My second FanFic. I'm not really sure if I like it, can you review it?
Chapter one
I was walking in the hall when it happened.
A very handsome boy bumped into me, and we both lost our books to the floor. "Oh I am so sorry." He said, looking at me intently. He was so cute.
"Damn it, it's my fault." I said.
"Hi, I'm Seth Grand, nice to meet you."
"I'm Max Ride, nice to meet you too." Then I shook his hand. His black hair was almost covering his eyes, kind of like Fang. But I bet this guy didn't have wings. He was slim, but his chest looked developed, and he had muscular arms, which is always a plus.
"Wow, you smell really good, if only my house smelled like that." Was he flirting with me?
"Thanks."
"Say, you free Friday night?"
"Yes."
"Wanna go see a movie?"
"I'd love to."