The cold, bitter wind rushed around him, swirling snow and ice, blinding him momentarily. And in that momentary blindness, he saw. He saw her red curls, cascading over her shoulders as she jumped in the water. He saw her bright eyes shining in the dying light of the fire. And he saw her heart, as he spat harsh words back in her face – he saw it breaking piece by piece. And then, with a flash of light, there he was, back amongst the swirling cold and harsh sound of firing guns.
The heat pressed upon her menacingly as she sat, her ankles crossed and her shoulders back, her bodice pressing into her ribs. She smiled graciously as she slipped on her sunglasses, exiting the restaurant with her mother. And in that momentary darkness she saw him. She saw his beautiful smile as he read her poetry in the twilight. She saw his big blue eyes as he dipped her low in the empty street. And she saw his heart as she pushed him away – she saw it breaking piece by piece. And then, with a flash of golden light, there she was. Back amongst the pressing heat and her new fiancés gentle whispers.
More?
Yes? No? I'm thinking that this could be either a one-pager in
itself or the introduction to a bigger story. But I'm not sure.
What do you think? Do you like it? Do you think that I could maybe
take it somewhere? Thanks for your opinion!
RTW