy to see me in pain.
"I see you've got your second wind." He said turning and making his ki soar. I stood up, and forsed my ki up to half the strength of his. Then, just before I reached the same power reading as his, I felt it wash out of me, and before I knew it, the silver haze around my body lifted and I was back on the broken tile floor.
Raditz shook his head as he lowered his ki, walking over to me.
I looked up to see him looking down at me in discust, at my weakness no doubt. He leaned down, picked me up by the collar of my armor and ruffly carried me out of the training room.
I could see the looks on the meds faces when they saw me come out of the room, though, they should of been used to seeing me come out of the training session almost dead, I should of been used to the pain, but my spirit was broken, my mind was almost numbed.
I felt Raditz drop me on the floor of the hallway, I couldn't help crying out at the impack, feeling blood rise in my throat.
I heard Raditz make his way down the hall, and I heard his famous words.
"Take her to recovery, but I want her back here tommorow, healed or not."
That's when I blanked out...
~End Chapter 1~
Well? What do you guys think of my editing job? Good? Bad? Personally, I think it turned out better than the last time, but, your the readers! I KNOW I missed some spelling mistakes, but, you'll live, right? ^-^ Tell me what you think!
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'Who Am I?'
Chapter 1
Battles
"I remember it now, I remember it all, the day my life was turned upside down... Everything seemed to crash, all of it, shattered by the actions by my so called 'brother' Raditz.
"I had endured the beatings, the verbil attacks, and the lack of my freedom, or what little of it I had at the hands of that maniac, Freaza.
It had all started after another one of Raditz's so called 'Training sessions' which always seemed to end in a beating either mentally, or mostly, physically..."
~*~
I opened my eyes to see a flaming ki blast fly towards me, but, before I could move, I felt it's stinging force burn it's way into my skin, and felt the impact knock me up against the training room door. I tryed to move, to put my guard up, and tryed to prepare myself for the blow I knew for certain would come within any given moment, but, nothing happened.
I managed to open my eyes and to look up at the tall figure that stood before me in the red light which lit the room.
The figure was stalky, tall with long, black, spikey hair. A sneer came over his face, and his eyes...I'll never forget the look he gave me then. His cold, black eyes almost burnt straight through me, like a flame with undying anger and hate, my brother Raditz was anything but kind.
"Get up." The he said in a cold, harsh tone. I shifted a bit, but couldn't bring myself to my feet, no matter how hard I tryed, my wounds from the last training session were still fresh and my body wouldn't do what I told it to. "I said get up!" Raditz yelled sending a harsh kick straight into my chest. I didn't move.
He scoweled and turned for the door.
"We're finished here, I can not train such a weak saiyajin, it's not worth my time." He snarled as the opened the door. I felt a pain shoot through me, a worse pain than the wounds on my body, this was the pain of humilliation.
"Wa...wait, Rad...Raditz..." I said, my voice quivering. He stopped and looked back at me, smiling, almost like he was happy to see me in pain.
"I see you've got your second wind." He said turning and making his ki soar. I stood up, and forsed my ki up to half the strength of his. Then, just before I reached the same power reading as his, I felt it wash out of me, and before I knew it, the silver haze around my body lifted and I was back on the broken tile floor.
Raditz shook his head as he lowered his ki, walking over to me.
I looked up to see him looking down at me in discust, at my weakness no doubt. He leaned down, picked me up by the collar of my armor and ruffly carried me out of the training room.
I could see the looks on the meds faces when they saw me come out of the room, though, they should of been used to seeing me come out of the training session almost dead, I should of been used to the pain, but my spirit was broken, my mind was almost numbed.
I felt Raditz drop me on the floor of the hallway, I couldn't help crying out at the impack, feeling blood rise in my throat.
I heard Raditz make his way down the hall, and I heard his famous words.
"Take her to recovery, but I want her back here tommorow, healed or not."
That's when I blanked out...
~End Chapter 1~
Well? What do you guys think of my editing job? Good? Bad? Personally, I think it turned out better than the last time, but, your the readers! I KNOW I missed some spelling mistakes, but, you'll live, right? ^-^ Tell me what you think!
Please Reveiw