Note: my comments are bolded. The Erins own Warriors, and xdarkrosesx can have all the credit for Starkit's Prophecy.
ALLIANCES I believe these are allegiances, not alliances, but I'll let it slide
ok so like i said this iks my first story be nice plz I read this story before I read any commentary or warnings, so I was practically scarred for life
btw its set afte rsunset so I never heard of Rsunset, is that a new book?
ThunderClan
Leader: Firestar - ginger tom with a flame-colored pelt
Deputy: Brambleclaw - dark brown tabby tom with amber eyes
Medicine Cat: JayFeather-gray tom My biggest pet peeve is capitalizing letters in the middle of a warrior's name; also, this must be set after Sunrise if Jay is the medicine cat
Warriors:
Squirrelflight - dark ginger she-cat with green eyes
Apprentice, Foxpaw
Dustpelt - dark brown tabby tom
Sandstorm - pale ginger she-ca What's a she-ca? Is that a bird or something?
Cloudtail - long-haired white tom
Apprentice DaisyPaw - cream long-furred cat from the horseplace Why would Daisy be an apprentice? And of course she has to be Cloudtail's apprentice *groans*
Brackenfur - golden brown tabby tom
Sorreltail - tortoiseshell-and-white she-cat with amber eyes
Thornclaw - golden brown tabby tom
Brightheart - white she-cat with ginger patches
Spiderleg - long-limbed black tom with brown underbelly and amber eyes
Whitewing - white she-cat with green eyes
Apprentice, Icepaw
Birchfall - light brown tabby tom
Graystripe - long-haired gray tom
Berrynose - cream-colored tom
Hazeltail - small gray-and-white she-cat
Mousewhisker - gray-and-white tom
Cinderheart - gray tabby she-cat
Poppyfrost - tortoiseshell she-cat
Honeyfern- light brown tabby she-cat
Lionblaze - golden tabby tom
Hollyleaf - black she-cat
FoxHeart-reddish tabby tom Ok, weren't Foxpaw and Icepaw literally just apprentices up at the top? And also, Foxheart? Seriously, this name needs to stop being used
IceFire-white she cat Oxymoron central, here we come
ToadRibbit-blackāand-white tom I can't anymore
RoseFlame-dark cream she cat This is actually a cool name, but try to keep it canon
BriarStorm-dark brown she cat with paralyzed back legs
BumbleFlower-very pale gray tom with black stipes This name really makes no sense at all
BlossomWind-pale brown she cat iwth a dark stripe along her spine Why this description? BlossomFALL is a tortoiseshell
Apprentices:
Fox DaisyPaw - cream long-furred cat from the horseplace This is definitely my favorite character...FOXDAISYPAW, ATTACK
FlamePaw-firecolored she cat with one grnee eye one blue eye I want grnee eyes too. And this is called heterochromia (fun fact of the day)
LakePaw-bright blue gray she cat with blue eyes
The last 2 r starKits siters So they're her baby-sitters?
JazzPaw-red she cat with blue eyes and a black tail This name kills me
Queens:
Ferncloud - pale gray (with darker flecks) she-cat with green eyes mother of Dustpelts kits which remain unnamed and unimportant
Dawnsparkle-bright tortishell she cat with garguntan blue eye's mother of Jayfeathers' ktis, formaly of Shadowclan Ok there are so many things wrong with this cat. 1) gargantuan blue eyes belong in an anime, not on Mary-Sue's mother 2) JAYFEATHER HAS KITS?! He's a medicine cat...basic rules apply 3) She's from ShadowClan? Of course, it's also a forbidden love *rings cliche bell* 4) DawnSPARKLE is not a warrior name in any scenario
Kits:
StarKit-graysh-blue-and purple she cat with molting orange eyes and a white star on her forhaed Why does every Mary-Sue have some shape on their forehead?! And also, are her eyes dropping feathers or something because they're molting?
Elders:
Longtail - pale tabby tom with dark black stripes, retired early due to failing sight
Mousefur - small dusky brown she-cat
Weaslepelt-big red tabby he cat with bight yellow eyes (hes Rowanclaw's dad, he came to Thunderclan when Dawn- did0 I'm going to start using he-cat instead of tom from now on. Also, this character actually seemed cool: SPOILER ALERT: he never is mentioned, ever
LeafPool-brown tabby she cat Why is Leafpool an elder? Are they punishing her for having SPOILER ALERTS kits? If so, why isn't Jay an elder, too?
