I have had a review stating that I should maybe change the dialogue, because it's a bit shit, I re read it and I kind of agree, so I hope this is a better take, please let me know if not and I will see what I can do, I'm not perfect and I only do this as a hobby but I am happy for the criticism.
Chapter 1
Elena woke up in a dark room, she saw blurs at first and then realised she wasn't alone. She tilted her head and saw Stefan's eyes boring into hers. She saw pain and regret in his eyes. Torture and sadness. She looked back up at the ceiling trying to remember how and why she got her. She could smell antiseptic, really strong. She could smell Stefan's aftershave, but most of all she could smell something she had never smelt before. It was a metallic smell and it made her hungry, she turned again to Stefan "Stefan, I am thirsty" "I never meant for this to happen, you begged me to save Matt. You wouldn't let me save you Elena. Why wouldn't you let me save you? Elena tilted her head once again and holding back tears she finally spoke "Matt was bringing me home to you Stefan. Then I remember Rebecca, she was in front of us. Matt had to break and we crashed. Why am I still alive Stefan?" "Meredith had to give you vampire blood because of the bleeding in your brain. She said if she didn't help you, you would have died then. None of us knew she had done it Elena." "Stefan, what are you saying? Where is Matt?" "Matt is fine, I fed him my blood and he is resting at home until it leaves his system. "Where am I?" "You are in the hospital, but we can't stay here, we have to move you back to the boarding house." "I'm really thirsty. Why is my throat burning?"
Stefan saved Matt because I told him to, so I should be dead, I shouldn't be here, Meredith gave me blood because of a bleed on my brain? Which means when I died I had vampire blood in my system, Oh no? My worst nightmare has come to life, I'm the same as Stefan and Caroline; I'm a vampire." Elena shoots up and quickly moves to the corner of the room.
"No! I can't be." Elena was beginning to realise. "Not yet, you have to complete the transition. You have 1 day and then you can be at peace Elena; with your parents." "I should be at peace now." "I know and I am so sorry, you can't imagine how much this pains me to see you as what you never wanted to be." "I never wanted this, I don't want it, GET OUT!" In that instance Damon storms in with Meredith close on his heels. "Elena? Has she woken up yet?" "Yes she has, she knows what she is and that she doesn't have to become a vampire, she can just wait for the transition period." Damon angrily replies "What? That isn't even an option Stefan, we have to get her some blood. Meredith I need your help, I need you to go get me some blood." "No!" Elena was starting to panic. She didn't want to live off blood, she wasn't Stefan or Damon; she couldn't live with herself. "The choice falls on her. She has to want to deal with this for as long as she is. We can't force her into this." "Well I never got a choice Stefan, remember? You took that from me, maybe I should follow in your footsteps and take the choice way from Elena too." "I never wanted this, I still don't, why is this happening to me. Meredith why did you save me with blood? You should have let me die." Elena broke down in front of the two Salvatore brothers. She didn't want to leave them, she didn't want to leave Jeremy or Bonnie or Caroline. She didn't want to leave anyone, she was too young. But she didn't want to be immortal. Fighting for the rest of her life to stay alive.
If I leave then no one will be here to protect Jeremy, he will have lost everyone he ever cared about. If I choose to be this, then I could be here to watch him, make sure he doesn't make the same mistakes as I have, make sure he lives a happy life. I could protect all of my friends, Bonnie, Matt. Maybe I could make this work. But what if I can't, what if I lose control like Stefan and kill everyone I love and hold dear.
Damon brings her back to reality momentarily. "Elena you need to stay with us, you can't give up just because this isn't what you wanted, and maybe this is what was meant to be. We haven't fought so hard to then have you taken from us anyway." "Damon I'm scared." "I know, but you have to stay strong. I won't ever leave you, you know I won't, I never have and I never will Elena." "All I can say is that I am deeply sorry I used vampire blood on you Elena. I never thought this would happen." Meredith looks disgusted in herself. "You couldn't have known this would have happened Meredith. I need to see Jeremy, Bonnie, Matt and Caroline." "I don't think that is such a good idea Elena, they don't actually know that you are still alive yet." Stefan moved a little closer to the door and looked over at Damon for support. Meredith looks over at Stefan "You mean to say they still think she died in the lake?" "Are you stupid Stefan?" "We all thought Elena was dead, we were all there Damon." "Shut up, I am dead and I want to see my friends and Jeremy, they need to know that I love them." Meredith takes her phone out her pocket. "I will call them now and get them here to see you." Meredith then walks out of the room leaving Stefan, Elena and Damon to argue among themselves. "Damon maybe you should go with Meredith." "No, please don't leave me Damon, I don't want you to go." Elena moved towards Damon and falls, Damon catches her. "I need to go with Meredith and find you some blood, so you can finish the transition, and then I promise you I will be back." "Damon, do not push her into a corner." Stefan was beginning to crack. "Is that what you both want? For me to turn into one of you?" Stefan grabs Elena and places his hands on her face, looking deep into her eyes to show how much he means what he is about to say. "No I do not want that for you, I never have and I never will, but if you choose to then I will help you control it. Elena, all your emotions will be heightened, your compassion heightened, you have to be ready to deal with that, there is no going back once you decide." Damon felt differently about the situation. "I want you to live, if that means being a vampire then hell I don't care. You did it Elena, you changed me, you made me care again, about both of you, if you don't live then I will promise you, that won't last." "That is because you are selfish. You always think of yourself before putting Elena first." "Shut up brother, are you telling me you will be happy to see her die?" "Stop it, STOP IT! You are both making my head hurt. Damon go what you need to do." "I will be back as soon as I can." "Please hurry, please."
