Hi, this is my first fanfiction, so I want to know what you thinkof it. Please review and let me know what I did wrong or what I should do better. You can also tell me what you think of the story and offer ideas, too. Thanks!
Disclaimer: Don't worry. I am not Rick Riordan or J.K. Rowling. I think I would know if I was.
Annabeth POV
"Percy, you do not need seven blankets for one plane flight to England!"
"But, Annabeth, three of them have tridents on them."
"Percy," I warned.
"Okay, okay," he answered, "I'll only bring two."
"Two! Okay, okay, fine. That's it, though."
"Okay," Percy responded, hopefully giving up.
Percy and I were going to England for a couple weeks because it has amazing arcitecture that I needed to see. We also needed a bit of a break. Will amd Nico were also going. It was probably a good thing that Will was going because, knowing Percy, it was good to have a doctor on hand. He would manage to find some sort of trouble. We left the next day, and Percy was being difficult with packing. It's a good thing he has me, because he's pretty hopeless. I love him, but he is.
"Annabeth?" Percy questioned, pulling me out of my thoughts.
"Yeah?" I answered.
"Are we going to continue packing?"
"Yeah, okay." I said looking down at the two blue and gray suitcases open before us. Mine was mostly full, but Percy's - well, we were working on that.
"These shorts?" he asked, holding up a pair of khaki shorts.
"Yes, it's summer, remember. But make sure to bring a couple pairs of jeans. It rains sometimes in England."
"I know," Percy said, rolling his sea-green eyes. "You've only said that like, I don't know, twelve times, maybe more." He shrugged, then turned back to the suitcases. "Hmm, how many Camp Half-Blood shirts should I bring? How about four?"
"That sounds good, but you should bring other shirts beside your Camp Half-Blood ones."
"Really?" he whined.
"Yes, Percy. You can't wear the same kind of shirt every day."
"Hmph," Percy grunted.
Now it was my turn to roll my eyes. "Oh, stop complaining. You have other shirts that you like." I said, standing up and going towards his closet. "What about this one?" I asked, holding up a blue striped shirt.
"Sure," Percy answered, getting up to join me in front of his closet. We were at his house, getting ready for the trip. Before I came, I had already mostly packed my suitcase, but I wasn't quite done. I had brought a bag full of clothes to try and finish my suitcase with Percy.
I gave him the shirt to put in his suitcase, along with a couple others. "Really? This one?" he asked, handing me back the red shirt I had given to him in the pile.
"Yes, that one." I said, passing the shirt back to him. He made a face, but put the shirt in his suitcase anyway.
"Does anybody want a blue cookie? They are freshly baked," asked Percy's mom, Sally, as she walked into the room.
"Is that even a question? Of course I want one," Percy exclaimed. "Do you want one, Annabeth?"
"Sure," I shrugged.
Percy grabbed three off the plate Sally was holding, shoved one in his mouth, handed one to me, and then ate the other one, a little more slowly.
"Percy, slow down. You're going to choke!" Sally scolded.
"I'm fine, Mom. I saved the world twice! I'm not going to die from choking." Percy responded.
"Okay, continue packing. Let me know if you need anything," Sally said to both of us as she left the room.
"Alright, Percy," I said, when Sally left. "We're almost done. You just need a couple pairs of shorts and pants."
"Okay, how about all of these?" Percy asked, holding up a couple pairs of shorts and pants.
"Those are good. We're done with your suitcase. All we need now is your toiletries and carry-on bag." I responded.
"Alright. I'll get toiletries in the morning, but we can do the carry-on bag now." Percy said, grabbing a backpack from his closet. "Okay, what do I need?"
"Umm . . . let's see. You'll probably need something to do on the plane, some drachmas to contact people via the Mist, a water bottle to fill at the airport, some nectar and ambrosia, and, of course, Riptide."
"What about my phone?" Percy asked.
"Yeah, bring that." I answered. "I almost forgot that Leo made it possible for demigods to have phones." Leo installed a device on mortal phones so the signal could be hidden from monsters. While he was trying to make the device - well, let's just say that Leo had to fight off a lot of monsters.
"What about snacks?" Percy asked, as he gathered all the items I had named and put them in his backpack.
"Really?" I asked, fixing Percy with a stare. "Do you think about food all the time?"
"Pretty much," he answered.
"We can get snacks at the airport. Also, maybe lunch for on the plane. Okay, I think we're all done." I said as I gathered my things. "Good job, Percy. See you tomorrow, bright and early."
"Ugh," Percy complained. "Getting up early was never my strong suit."
"Deal with it," I said, pecking Percy on the cheek. "Bye, love you."
"Love you, too." I heard him mumble as I walked out the door.
"Bye, Sally. Bye, Paul." I called to Percy's mom and stepdad. "Bye, Elaine." I said, a little more softly to Percy's seven-month old sister.
"See you tomorrow, Annabeth. I'll make sure Percy is up in the morning." Sally said, as Paul waved from his seat on the couch.
"Thanks. See you tomorrow." I said, walking out the door. I headed back to the apartment I was renting for the summer. Percy and I were going to Camp Jupiter for college in the fall, and we weren't staying at Camp Half-Blood this summer. Sure, I spent most days there, but the apartment was worth it.
When I reached my door, I pulled out my keys and unlocked it. I entered my apartment and set my stuff down. I grabbed a backpack and got my carry-on bag. I made a quick dinner, then got into pajamas, turned out the lights, and got into bed.
Hopefully I would have no dreams tonight.
Okay, I hope you enjoyed that. That chapter was more for my benefit, then anyone elses, so I could practice writing in Annabeth's POV. Harry, Ron, and Hermione will hopefully be in the story in the next couple chapters. So, sorry if it was slow, but, trust me, it gets better. I don't know when I'll have the next chapter up, but I hope it's soon.
Please review, and critism is welcome, just don't be mean.
Thank you!
