This is a small excerpt of a story that I am currently working on. I am greatly interested in what you think of it so please leave any comments on how my story can be improved.
Grunting. Yelling. The only real sound that that has been heard throughout the cold metal prison for hours. The agony. The pain. That's all anyone could feel. The suffering, such prolonged suffering. Then came relief, silence, peace. A newborn's wails destroyed the silence. "Shut that infernal thing up", the guard clad in red placed a hand to his head at an attempt to soothe the piercing pain.
"Please can I hold it," a soft, weak whisper barely sounds over the baby's wails. A small bundle is placed in her arms. "She is beautiful. I would like her name to be-"
"What are we going to do with that thing?" She stops as she hears those words.
"Where are you taking her? Where are you taking my child?" Desperation. Fear. This newborn child, her newborn child was to be taken away from her.
"This thing is a disgrace, get it out of my sight." The bundle is ripped from the woman's arms and taken away.
My birth was unexpected and undesired. For the first few months of my life I was tossed around from person to person, never staying in one place for long. No one wanted me. The news of my existence eventually reached the royal family. The illegitimate daughter of a fire nation guard and a water bender from the Southern Water Tribe. However it was in the royal family that I was finally accepted. Crown Prince Iroh took pity on me decided to take me in, from then on I was a princess. However despite being taken in by the royal family I was still not desired. But I came to learn that my presence was not the only undesired one in the palace.