ShadowClan
Leader: Blackstar - large white tom with huge jet-black paws
Deputy: Russetfur - dark ginger she-cat
Medicine Cat: Littlecloud - very small tabby tom
Apprentice, Flamepaw (ginger tom)
Warriors:
Oakfur - small brown tom
Apprentice, Tigerpaw (dark brown tabby tom)
Rowanclaw - ginger tom
Smokefoot - black tom
Apprentice, Owlpaw (light brown tabby tom)
Ivytail - black, white and tortoiseshell she-cat
Apprentice, Dawnpaw (cream-furred she-cat)
Toadfoot - dark brown tom
Crowfrost - black-and-white tom
Apprentice, Olivepaw (tortoiseshell she-cat)
Kinkfur - tabby she-cat, with long fur that sticks out at all angles
Ratscar - brown tom with long scar across his back
Apprentice, Shrewpaw (gray she-cat with black feet)
Snaketail - dark brown tabby tom with striped tail
Apprentice, Scorchpaw (dark gray tom)
Whitewater - white she-cat with long fur, blind in one eye
Apprentice, Redpaw (mottled brown and ginger tom)
Tawnypelt - tortoiseshell she-cat with green eyes
Flamewind- flame color tabby tom with green eye's Is this Flametail? Why is he listed twice, and why isn't he a medicine cat?
Tigerclaw-huge dark brown tabby tom with long claw's and amber eys OMSC it's Tigerstar! No leader would ever use this name
DawnFeather-cream tabby she cat (shes a different cant then the one in tC ok?) Why would we confuse DawnSPARKLE with DawnFEATHER? They don't even look alike
OlivePaw-bright brown she cat Bright brown is definitely a color. Also, how is Olivepaw a warrior with an apprentice name?
Queens:
Snowbird - pure white she-cat Are there any kits?
Elders:
Cedarheart - dark gray tom
Tallpoppy - long-legged light brown she-cat
Ok, this part is definitely copy and pasted:
WindClan
Leader: Onestar - brown tabby tom
Deputy: Ashfoot - gray she-cat
Medicine Cat: Barkface - short-tailed brown tom
Apprentice, Kestrelpaw (mottled gray tom)
Warriors:
Tornear - tabby tom
Crowfeather - dark gray tom
Owlwhisker - light brown tabby tom
Whitetail - small white she-cat
Nightcloud - black she-cat
Gorsetail - very pale gray-and-white cat with blue eyes Tom or she-cat? The world may never know
Weaselfur - ginger tom with white paws
Harespring - brown-and-white tom
Leaftail - dark tabby tom, amber eyes
Apprentice, Thistlepaw (long-haired white tom) This cat is never mentioned again
Dewspots - spotted gray she-cat
Apprentice, Sedgepaw (light brown tabby she-cat)
Willowclaw - gray she-cat
Apprentice, Swallowpaw (dark gray she-cat)
Antpelt - brown tom with one black ear
Emberfoot - gray tom with two dark paws
Apprentice, Sunpaw (tortoiseshell she-cat with large white mark on her forehead) Is she another Starkit? Is her mark shaped like the sun?
Heathertail - light brown tabby she-cat with blue eyes
Breezepelt - black tom with amber eyes
Elders:
Morningflower - very old tortoiseshell queen If she's an elder, I think we know she's old
Webfoot - dark gray tabby tom
RiverClan
Leader: Leopardstar - unusually spotted golden tabby she-cat
Deputy: Mistyfoot - gray she-cat with blue eyes
Medicine Cat: Mothwing - dappled golden she-cat
Apprentice, Willowshine (gray tabby she-cat)
Warriors:
Blackclaw - smoky-black tom
Voletooth - small brown tabby tom
Apprentice, Minnowpaw (dark gray she-cat)
Reedwhisker - black tom
Mosspelt - tortoiseshell she-cat with blue eyes
Apprentice, Pebblepaw (mottled gray tom)
Beechfur - light brown tom
Rippletail - dark gray tabby tom
Apprentice, Mallowpaw (light brown tabby tom)
Graymist - pale gray tabby she-cat or tom?
Dawnflower - pale gray she-cat
Dapplenose - mottled gray she-cat
Pouncetail - ginger-and-white tom
Mintfur - light gray tabby tom
Apprentice, Nettlepaw (dark brown tabby tom) This cat is never mentioned again
Otterheart - dark brown she-cat
Apprentice, Sneezepaw (gray-and-white tom) This is easily the best name
Pinefur - very short-haired tabby she-cat
Apprentice, Robinpaw (tortoiseshell-and-white tom)
Rainstorm - mottled gray-blue tom
Duskfur - brown tabby she-cat
Apprentice, Copperpaw (dark ginger she-cat) This better mean the color copper
Queens:
Icewing - white cat with green eyes, mother of Beetlekit, Pricklekit, Petalkit, and Grasskit She actually has blue eyes
Elders:
Heavystep - thickset tabby tom I love Heavystep, just because he died 3 times
Swallowtail - dark tabby she-cat
Stonestream - gray tom
Yep, Copy and Paste was definitely used.
