Forsaken
Don't Own Naruto
#1 Return of Naruto or Should I say Raze?
Sakura ran through the busy streets of the Hidden Leaf village. She was a highly
respected Chunin. She was an instructor at the ninja academy. She was trained by the fifth
Hokage herself.
"Someone's running parallel to me," Sakura said as she looked to her side. Her boyfriend
Sasuke was running the rooftops towards the same location. Sasuke was one of the best Jounin
nowadays of the Leaf. Sakura turned her head and headed for the Hokage Tower.
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"Are you sure about this information?" Tsunade asked as she stood up.
"Not yet but it's good to be prepared," Naruto said. He had a Sand-Nin vest on and a
Sand headband. The lower part of his face hidden in a mask like the one Kakashi wears. He had
a cloak they wore in their country but it looked like a cape at the moment.
"Why else are you back here Naruto? Any Sand-Nin could have come instead of you,"
Tsunade said.
"Some loose ends," Naruto said, "I'm here to take part in the Hyuga challenge. I heard
Hinata and Neji's team needs a fifth member,"
"Raze Kazemirage of the Sand devils wants to fight in a Taijutsu tournament?" Tsunade
asked.
"I hope start this. I want to help end this," Naruto said.
"I'll sent for people to show you during your stay." Tsunade said
"Who?" Naruto asked.
"You called for us?" Sasuke asked as he and Sakura came in. Naruto's eyes observed
them. Sakura had more reddish hair now and it was tied at end. About halfway down her back.
She had general speaking the same clothes as other Chunins. Her lead headband still top of her
head.
"You," Sasuke said as he pointed at Naruto, "You're the one who defeated me in the
Jounin exam,
"Yeah so what?" Naruto asked.
"You and me outside. I want to see how strong you are now," Sasuke said. Naruto or
Raze grinned as he walked through the door.
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Raze stepped into the courtyard. He grabbed his cloak and threw it away. He cracked his
neck as Sasuke walked onto the courtyard. Raze seemed to seemed to fiddle with his right hand
than he pulled out a strange weapon. With a flick of his arm the weapon expanded into a 'wing'
of blades.
"Raze Kazemirage of the Razor Wing," A ninja said. They came to watch the fight. Word
spread fast about fights.
"Against Sasuke of the Uchiha clan," Another said.
"But didn't Raze defeat Sasuke in the Jounin a few years back?" Another asked. Raze's
right eye twitched a bit as if he was trying to control himself.
"Come on. Bring it," Raze said as took his fighting stance. His bladed wing pointed at
Sasuke.
'He's a master of sand like Gaara,' Sasuke said as he remembered his eye with Raze
before. For some reason Sasuke couldn't copy Raze's techniques. Raze ran at Sasuke. His blade
ready to strike.
'He's moving as fast as Lee!' Sakura thought as Raze vanished. Sasuke ducked as Raze
phased into sight. Raze had his arm out to strike. Raze grinned as he rolled over Sasuke as he
tried to do is Lion Randen.
'He saw that coming!' Sasuke thought as he made a couple of hand seals.
'Shit,' Naruto said as he recalled the attack. He looked at his shoulder to see a string and
the strong was held in Sasuke's mouth.
"Katon! Ryuuka no Jutsu!" Sasuke yelled as he let out a stream of fire along the string.
"Suna no yoroi!" Raze yelled as sand from his cloak covered his body protecting him
from the fire.
"That cloak held sand?" Sasuke asked. Suddenly Raze ran to attack. Raze threw his
bladed wings at Sasuke.
"Kawarimi no Jutsu," Sasuke said as he was covered in smoke. A log was hit by the
blade. Suddenly Raze was kicked into the air by Sasuke. Sasuke followed Raze with the shadow
leaf dance. Sasuke made Raze spinning.
"Lion randen!" Sasuke yelled as he kicked Raze's arm and side then on Raze's other
side. Sasuke followed up with a backfist then a clothline. Sasuke finished with a drilling kick.