Why is she looking at Damon like that; like she looks at me, like he means something more to her, she chose me, she was on her way to me.
"It's ok Elena, I will stay with you until he gets back." Elena looked at Stefan and gave an empty smile, he knew then that she had changed her mind. She didn't want him anymore. A long awkward silence fell when Damon and Meredith had left the room to find blood and Elena's friends, Elena shuffled and groaned with hunger while Stefan just looked over at her, trying to remember what she was like before she was this, she was still truly beautiful but everything was different now. "Elena, please talk to me. What are thinking about?" "What would you like to talk about Stefan, how you came into my life, and the moment you did; everything went wrong? How my family are dead and now so am I, now Jeremy is on his own in the world, can you imagine how he must be feeling right now, or shall we talk about how you and Damon have caused me and this town nothing but pain?" "You don't mean that surely? I agree loving you is my fault, loving Katherine was my fault, and I agree that I can't stay away from you, but not knowing you would have made my life misery in itself." "I now have to live the rest of my life knowing that I will have to fight every day to not give in to temptation. Have you ever thought that you and Damon are both selfish?" "I will help you. You know I will do anything you tell me to." "No, you won't, Caroline will. I need space from both you and from Damon." "Are you sure you need space from both of us, or just me? You seemed to want Damon here a few moments ago?" Elena glared at Stefan. "I chose to be with you, I was driving to you, and I wanted you. Even though I met Damon first."
Oh my god what did I just say.
"What do you mean you met Damon first?" "I have all these images, images I never had before. Of Damon. He made me forget about how he felt about me, he said that you were the better brother and that you deserved me more, you deserved the happiness." "You're telling me he compelled you?" "At some point yes, I think so. He told me he loved me more than I could ever know. He hid a whole side of him away from me on purpose, for you." "You've changed your mind?" "No, I don't know what I want anymore, I feel different. I need time to accept this if this is what I want. I need you to both leave me alone. To adjust to this way of life." "Ok. I will give you time." Again the room fell to a silence you could cut with a knife. What seemed like a lifetime had passed and Elena had laid back down and was falling in to a slumber when the door swung open to shrieks from Bonnie, to whom Elena could only think would be Meredith. "How dare you fill her with blood without getting consent from anyone, whose blood did you even use?" "Would you rather have had me let her die?" "Anything is better than letting her become a vampire." Bonnie was pissed. "Hey, it isn't that bad Bonnie!" Caroline chirped. "You know how I feel about it. I just have to live with not only one of my best friends being a vampire but now both of you." Elena sits straight up and glares at Bonnie and Meredith,
I'm really thirsty, that smell is amazing.
With the blink of an eye Elena was at Bonnie's throat, Stefan moves and slams Elena into the corner of the room before she bites. "Elena, NO!" Bonnie looks alarmed and glares at Elena. "Oh my god, Elena what have you become." "I… I'm… sorry Bonnie... I just smell you and it makes me want to feed on you, you smell amazing. I am so thirsty. Stefan what am I becoming? What have you turned me into Meredith?" "Damon will be here with blood soon, maybe you should leave Bonnie, you too Meredith." Bonnie looked at Elena with pity in her eyes. "You don't have to transition Elena. You can die as what you are, my best friend and a sister, or you can live as a monster." Bonnie runs out of the door with Caroline hot on her heels glancing a she didn't mean it look at Elena. "Bonnie, you should give Elena a chance, you gave me one." "You didn't try to kill me." The voices trailed off into the distance.
Elena breaks down, takes one look at Stefan and is swiftly out of the door before he can tell her to stop. She was off into the night, she hated the fact that to Bonnie she was dead anyway.
