Pokémon: The betrayal

So this is my first fanfic and I'm really excited about it. Of course that means that my writing won't be as professional as it will be later on. Anyways, I have been reading many fanfics where Ash (Pokémon) is betrayed and I thought I'd give it a try. I have no idea how's its going to go, but enjoy!

I am very happy with reviews that give me advice on how to improve myself but please, don't make hate comments.

As I speak here in bold, I am currently writing chapter 12. This chapter is really short, does not describe things very good nor is it very good. You people who read this and think that my writing completely sucks, please check out my newer chapters, I have really improved. Why am I telling you this? Because I think that you should give my story a chance. The first chapters might be a pain to read but it gets better as we advance into the story. Please people, give this a chance!

-Nr 755

Chapter 1: And so the journey begins

''Look Pikachu, were finally in Pallet!''

Ash had lost the Unova league and after that Iris and Cilan had left to accomplish their dreams and Ash went home to Pallet town. Ash wasn't very happy with losing a league again but he was happy to be home again.

''Hey, it's Mr. Mime.'' As they got closer Mime saw them and went into the house and informed Delia that they were finally home.

''Mom, I'm home!''

Delia rushed to Ash to give him a hug.

''Mom, I…can't…breathe''

''I'm so happy that you are finally home, Ash, come and take something to eat.''

''Sorry mom, I want to meet with my old Pokémon at the lab.''

''No problems, darling. I'll be waiting.''

''Come on Pikachu, let's go!''

''Pikaaa''

They hurried to the lab, wanting to meet with their old friends. When they finally arrived they saw that all the other travellers except for Iris and Cilan were standing there and talking. When Ash arrived, they all became quiet and looked at Ash.

Ash spoke up ''Hey guys, what are you doing here?''

Brock came forward and said: ''Ash, we need to talk to you.''

''Sure Brock, what is it?''

''You are a problem, you just keep on losing in the leagues and you're not a good trainer at all, and you should just give it all up and do something that you don't suck at.''

''…Brock, what are you saying, you're all joking right?''

Misty came forward ''We are not joking at all, you're really bad Ash!''

''Do you all agree to this?'' Ash said.

''We do Ash!'' All answered.

''I HATE YOU GUYS! I'm going to become a Pokémon master and then I'm going to be laughing at you!''

He threw his Pokeball and Charizard came out of it. ''Fly us out of here, to somewhere where no one can find us!''

While Ash flew away, he didn't see that Max silently went away from the group and had tears in his eyes. Max didn't want this but he couldn't take a stand against all the others.

All the others wanted Ash to feel pain because he was such a weakling. Misty threw her Pokeball containing Gyarados.

''Gyarados, use flamethrower on Ash´s house!''

The house began to burn. The flames got bigger and bigger as they engulfed the house. They heard a cry from inside seeking help.

May said ''Must be Delia''

''Screw her; Ash deserves nothing because he's such a loser.'' Misty said.

The cry stopped and the house was burned down to the grounds, and no one saw Ash in a very long time…

So yeah guys, pretty short chapter but don't worry, I will make them longer later on.

Please write what you thought about it and please give me advice on my writing.

Until next time, see ya.