Raze was drove hard into the ground.
"Hahahaha!" Raze yelled as the armor cracked away to his masked face.
"Bye bye," Raze said as he disappeared into smoke.
"A Kage Bunshin!" Sasuke yelled as suddenly two hands came out of the ground and
pulled Sasuke under. Raze exploded out of the ground.
"I can't believe it! That's the same way Kakashi beat him," Sakura said. Sasuke exploded
out of the ground. His arm lit up with lightning or chakra.
"Chidori," Raze said, "Too bad you can't use it. Desert coffin," Sasuke looked down to
see sand most of his body had sand around him. The sand clasped around him. Sasuke found he
couldn't move at all. The sand was too strong.
'He had a counter for all of my moves,' Sasuke thought as Raze let the Desert coffin let
go.
"Know your opponent before you fight them," Raze said.
"Sasuke. If had enough of getting your butt kicked you and Sakura mind showing him
around. He's staying at the inn," Tsunade said, "He's also join the 'radicals' in the Hyuga team,"
"Hinata and Neji's Team?' Sakura asked.
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"Hey brat," Kiba's sister said as she walked in, "Hey Hinata. What you doing over?"
Hinata looked at her with her silvery white eyes.
"Hello Inuzuka-san," Hinata said nicely.
"How many times do i have to tell you? Call me Kaika," Kaika said. She was a Chunin
ninja of the Inuzuka clan. She was Kiba's older sister too. Behind her was her dog Kiger. She
pulled the reg and grabbed a snack.
"I don't know why you ever decided to date this brat," Kaika said as she messed Kiba's
hair even more.
"Stop that!" Kiba yelled as he tried to stop her. She grabbed Akamaru and ran. Kiba
chased after her.
"They're so close," Hinata said as she watched Kiba finally catching up but Kiaka
grabbed Kiba in a headlock. She gave him a nuggie. Hinata giggled as she watched.
"I wished my home was like that," Hinata whispered.
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"6! 7! 8!" Neji counted. His Byakugan was active.
"Neji!" Tenten yelled as she ran into his training spot.
"What is it?" Neji asked. His voice wasn't cold and heartless.
"The Hokage has just told me that the fifth member of your team has been decided,"
Tenten said. She was tried from running.
'With Hyuga's influence. It's some weaklling,' Neji thought.
"Raze....Kaze....mir...age," Tenten said as she took in deep breaths.
"Raze Kazemirage?" Neji asked, "Of the sand?"
"The one and same," Tenten said as she leaned against a tree. 9 birds flew overhead.
"I missed one again," Neji said
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"This is the info-card with the information on Raze Kazemirage," The Chunin said as he
handed Lee the info-card.
"Thank you," Lee said as he took it and headed for his table in the libary. Lee sat down
and handed it over to Neji. Neji activated it with his chakra.
"Raze Kazemirage. Age is 19. He's a year yonger than us," Tenten said.
"He's part of the Sand Devils with Gaara, Kankuro and Temari," Neji read, "A master of
numerous ninjutsu arts beyond that of the Sand. His main Taijutsu style is called Kage Kiri Ryu.
Shadow edge dragon style,"
"Raze's past is undetermined. All that is known is he wasn't born in the sand. His past is
unknown. He has immerse chakra at his disposal. He has a Class S rating. Believed to be part of
the Sand Anbu squad," Tenten read.
"Impressive but why does he want to help us?" Neji asked.
"This is the libary. Any information you need you can find here," Sakura said as she,
Sasuke and Raze walked in.
"The sand has something like this," Raze commented, "But this is much bigger," In a
second he came face to face with Neji.
"What?" Raze asked.
"You're Raze Kazemirage right," Neji siad.
"Yeah so what about it Neji Hyuga?" Raze asked.
"I saw to see what strength you have. Come on and fight me," Neji said.
"Ok whatever. What's up with all of these fights?" Raze asked as he walked outside.
