Here goes, my first FanFiction. Please tell me what you think, as I'm a writing novice so to this, criticism or words of wisdom are welcomed

So, this is a fanfiction about the BBC Series Merlin (of which I love!) This is set in the third season. It also involves the two characters from the Narnia film series (of which I also love!) which are Peter Pevensie and Lucy Pevensie. The story comprises of an invitation from Uthur Pendragon to the Pevensie siblings but has he got a hidden agenda for his kind invitation? And what curious encounters will the Pevensies face during their first visit to the kingdom of Camelot?...

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'King Uther thank you, for you kind invitation to Camalot,' announced King Peter.

'The pleasure of your company is mine,' Uther returned, with a welcoming, but somewhat sinister smile.

'May I introduce you to my sister, Queen Lucy.' Uther welcomed her with a slight bow and a kiss to her extended hand.

'My Lady,' He replied. 'I am sure you would like to rest after your long journey. My servants will guide you to your chambers. Would you join Prince Arthur, the Lady Morgana and myself to dine this evening?'

'That would be an honour, King Uther,' Lucy said with a smile. Uthur departed, and the Pevensie siblings followed the servants to their chambers.

'Peter, all the things I have heard about king Uthur have been bad, although I thought he was rather pleasant.' Explained Lucy, the curiosity had gotten the better of her, again.

'I felt the same lu, I cant help thinking that this invitation is for a hidden purpose.'

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Lucy's chamber the following morning

Lucy awoke early the next morning, refreshed by a good nights sleep. She got herself dressed in her beautiful floor length Green Dress and wrapped a brown cape around her shoulders. The outdoors were calling to her, and this wasn't the first time. Moments later she was walking through the grounds of Camalot, her hair being blown by the early morning breeze.

'I am quite hungry now' Lucy thought to herself. 'I wonder if there are apple trees nearby.'

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Arthurs Chamber

'Merlin!' shouted Arthur. 'What do you call this?' looking around at a very messy room, with a hard and stern look of his face.

'Wow, this place is mess. This is disappointing for a future king of Camelot.' Said Merlin sarcastically. Arthur and merlin had a brotherly relationship and so the loved teasing each other, although it never ended too well to merlin, as many times he had ended up in the pillory and being hit by rotten fruit.

'You think this is funny, merlin?' yelled Arthur. 'Well. For that you can clean this room, polish my armour, my shirts need washing and yes, almost forgot. Queen Lucy likes apples you will pick them and say they are a welcome gift from me about 100 will do it.'

'you want me to pick 100 apples?' Asked Merlin

'Yes and you will, so you better get your climbing shoes on Merlin.' Arthur said with a happy smirk on his face, whilst forcing a weaved basket into Merlin's chest.'

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Outside Camelot

So Merlin set out to pick 100 apples and he was not looking forward to it. 'There must be a better way than this' Merlin wondered after picking about 40 apples. Merlin had magic, and was special as he had never trained to use magical enchantments before coming to Camelot and had always used his talents to get out of trouble or sometimes the other away around. 'Can I risk doing magic here? What if someone sees me?' he questioned. 'I can do this' he finally decided.

He checked the close way clear and sounded the words Scéawere, folge min bebod, and at the same moment his eyes shone gold and three red apples levitated from the tree.

All of a sudden there was a loud gasp, which made merlin turn around sharply and he came face to face with Queen Lucy. Had this moment of madness brought Merlin's end?

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Hope youve enjoyed so far, sorry it is quite short but hopefully short and sweet :). Thankyou for reading and please review my work let me know what you think. i need your words of wisdom xx