Ok guys, so I'm doing this playtest/teaser thing like I've seen so many others do. I want to get an idea if these stories I've been working on are going to grab your attention. Anyway there are really two types of these things. stories with titles and those without. The ones without will have parenthesis around the chapter title, those that have a title will have just the title. This first chapter is a little something I was messing with and figured here would be a good place to put it cause you know FFnet doesn't like chapters that are all AN. Please let me know what you think about each chapter to help me improve what gets posted and what well doesn't. Thank you.
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"Hey Alfred?"
"Hmm?"
A short slightly plump girl with long brown hair and bright blue-grey eyes approaches the tall blonde haired blue eyed nation.
"I was just watching a show about the sinking of the Indianapolis..." The girl trails off as Alfred seems to get a rather haunted look in his eyes. "I take it you, uh, remember it."
"Yeah. You're not going to try and write something about it are you?"
"I was thinking about it, but I don't think I can do that."
He seems to breathe a sigh of relief.
"I figure writing a story about something like that would be pretty callous and insensitive to the people that actually experienced that horror."
"Yeah, thanks for that. You're a good kid, you know?"
The girl smiles at her nation and he smiles back.
"So..."
"I'm still making you Russia's bitch."
"Damnit."