"Neji. You're going to lose," Sasuke said as Neji passed. Raze walked into the air
outside. He looked around to find no real place for a fight.
"Let's take this elsewhere," Raze said.
"There's a clear a mile south south west of here. We can fight there," Neji said. Raze
disappeared in a cloud of smoke. Neji jumped and headed for the spot.
"Let's go," Sasuke said as he followed Neji. Sakura, Lee and Tenten followed.
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"Hokage-san. Raze has been challenged ince again this time by Neji of the Hyuga branch
family," Jounin reported.
"Raze should be able to handle Neji," Hokage said.
"Hokage-sama. How powerful is this Sand-Nin?" The Jounin asked.
"In the history of the Leaf only one could challenge him. That Ninja isn't here anyway
driven away," Tsunade said as she looked away.
"You can't mean that Sand-Nin is on the level of the Demons?" The Jounin asked.
Tsunade remained silent.
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"Able time you got here," Raze said as he stood up, "You use the Hyuga Ryu style of
Gentle fist right?" Sakura noticed something was off from when she first sa
"So I'm that infamous?" Neji asked.
"I was at the Chunin tournament 7 years ago," Raze said as he took a strange fighting
stance. His feet were about a shoulder apart and his hands were open.
'What style is that?' Neji asked.
"Come on and bring it already," Raze said as he flick his hand signalling for Neji to
fight.
"You're not going to strike first? Then I will," Raze said as something exploded out of th
forest behind Neji. Neji spun around and strikethe bunshin right in the chest. It exploded in
smoke as Raze ran at him. Raze was about to hit when Neji glowed.
"Kaiten!" Neji yelled as he spun around. Raze was thrown away.
'I forgot about that,' Raze thought as he took his fighting stance again.
'He always spin left,' Raze thought as he charged. Neji grinned as chakra came out of
him ready to use the Kaiten.
"Ah!" Raze yelled as he was about to punch with his left hand. Neji spun as Raze shifted
weigh and hit a chakra reinforced right kick. Neji was knocked the other direction and Neji went
flying.
"What the!?" Neji yelled.
"The Kaiten is a spin. You can cancel out a tornado with a tornado that spins the other
opposite direction," Raze said as he took his fighting stance.
'Time for offense,' Neji thought as he took his fighting stance. Neji lunged forward with
his hand out. Raze ducked seem to slap Neji's chest. Raze rolled away from Neji. Neji straight
himself suddenly he fell to hisknee holding his chest.
"What was that?" Neji asked. His eyes were widen.
"Kage Jyuuken," Raze said as he held up his hand. Neji saw it. Normally chakra had a
bight color but the chakra that was coming off his hand was dark. Barely visible.
"That chakra is darker so it was barely visible but I can seem to copy it," Sasuke said.
"Kage Jyuuken can't be copied. The type of Chakra you need is dark chaka which you
don't have," Raze said, "It's what Kabuto's snake attack are based on. One good strike I can
break your entire spinal cord. Want to give up? I'm out of your league,"
"Give it now," Neji said weakly. Raze chuckled as he seemed to grin under his mask. For
Sasuke and Sakura they were used to it.
"Good," Raze said as he disappeared. Suddenly Neji was blasted backward. Raze
appeared with his foot stretched out.
"Is that the best you got?" Neji asked as he stumbled to his feet.
"He's as fast as Gai-Sempai!" Lee yelled.
"He's as fast and as strong as Gai-Sensei," Tenten said, "Add in he knows a Gentle Fist
style,"
"Want to end this now? We have that much of a reason to fight," Raze said with a smile
as he shook his hand side to side limply.
"Sure," Neji said as he collapsed on his face.
"Neji!" Tenten yelled as she ran over to Neji.
'He's extremely strong,' Neji said to himself as Tenten helped him up, 'Like HIM,'
Author's Note
This is a rewrite of the story I wrote in English and that I posted already. It's more
thought out this time around and will have a few twists compared to the first draft. Hope you like
it
Don't Own Naruto
#1 Return of Naruto or Should I say Raze?
