Disgaea: A New Overlord

Welcome to the Director's Cut series of Disgaea: A New Overlord. For many of you who have read my work, you will know that I have been away for quite some time, leaving the story unfinished and probably leaving a lot of readers unsatisfied. Well now is my chance to make up for that. With the Director's Cut series, I plan on putting in all the details I left out of the original story as well as addressing the concerns of all the reviewers who left me constructive criticism. For all of you who've read the older versions and left me reviews, if you're reading this, thank you for joining me in the continuation of my series. And for all you new readers, I hope you can enjoy the New Overlord series. As with all my older work, address any issues or leave constructive criticism for me in a review and I'll be sure to take it all into account. Now without any further ado, allow me to present to you the brand new Director's Cut version of Disgaea: A New Overlord.

Chapter 1: The Indicator

It was a breezy Tuesday morning in September. School had been in session for about two weeks now. Students were already preoccupied with procuring school supplies, completing assignments, and spending time with their boyfriends and girlfriends. Yes, the school year was already in full swing at the public school of Lunarvale Academy. All except for one student in particular. 15 year old Chiaki Hyafumi was preoccupied with something that interested her more than books and homework. Chiaki was busy investigating the existence of the Netherworld. She had been ever since she saw an odd penguin shaped shadow on her way to school one day. Her research led her to believe that what she saw was in fact a Prinny. Chiaki was on her way to school with her face buried in a book about the occult when she had looked up briefly and spotted her friend Miroku Megami.

"Hey! Miroku!" Chiaki yelled, as she picked up her pace to approach him.

"That voice…kind of like nails on a chalkboard. It could only be…" Miroku said to himself as he turned to face her. "Chiaki."

"Aww, you don't sound like you're happy to see me." Chiaki whined.

Miroku hated to hear Chiaki whine. It annoyed him to such a degree that he would do just about anything to prevent it.

"No, no. I'm very happy to see you." Miroku replied sincerely. He had not seen Chiaki since they went on summer break.

"I thought so." Chiaki replied with a condescending tone. "Aren't you going to be late for class?"

"Nah, I've got time."

"Why aren't you at school yet anyway? I bet you stopped off to get something to eat again, didn't you? Why don't you just eat at home?" Chiaki inquired.

"Nothing that I feel like having at home." Miroku remarked passively.

"Than just what exactly do you feel like eating?" Chiaki snatched the wrapper Miroku was holding from him.

"Hey, don't just grab something out of someone's hand! And if you have to know, I'm eating store brand pound cake."

"How can you stand to eat this junk so early in the morning?" Chiaki remanded with a maternal voice. "Aren't you worried about your health?"

"I just need the energy it provides to get through the morning. I'll be fine after I get my energy drink into my system to wash it down. I usually eat healthy anyway, and you know that. You're the one who's always bringing me all that organic stuff."

"I'm just looking out for you. Oh! I almost forgot. I have something I want to show you." Chiaki exclaimed as she rifled through her school bag.

"Something to show me?" Miroku echoed. It was a bad habit he had picked up somewhere along the line growing up. He didn't really remember when, but since it never really bothered anyone, he didn't see it as being such a problem. "It's not another purple penguin feather, is it?" Miroku teased.

"I swear to you they exist!" Chiaki replied earnestly. "But that's not what I wanted to show you. I wanted you to see this." Chiaki produced a compass-like item from her bag.

Miroku looked the item up and down before he took it from Chiaki's hand. He gave it a total once over and then handed it back to her.

"You wanted to show me some funky looking compass? Ooh, really special." Miroku mocked.

"It's not a compass!" Chiaki snapped. "For your information, it's a Mana Level Indicator. I bought it from that occult shop near the mall." Chiaki's words had a sense of pride to them.

"A mana level indicator?" Miroku could barely contain his own laughter. "You really think this thing works? Chiaki, you got totally ripped off. You're the only person I know who can be conned into buying just about anything."

"It does work! I know it does! Just watch."

Chiaki grabbed Miroku's arm and placed the compass on his wrist, making sure to secure it with the strap. The needle inside the indicator made a full circle and then stopped in the place where it had started from. Other than that, it didn't do anything.

"You sure showed me Chiaki. I completely believe in your indicator now." Miroku replied, rolling his eyes.

"Stop making fun of me! I don't know what happened." Chiaki said in earnest, examining the indicator carefully as she removed it from Miroku's wrist. "It should have given you an accurate reading of your mana level."

"Chiaki, just face facts. The occult shop owner sold you a piece of junk. If you want, I'll go with you after school and get your money back. After school…"

Miroku's eyes widened in shock. He looked at his watch and his eyes opened even wider (which seemed impossible) when he noticed the time.

"My first class started ten minutes ago! I can't believe I took so long!" Miroku started. He took off down the street, calling back to Chiaki without stopping. "Meet me after school and I'll go with you!" And with that, Miroku was gone.

Chiaki watched as Miroku slowly disappeared from view until he was completely gone from her line of sight. She seemed more concerned with why the indicator was acting strange. She hadn't really given it a test run but she figured it would have done something more than making the needle run a full circle. Chiaki headed on her way to school, somewhat oblivious to what was going on around her. Her eyes were fixated on the indicator, looking up only to check the crosswalk lights. Her trip to school seemed much shorter than normal because, when she finally drew her eyes away from the indicator, she was already standing at the front gates of Lunarvale.

And that's the end of the very first chapter of Disgaea: A New Overlord, the Director's Cut version. I've used a lot more in terms of personification and I cleaned up my writing style a little bit from the older version of A New Overlord. As it always was, comments and constructive criticism are always welcome. Also, feel free to email me about anything else that can't be handled in a review. I hope you've enjoyed the very first chapter and I hope to continue bringing you quality work.