A/N: Hello! I am going to be brewing up a new OC/Edmund love story and currently, I am trying to come up with some good ideas. I also am trying to stear my OC in the direction where she will not be a Mary-Sue. Below are some quotes that I may consider using in the fanfiction. Tips, hints, and ideas of non-mary sues would be much appreciated! This is mainly a draft/brainstorm.
These are only quotes and short inserts (ideas i may use)
Thanks!
NarniaFan
(A/N: I am making Melody my OC. In this small bit, you become aware that Melody is not afraid to say what is on her mind, and that can get her into trouble sometimes. Plus she seems to have a small attitude problem.)
"Go away now I say," she grabbed another cherry and popped it in her mouth. "Shoo."
Her hazel eyes grew wide and she felt the anger boiling higher and higher inside her. "Excuse me?" She said in disbelief. No one had ever told her to "shoo" before. What gave her that right anyway?
"You heard what I said," Lady Marlie look back at her, her eyes narrowing. "Or do I have to repeat myself?" She looked annoyed.
"You don't shoo me! I am not an animal." She waited but the girl didn't give her a reply. "I can not believe your attitude. It is very tiring and I have had enough of it."
"You work for me and my mother still; and remember, if it weren't for us, you would still be begging for food on the streets." Lady Marlie closed her eyes and took a deep breath. She opened her eyes and looked into her small mirror and shrieked. "Look what you did now!" Melody rolled her eyes.
"What now?" She said sarcastically trying to keep herself from laughing.
She looked at Melody in disbelief. "You gave me another line on my forehead! I am growing wrinkles, and I am this young? Bah! Just wait until my mother hears of this."
"What is she going to do?" Melody wrapped her arms against her chest and leaned against the wall. "Is she going to do the same thing as she always does: punish me?"
"You best mind that tongue of yours, Missy."
"Why should I?" She pestered. "Why do you care anyway?"
Lady Marlie got up from her chair and walked towards Melody, her eyes burning. She was not happy at all. They met eye to eye on nothing and Melody just couldn't get along with Lady Marlie at all. "Look here, Miss. Smarty; you are in deep water as it is right now. My mother wouldn't be happy about this either. If I were you, I would march out of this room right now. Oh, and before you do that...my bedchambers needs some tidying up."
Melody kept her head high and her face composed. "Whatever you like, my lady." She snickered and left the Lady by herself. Finally some peace and quiet...but for how long?
(A/N: This small bit gives a better description about Lady Marlie and her relationship with King Edmund. It's quite interesting.)
Sometimes I wish to believe that I am in love with him, even though I am not. King Edmund is Just, look at his title. He is called King Edmund the Just for a reason. These parties we go to together are boring and nothing exciting. To be honest, the real reason I am with this man is because he's a King. His title mean more to me than anything else. Maybe that is one reason why I am the way I am. Being with the High King would be no different. He is High King after all. I have to have Edmund attached to my hip at all times. He can not be seen with any other woman when I am around, or I will go bonkers! It is not because I am jealous of her or anything pertaining to that matter, it is because I don't want any other rat stealing his heart. He really believes that I love him. Please. The plan was to marry the King and form an alliance for crying out loud! How could this be so hard trying to keep someone with you and only you? He is beginning to fall for her and it simply won't do.
(A/N: These now are just random quotes that I had thought about in the spure of the moment.)
"What just happend?" Lucy whispered to Edmund.
"I'm not sure if I want to find out?" He replied back.
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"Why me?" Melody questioned. "Out of all the others, why would you pick me? I am not a princess, a dutchess, or a Queen at all."
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"Would you stop doing that?" Ann sneered at Melody. Melody looked at the older girl confused. "Bitting your nails! It is not lady-like." Ann looked outside the window and sighed. Melody looked down at her hands. "Sorry."
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"If you can handle trolls, you can handle women."
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"No wonder you have that attitude," he turned his head towards her direction. "No one understands where you are coming from."
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"Because you are different."
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"I have an idea!" Lucy shouted.
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Melody shivered. "How could he be in love with someone as deranged as her?" Susan shrugged.
A/N: I was thinking too that Lady Marlie isn't going to be loved by everyone. The Pevensies know her, but that doesn't mean they like her. Lucy is simply confused and doesn't understand falling in love because she is still young and innocent. Peter and Susan are suspicious of her and have adviced Edmund to watch out, but just ignored his brother and sister. Marlie has Edmund wrapped around her fingers. In fact: she's just using him.)
THAT IS ALL THAT I HAVE COME UP WITH SO FAR. OTHERS CAN HELD IF THEY WOULD LIKE TO...YOUR ADVICE WOULD HELP ME A LOT!
THANKS AGAIN 3