Sakura ran through the busy streets of the Hidden Leaf village. She was a highly
respected Chunin. She was an instructor at the ninja academy. She was trained by the fifth
Hokage herself.
"Someone's running parallel to me," Sakura said as she looked to her side. Her boyfriend
Sasuke was running the rooftops towards the same location. Sasuke was one of the best Jounin
nowadays of the Leaf. Sakura turned her head and headed for the Hokage Tower.
***********************************************************************
"Are you sure about this information?" Tsunade asked as she stood up.
"Not yet but it's good to be prepared," Naruto said. He had a Sand-Nin vest on and a
Sand headband. The lower part of his face hidden in a mask like the one Kakashi wears. He had
a cloak they wore in their country but it looked like a cape at the moment.
"Why else are you back here Naruto? Any Sand-Nin could have come instead of you,"
Tsunade said.
"Some loose ends," Naruto said, "I'm here to take part in the Hyuga challenge. I heard
Hinata and Neji's team needs a fifth member,"
"Raze Kazemirage of the Sand devils wants to fight in a Taijutsu tournament?" Tsunade
asked.
"I hope start this. I want to help end this," Naruto said.
"I'll sent for people to show you during your stay." Tsunade said
"Who?" Naruto asked.
"You called for us?" Sasuke asked as he and Sakura came in. Naruto's eyes observed
them. Sakura had more reddish hair now and it was tied at end. About halfway down her back.
She had general speaking the same clothes as other Chunins. Her lead headband still top of her
head.
"You," Sasuke said as he pointed at Naruto, "You're the one who defeated me in the
Jounin exam,
"Yeah so what?" Naruto asked.
"You and me outside. I want to see how strong you are now," Sasuke said. Naruto or
Raze grinned as he walked through the door.
***********************************************************************
Raze stepped into the courtyard. He grabbed his cloak and threw it away. He cracked his
neck as Sasuke walked onto the courtyard. Raze seemed to seemed to fiddle with his right hand
than he pulled out a strange weapon. With a flick of his arm the weapon expanded into a 'wing'
of blades.
"Raze Kazemirage of the Razor Wing," A ninja said. They came to watch the fight. Word
spread fast about fights.
"Against Sasuke of the Uchiha clan," Another said.
"But didn't Raze defeat Sasuke in the Jounin a few years back?" Another asked. Raze's
right eye twitched a bit as if he was trying to control himself.
"Come on. Bring it," Raze said as took his fighting stance. His bladed wing pointed at
Sasuke.
'He's a master of sand like Gaara,' Sasuke said as he remembered his eye with Raze
before. For some reason Sasuke couldn't copy Raze's techniques. Raze ran at Sasuke. His blade
ready to strike.
'He's moving as fast as Lee!' Sakura thought as Raze vanished. Sasuke ducked as Raze
phased into sight. Raze had his arm out to strike. Raze grinned as he rolled over Sasuke as he
tried to do is Lion Randen.
'He saw that coming!' Sasuke thought as he made a couple of hand seals.
'Shit,' Naruto said as he recalled the attack. He looked at his shoulder to see a string and
the strong was held in Sasuke's mouth.
"Katon! Ryuuka no Jutsu!" Sasuke yelled as he let out a stream of fire along the string.
"Suna no yoroi!" Raze yelled as sand from his cloak covered his body protecting him
from the fire.
"That cloak held sand?" Sasuke asked. Suddenly Raze ran to attack. Raze threw his
bladed wings at Sasuke.
"Kawarimi no Jutsu," Sasuke said as he was covered in smoke. A log was hit by the
blade. Suddenly Raze was kicked into the air by Sasuke. Sasuke followed Raze with the shadow
leaf dance. Sasuke made Raze spinning.
"Lion randen!" Sasuke yelled as he kicked Raze's arm and side then on Raze's other
side. Sasuke followed up with a backfist then a clothline. Sasuke finished with a drilling kick.
Raze was drove hard into the ground.
