so since this is my very first story i would love to have some comments on how to make it better or to make it worse. it depends on you people. you guys who are out there bored and wanting to just read these stories to make fun of people. anyways reveiw please and i hope you guys enjoy!
My name is Anna. I am 16 years old. my mother at home is very cruel to me. She abuses me. she punched me so hard in the ribs that i almost coughed up blood. She wouldn't feed me for days. She would laugh in my face when she threw out all my toys. i'm glad i ran away. If only you knew the pain i was in.
I was walking through the woods one day when i came upon a big huge home. I peered inside to see if anyone could help me. I saw no one. "Hello? Anyone living here? I need a place to stay," I said. i looked all around to see if anone would answer, so i waited for 3 minutes. Then all of a sudden i hear footsteps approaching from inside the shadows. He had long silky black hair and blue eyes. He was wearing black. His hair was pulled back in a strange looking clip. "Hello. My name is Vladislaus Dracula. But you may call me Vlad my love," he said. "M...my na...name is Anna," i managed to say. i was so frightened that i couldn't speak. I heard his name so much when i was child. All the towns people thought he was a murderer, but i didn't understand back then. Of course i wouldn't i was far to young to understand anything.
"please forgive my manners. But would you like to come in my love?" He said. I looked at him wondering what is he going to do to me. I mean I've heard all the stories about him, but to actually be there with him, that scares you a little bit.
"Come on now my love don't be shy. Come on in," he said. I walked in, shut the door and i felt like royalty. I was in a big huge mansion. He asked me, "Why are you here? Are you lost?," I slowly picked my head up and i told him my story. "Aww you poor girl. You must be tired," he said. I nodded my head and he lead me up to his room.
wow!! that sounds really goos when i read how about you guys? well review please i am not quite done with this so....i hope you like what comes next!!! =]
-satans lil angel