"Hahahaha!" Raze yelled as the armor cracked away to his masked face.
"Bye bye," Raze said as he disappeared into smoke.
"A Kage Bunshin!" Sasuke yelled as suddenly two hands came out of the ground and
pulled Sasuke under. Raze exploded out of the ground.
"I can't believe it! That's the same way Kakashi beat him," Sakura said. Sasuke exploded
out of the ground. His arm lit up with lightning or chakra.
"Chidori," Raze said, "Too bad you can't use it. Desert coffin," Sasuke looked down to
see sand most of his body had sand around him. The sand clasped around him. Sasuke found he
couldn't move at all. The sand was too strong.
'He had a counter for all of my moves,' Sasuke thought as Raze let the Desert coffin let
go.
"Know your opponent before you fight them," Raze said.
"Sasuke. If had enough of getting your butt kicked you and Sakura mind showing him
around. He's staying at the inn," Tsunade said, "He's also join the 'radicals' in the Hyuga team,"
"Hinata and Neji's Team?' Sakura asked.
**************************************************************
"Hey brat," Kiba's sister said as she walked in, "Hey Hinata. What you doing over?"
Hinata looked at her with her silvery white eyes.
"Hello Inuzuka-san," Hinata said nicely.
"How many times do i have to tell you? Call me Kaika," Kaika said. She was a Chunin
ninja of the Inuzuka clan. She was Kiba's older sister too. Behind her was her dog Kiger. She
pulled the reg and grabbed a snack.
"I don't know why you ever decided to date this brat," Kaika said as she messed Kiba's
hair even more.
"Stop that!" Kiba yelled as he tried to stop her. She grabbed Akamaru and ran. Kiba
chased after her.
"They're so close," Hinata said as she watched Kiba finally catching up but Kiaka
grabbed Kiba in a headlock. She gave him a nuggie. Hinata giggled as she watched.
"I wished my home was like that," Hinata whispered.
**************************************************************
"6! 7! 8!" Neji counted. His Byakugan was active.
"Neji!" Tenten yelled as she ran into his training spot.
"What is it?" Neji asked. His voice wasn't cold and heartless.
"The Hokage has just told me that the fifth member of your team has been decided,"
Tenten said. She was tried from running.
'With Hyuga's influence. It's some weaklling,' Neji thought.
"Raze....Kaze....mir...age," Tenten said as she took in deep breaths.
"Raze Kazemirage?" Neji asked, "Of the sand?"
"The one and same," Tenten said as she leaned against a tree. 9 birds flew overhead.
"I missed one again," Neji said
*************************************************************
"This is the info-card with the information on Raze Kazemirage," The Chunin said as he
handed Lee the info-card.
"Thank you," Lee said as he took it and headed for his table in the libary. Lee sat down
and handed it over to Neji. Neji activated it with his chakra.
"Raze Kazemirage. Age is 19. He's a year yonger than us," Tenten said.
"He's part of the Sand Devils with Gaara, Kankuro and Temari," Neji read, "A master of
numerous ninjutsu arts beyond that of the Sand. His main Taijutsu style is called Kage Kiri Ryu.
Shadow edge dragon style,"
"Raze's past is undetermined. All that is known is he wasn't born in the sand. His past is
unknown. He has immerse chakra at his disposal. He has a Class S rating. Believed to be part of
the Sand Anbu squad," Tenten read.
"Impressive but why does he want to help us?" Neji asked.
"This is the libary. Any information you need you can find here," Sakura said as she,
Sasuke and Raze walked in.
"The sand has something like this," Raze commented, "But this is much bigger," In a
second he came face to face with Neji.
"What?" Raze asked.
"You're Raze Kazemirage right," Neji siad.
"Yeah so what about it Neji Hyuga?" Raze asked.
"I saw to see what strength you have. Come on and fight me," Neji said.
"Ok whatever. What's up with all of these fights?" Raze asked as he walked outside.
"Neji. You're going to lose," Sasuke said as Neji passed. Raze walked into the air
outside. He looked around to find no real place for a fight.
"Let's take this elsewhere," Raze said.
"There's a clear a mile south south west of here. We can fight there," Neji said. Raze
disappeared in a cloud of smoke. Neji jumped and headed for the spot.
"Let's go," Sasuke said as he followed Neji. Sakura, Lee and Tenten followed.
**********************************************************************
"Hokage-san. Raze has been challenged ince again this time by Neji of the Hyuga branch
family," Jounin reported.
"Raze should be able to handle Neji," Hokage said.
"Hokage-sama. How powerful is this Sand-Nin?" The Jounin asked.
"In the history of the Leaf only one could challenge him. That Ninja isn't here anyway
driven away," Tsunade said as she looked away.
"You can't mean that Sand-Nin is on the level of the Demons?" The Jounin asked.
Tsunade remained silent.
*******************************************************************
"Able time you got here," Raze said as he stood up, "You use the Hyuga Ryu style of
Gentle fist right?" Sakura noticed something was off from when she first sa
"So I'm that infamous?" Neji asked.
"I was at the Chunin tournament 7 years ago," Raze said as he took a strange fighting
stance. His feet were about a shoulder apart and his hands were open.
'What style is that?' Neji asked.
"Come on and bring it already," Raze said as he flick his hand signalling for Neji to
fight.
"You're not going to strike first? Then I will," Raze said as something exploded out of th
forest behind Neji. Neji spun around and strikethe bunshin right in the chest. It exploded in
smoke as Raze ran at him. Raze was about to hit when Neji glowed.
"Kaiten!" Neji yelled as he spun around. Raze was thrown away.
'I forgot about that,' Raze thought as he took his fighting stance again.
'He always spin left,' Raze thought as he charged. Neji grinned as chakra came out of
him ready to use the Kaiten.
"Ah!" Raze yelled as he was about to punch with his left hand. Neji spun as Raze shifted
weigh and hit a chakra reinforced right kick. Neji was knocked the other direction and Neji went
flying.
"What the!?" Neji yelled.
"The Kaiten is a spin. You can cancel out a tornado with a tornado that spins the other
opposite direction," Raze said as he took his fighting stance.
'Time for offense,' Neji thought as he took his fighting stance. Neji lunged forward with
his hand out. Raze ducked seem to slap Neji's chest. Raze rolled away from Neji. Neji straight
himself suddenly he fell to hisknee holding his chest.
"What was that?" Neji asked. His eyes were widen.
"Kage Jyuuken," Raze said as he held up his hand. Neji saw it. Normally chakra had a
bight color but the chakra that was coming off his hand was dark. Barely visible.
"That chakra is darker so it was barely visible but I can seem to copy it," Sasuke said.
"Kage Jyuuken can't be copied. The type of Chakra you need is dark chaka which you
don't have," Raze said, "It's what Kabuto's snake attack are based on. One good strike I can
break your entire spinal cord. Want to give up? I'm out of your league,"
"Give it now," Neji said weakly. Raze chuckled as he seemed to grin under his mask. For
Sasuke and Sakura they were used to it.
"Good," Raze said as he disappeared. Suddenly Neji was blasted backward. Raze
appeared with his foot stretched out.
"Is that the best you got?" Neji asked as he stumbled to his feet.
"He's as fast as Gai-Sempai!" Lee yelled.
"He's as fast and as strong as Gai-Sensei," Tenten said, "Add in he knows a Gentle Fist
style,"
"Want to end this now? We have that much of a reason to fight," Raze said with a smile
as he shook his hand side to side limply.
"Sure," Neji said as he collapsed on his face.
"Neji!" Tenten yelled as she ran over to Neji.
'He's extremely strong,' Neji said to himself as Tenten helped him up, 'Like HIM,'
Author's Note
This is a rewrite of the story I wrote in English and that I posted already. It's more
thought out this time around and will have a few twists compared to the first draft. Hope you like
it
